View source for Talk:Dirty Talk/Three Brats/June 19th, 2021/Trip to Trolleby

I fixed a few little typos but also expanded on some of the dialogue. Love it overall, but some parts felt a little rushed and I thought Stella needed to come across as a bit more hurt for her to still have something to settle from a year ago. --[[User:Villenia|Villenia]] ([[User talk:Villenia|talk]]) 20:31, 5 October 2022 (CEST)

Appreciate it. I'll copy the changes to my files, so I don't accidentally revert them. -- [[User:Innocent Ruin|Innocent Ruin]] ([[User talk:Innocent Ruin|talk]]) 21:00, 5 October 2022 (CEST)

Man Innocent R i knew you were preparing to drop a bomb you been setting it up for a few days now and BAM what a bomb it was great work im super interested in where this is going because in this part of the story things are developing outside the family and oh boi im curious on how this goes. and the way she learned about Jokers was amazing and clever in this side of the story it comes from the one who probably knows the most and we even get that Emilia grandma was like her and we learned about Aces too ha. and Emilia being skeptical is great too after all who believe a god talk to them. Love it great work and Villenia i like the small changes great work.	--[[User:Xephion|Xephion]] ([[User talk:Xephion|talk]]) 21:24, 5 October 2022 (CEST)

Thanks. I made the cardinal sin of "writing ahead" to store some of my ideas and finished this before I got to finishing the previous page, so I was just sitting on it. Not that I would've let the choice on previous page to choice, since I want to move away from incest for a while. And yeah, it makes more sense for her to still stay a little skeptical as she hasn't seen proof of the supernatural being real quite yet in this path. Maybe she might see proof later? Not on the 19th necessarily, and kinda depends on where the ball will roll, and how hard I want to lean into the supernatural. -- [[User:Innocent Ruin|Innocent Ruin]] ([[User talk:Innocent Ruin|talk]]) 21:38, 5 October 2022 (CEST)