Talk:Dirty Talk/Three Brats/June 17th, 2021/Laura

This whole story is incredible! To the author: did you draw all the art yourself? It's pretty detailed with the expressions and clothing changes too. --Green (talk) 02:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

• Thank you! It's a mish-mash of old ideas I've had, most of which I lost motivation for. I'm glad it's turning out to be enjoyable! The drawings aren't mine, I couldn't draw a stick figure straight with a ruler. They're just suitable ones I've found from pixiv and exhentai. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 11:07, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

Fun idea: Laura calls Emilia to warn her but isn't direct, tries to tell her "those girls are going to get you into trouble" and Emilia doesn't listen. When Laura shows up with Daniel, Emilia is nearly scared straight, except she breaks the rules trying to protect her friends and gets punished for it. If you leave a branch to something like this available I'd be willing to write it myself. --Villenia (talk) 05:09, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

• That is indeed a fun idea, and I'm all in favor of more branching and more options, as well as you (or anyone else who's interested) contributing to some of them. I'll figure out some way an option like that is left open. There's now an option to "warn her" as you suggested. If you're still interested in writing feel free to rename the link to anything you feel is suitable. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 22:02, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

I did say this in the other page to villenia but i feel i should tell you directly i love what you been doing too (not only this page but all the other too) i just want you to know we love your work and i love the master/pet dynamic and bestiality so thank you for this awesome story. --Xephion (talk) 09:38, 19 September 2022 (CEST)

• Appreciate the feedback! I'm struggling a bit with motivation to write anything right now. (like, I get an itch to write sometimes but either can't keep focused or real life gets in the way. ) Petplay and bestiality are both things I want to explore too, although admittedly, I only have some vague plans for how to go about with it. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 14:04, 19 September 2022 (CEST)

Hey no problem and is fine everyone gets demotivated one piece of advice is to write any idea you have somewhere so when you feel motivated again you can use that idea you had,

 About the other subject this universe has so many ways to make that happen it can be a more personal approach like the ones vallenia is doing mother being controlling or letting her fetishes go wild or it can be a but more serious like the daughter do something to angry the gods and she gets punish with a Club or she tries the club and someone In the family or circle of friends or even strangers or even a bully from school that could be male or female finds the club while bullying her (not force her it find it when she was already wearing it) or a rich girl from town/school tricks her into wearing one or to get punish to get one after all she doesn't know much about the game yet I'm sure people who have been living there longer know a few tricks into getting someone to wear one specially someone rich i imagine without getting punish themselves like blackmail because unless im wrong you can t draw a symbol on someone as a trick but no where in the rules it says they cant be blackmail or trick into drawing it themselves or to break a rule for them to egt punish so the rich girl could use this to take advantage of the situation/rules to get a pet. There is so many ways to go for this because how well you made this story and whatever you do I'm sure people will love it. (of course im assuming that blackmail works sine in the rules it doesn't say it wouldnt the only part that talks about it is dont draw on others but nothing about making them do it themselves or to make them get punish into it and that's another way to explore this too)

The reason i feel i had to come and say thank you to you and vallenia was because atf stories don't have many people who make accounts since is really hard to do so and even harder to post things like this but im certain there a lot of people who love this story a lot more than the poll choose to show (after all to use the polls you need to make an account) and i feel everyone deserve praise after their incredible work they do, so thank you again for the amazing story. --Xephion (talk) 06:09, 22 September 2022 (CEST)

Those are all interesting ideas, especially those involving adding more kids. So far, all the boys I've added are "good kids" (for the lack of a better word), so there is definitely room for some delinquent types. I may not be a fan of stereotypical schoolyard bullies, the likes of which get physical and are mean just for the sake of being mean, but a "bad boy" would definitely be a nice fit for the story. Having a few additional girls around is also something I've thought about, but they'd almost definitely have to be living in the city (like Östersund nearby) or be tourists.

I'm personally not sure how I would feel about tricking someone into wearing a star as you described it because while it is technically allowed according to the rules as they stand now, it almost feels like it should be some kind of violation for the client. Blackmail, more specifically, should be a clear no-no, in my opinion. Perhaps an addition to the "no drawing" rule should be warranted? Or change "do not force your target into doing something they're not comfortable with" into "Do not force OR TRICK your target into doing something they're not comfortable with".

I'd personally rather go the route of convincing them to be more daring. You know, corrupt them by making them feel good, influence them to become more perverted that way so they'd be willing to do all those things on their own.

And thank you again for your feedback and kind words. Suggestions are especially appreciated. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 18:46, 22 September 2022 (CEST)

yeah like i said this are just ideas and do what you are comfortable with you dont have to do something you don't like, I'm just throwing ideas to see if any of them stick and you like them or anyone else wanna use them since i have horrible grammar and i cant write for shiz BUT DO TELL which of these next ideas you like or dislike or if they break any rules that way if in the future someone want to use them they will know or i decide to try writing maybe one day we can know what can or cant be used.

ok no to malicious blackmail but it could be less malicious blackmail too like someone finds out what she is doing and promise not to tell her parents if she promise to use the symbols she/he wants and slowly makes her use new symbols (is slow corruption just from a stranger or someone from school), but for the other ideas i had the punishment for breaking the rules could still be a possibility after all is a way to explore the story and show what happens when you break a rule (we haven't seen that yet) and i mean there are other ways to...

i like the delinquent idea but don't discard the bully idea yet because it can be used in a less evil manner (like nagatoro or a bully who loves the mc)  for example maybe someone (a boy or girl) who get interested in the main character but the mc is afraid of and the bully one day could discover her using symbols and start developing a bigger interest on her by bullying her a bit (not evil bullying but you know like a bad kid start developing a crush on someone but the only way they know how to show it is by being mean) like taunting her like who is a little slut and stuff like that and stuff like i bet you dont even know how to use those symbols correctly or you know taunts like that and the mc to prove wrong or to feel in control start showing her/him up (at first the mc could feel insulted and hate it but eventually the more corrupted she gets the more she accepts the crazy ideas the bully give them since she likes a person who is a bit more forceful but without ever actually forcing her to do anything)

 or like the classic a character who is rich or just full of themselves treats the other like they are lower than them or in a manner that feels a bit degrading and convince them to do something they wouldn't normally do if they weren't angry at there comments, like lets do a bet ( the bets could be used in other scenarios too after all it could be a friendly bet too) and whoever loses have to do something (symbols related) but even there could be one of them who break the rules (by either trying to win the bet or sabotaging the opponent) and get punish by the gods (i dont know if this idea break the rules if both parties agree to the bet and they start putting symbols) 

something like a sleep over and character doing dares and one of them break the rules by mistake and stuff happen im just saying this is part of the story that could be used too there is so many ways to add rule breaking  without being malicious --Xephion (talk) 19:51, 22 September 2022 (CEST)

Well, I love the "bully idea" now that you frame it that way. I'm a sucker for that kind of stuff and can totally see myself writing something like that. Less malicious blackmail also sounds better, and I've kind of flirted with that with the treehouse route already. Granted, it's all part of a kid's play and not serious blackmail, but still. Speaking of which, the games (like bets, dares, a sleepover) you mentioned sound like something that could work there as well. And finally, if I end up writing about someone breaking the rules, it'll definitely be one of the girls. It's something I lowkey want to explore.

While the other ideas are good as well, I'm not sure if I personally will end up following up on them. I feel like I already have too much on my plate with the branches and choices from where to continue, lol. (not only here but other stories I've still yet to complete as well.) -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 20:44, 22 September 2022 (CEST)

Hey don't sweat it just do what you enjoy and you can go slow too the best advice i can give write what you are feeling at the moment and the rest will come eventually don't worry about the extra details just enjoy writing you are amazing at it and don't feel pressure take all the time you need and the ideas are there in case you or anyone wanna use them, now that they are written they are not going anywhere, someone could get inspired in the future to use them. btw I'm okay with anyone using this ideas and even changing them to your liking after all there just ideas go crazy and you dont have to even tell me you are gonna use them just use them.

Well with that being said... last idea for today (hopefully) but this one is more of my kinks going full sicko mode so its gonna be very long... and remember this is just my biggest kink so you dont have to do them at all im just posting in it since is what im more into so the ideas can be way more precise and i dont mind if anyone uses this or never do is just her as an idea but thanks if you use it or read it.

 Mc gets punish by rule breaking and gets a Black Club someone finds it on her (i dont know how people find out about someone breaking a rule if there is like a notice or the symbol appear somewhere but someone finds out somehow) and this person (who is a bit more controlling like the Mom or David or bully or the brother or someone a bit more kinky) decides to teach her a lesson by making her into a pet for as long as the punishment last (it can be hours, days, weeks) and start by telling her to do things she would otherwise be super embarrassed to do like strip in a public area like the park or school (and if you wanna be extra kinky with a bdsm cane or a belt or something or without anything like that) then getting her a leash and collar and depending on the time establish above the humiliation (that she secretly likes until is not a secret to any one else) can start slowly or faster depending on what you want or the time you give weeks or days or hours of time you could start slowly the other thing you nee to establish if the person in control gonna make her live with them until the punishment is up or let them go back to there house (You can do this by either telling the family or keep it secret like if it is David he could say the truth to the mom and the mom makes something up to the rest of the family OR if its the mom it would depend in how far you are in the story because im assuming eventually the family will know how the daughter truly is, if the mom hasn't tell the family about the symbols the mc is using she could keep it secret and maybe either get a hotel for the other members of the family or do it when everyone was gonna go on vacation and maybe made up something like the mc did something to be punish so she ground her technically the truth and the she has to stay behind to make sure she doesn't leave the house but is all a partial truth just to take advantage of the Black Club OR if the family knows they can all take turns taking care of her OR whatever any of you want to make it)

first day by making her just strip in public at night since is the first day (but she is too timid to do it fast so she slowly realize that if she doesn't do it she will get more problems or the punishment of the gods could get worse or maybe it does because she doesn't listen the first day so eventually she does it slowly and if the cane is added it can be used to push her into doing it quicker but in a sexy not evil way) and walk around on all fours, maybe even seeing some dogs and person in control jokes about saying hi to your kind but is just a joke for now at least since is the first day when is time to go back to home (either her own home or someone else house depending on what you choose) you decide if you want to give let her use a bed or make her sleep close to the master in either a doggy bed, newspaper or a cage or even use a dog house. there is a lot of interactions here alone since is the first day/night you could go slower and let her sleep on her bed naked or with clothes and even let her eat from the table or not you decide.

 second day the same as before but this time the person tells her she has to drink from a water bowl for dogs and maybe even gets her a personalize collar (with her name or pet name or something generic like Bitch) then eventually mc has to pee and person in control walks her into a post or tree and tells her to pee here and even tells her to do it like a male dog (in this moment the mc can either do it by herself or be so timid that the one in control moves her legs for her a bit forcefully and there can even be added a moment where she is so afraid/embarrassed that she cant pee so person in control can do taunts like do i have to do everything for you? ughh fine just because you are my cute (pet/pet name/sexy insult like example Bitch) ill help you do it  and maybe mc is touch in a way to make her cum or just pee) when they go back to home things escalate this time she has to sleep naked with the collar maybe still can use her bed but by second day probably not. eating and drinking could be in a dog bowl from now until the punishment is over (either custom made with the new name on the collar or just the bowls the other dog use) you could even limit her speech to being dog only (but we the viewer can see what she thinks in thought bubbles).

third day can escalate again and make her go at hours where there is more people (like day time) or to a dog park to show her up. and from there a lot more can happen but I'm gonna stop for now since this idea is getting to long since is my biggest kink in full display and i could talk about it for days but i wont. 

uff that was a lot sorry for putting so much but when is my favorite fetish i can go very in depth. just remember this is just an idea anyone can use all of it, some of it or even none of it. Whatever you want and you can change as much as you want to and doesn't need to be in this order or this way either you could go slower or faster is your choice this is just an idea, People go crazy with it or let it inspire any of you to be honest whatever you guys do ill love this story is amazing and I'm eagerly but patiently waiting for more of this story. --Xephion (talk) 22:02, 22 September 2022 (CEST)