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so much new stuff holy crap but lets make it simple love the changes, love how direct the father is and stella being a bit of a dom is cool too. i love the little bullying and the way things are going, now about the changes so much new stuff is sooo good great work to both of you honestly im kind of overwhelm with content so i dont know what to say i will write a bigger thing probably later but for now great work innocent great work --[[User:Xephion|Xephion]] ([[User talk:Xephion|talk]]) 05:50, 13 October 2022 (CEST)
so much new stuff holy crap but lets make it simple love the changes, love how direct the father is and stella being a bit of a dom is cool too. i love the little bullying and the way things are going, now about the changes so much new stuff is sooo good great work to both of you honestly im kind of overwhelm with content so i dont know what to say i will write a bigger thing probably later but for now great work innocent great work --[[User:Xephion|Xephion]] ([[User talk:Xephion|talk]]) 05:50, 13 October 2022 (CEST)
Just for fun, my own "head canon" for Stella's punishment (the "natural" explanation):
- Danny approached her parents after she ran. She broke the rules and needed to be punished, everyone could agree to that, but agreeing what that should be was the real point of contention. Alex stood up for his daughter, that she was confused and didn't know what she was doing, and chased Danny off. Freja drew a permanent black star on her every night to freak her out and take the game more seriously, waiting for Stella to approach them about her "curse". Stella would wash it away every morning, scrubbing as hard as she could, rubbing her skin 'til it burned, but every morning it came back. So Alex had to "catch" her one morning with it on. Stella agreed to her punishment. Alex kept asking whether she thought she had atoned as he paddled her, but she demanded he not stop, screaming through her tears, punishing herself with the pain and praying the "gods" would grant her mercy from her curse.
Just for fun. :) --[[User:Villenia|Villenia]] ([[User talk:Villenia|talk]]) 22:28, 13 October 2022 (CEST)
That's a pretty good explanation, and it would also explain why she is so superstitious regarding the curse, and why she felt a need to "help" Emilia. Emilia certainly doesn't believe in Stella's "ghost stories"! šŸ˜‰
Still, and this is probably something we're not gonna agree on, (and I might even be a minority on this) but I prefer the supernatural touch. I'm probably never gonna go "balls to the wall" with it and keep it subtle, although I have some ideas for kind of content that has more overtly supernatural stuff too. -- [[User:Innocent Ruin|Innocent Ruin]] ([[User talk:Innocent Ruin|talk]]) 00:00, 14 October 2022 (CEST)
Yep! No worries! That's your thing and to each their own! Write whatever you like, I'll just be driving behind you with Velma in the Mystery Machine! :DĀ  --[[User:Villenia|Villenia]] ([[User talk:Villenia|talk]]) 00:09, 14 October 2022 (CEST)

Latest revision as of 22:09, 13 October 2022

Love it! Made small grammatical changes and a couple of little extras. Stella explaining her openness to boys doesn't quite sit right with me though. I think it's fine overall, especially if she has a need/desire to use or manipulate someone, but I feel it needs some tweaking. I may take a stab at that later and you can revert if you like. --Villenia (talk) 19:28, 12 October 2022 (CEST)

While I never would want her to be one of the "Brats" who parades around the village with pink in the same way the three other young girls do, I always intended for her to be bi-sexual (maybe like 4 or 5 on Kinsey scare), and I actually toned down that dialogue a little because you got your backstory up before me. Still, that bit can be tweaked or even dropped. I don't mind either way, as it doesn't really affect the overall narrative in the end. I kinda like the idea of a full-blown lesbian in the midst, especially one that knows how to kick boys' asses. Maybe someone else (like Milka) can teach Emilia the "two stars" trick too.

My suggestion: tweak the dialogue from the "I kinda used to think there was something wrong with me" line onward only, because the stuff with her "purple accident" still NEEDS to happen and plays an important role in the person she's become. It could either be a catalyst that finally made her realize she shouldn't try to force change in herself and just admit she's exclusively homosexual, or just something that made her even more scared and shy about the subject, but still curious deep down inside. Bi-sexual kids can also feel guilt and societal pressure, so it's not like her inner conflicts would have to be an exclusively homosexual thing. (Speaking from my own experience as a kid.) But maybe leaving it as an open question and something she doesn't want to talk about is a good idea. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 20:15, 12 October 2022 (CEST)

I think Stella as a purely gay character makes her more compelling, but of course she could have had a bumpy road getting there. Forcing herself to wear purple could have been her still lying to herself, or emulating the first love of her life, or any number of other complicated motivations, so I never wanted to change that. The way I've tweaked it still allows for just about anything to happen, whether that's bedding someone's father for revenge or taunting her little brother for fun, but I think it will strengthen the desire and conflict between her and the other girls. "Turning" someone is certainly a kink worth exploring, and the idea that Stella might try to persuade one of the girls that pussy is better is a lot of fun! Hopefully my changes work for you! --Villenia (talk) 01:47, 13 October 2022 (CEST)

So, exclusively homosexual, but respects and sees value in men, especially when using them to her advantage. Thumbs up to that. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 07:42, 13 October 2022 (CEST)

so much new stuff holy crap but lets make it simple love the changes, love how direct the father is and stella being a bit of a dom is cool too. i love the little bullying and the way things are going, now about the changes so much new stuff is sooo good great work to both of you honestly im kind of overwhelm with content so i dont know what to say i will write a bigger thing probably later but for now great work innocent great work --Xephion (talk) 05:50, 13 October 2022 (CEST)

Just for fun, my own "head canon" for Stella's punishment (the "natural" explanation): - Danny approached her parents after she ran. She broke the rules and needed to be punished, everyone could agree to that, but agreeing what that should be was the real point of contention. Alex stood up for his daughter, that she was confused and didn't know what she was doing, and chased Danny off. Freja drew a permanent black star on her every night to freak her out and take the game more seriously, waiting for Stella to approach them about her "curse". Stella would wash it away every morning, scrubbing as hard as she could, rubbing her skin 'til it burned, but every morning it came back. So Alex had to "catch" her one morning with it on. Stella agreed to her punishment. Alex kept asking whether she thought she had atoned as he paddled her, but she demanded he not stop, screaming through her tears, punishing herself with the pain and praying the "gods" would grant her mercy from her curse.

Just for fun. :) --Villenia (talk) 22:28, 13 October 2022 (CEST)

That's a pretty good explanation, and it would also explain why she is so superstitious regarding the curse, and why she felt a need to "help" Emilia. Emilia certainly doesn't believe in Stella's "ghost stories"! šŸ˜‰

Still, and this is probably something we're not gonna agree on, (and I might even be a minority on this) but I prefer the supernatural touch. I'm probably never gonna go "balls to the wall" with it and keep it subtle, although I have some ideas for kind of content that has more overtly supernatural stuff too. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 00:00, 14 October 2022 (CEST)

Yep! No worries! That's your thing and to each their own! Write whatever you like, I'll just be driving behind you with Velma in the Mystery Machine! :D --Villenia (talk) 00:09, 14 October 2022 (CEST)