Talk:TLCC/Monday W1

The author obviously has problems writing in English, but I like the story none the less. I wondered if I could rewrite it, but I don't want to walk all over the original, so here's my effort at editing:

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Monday Morning Week 1

I wake up at the first sound of the alarm. "Having one business in my head is hard enough, but I have three to worry about."

I reflect how far I have come in a short time. I have finally finished renovating the house. Because I was working so hard in my new laboratory. I hired workers to do the hard work for me.

My sister and mother have their own beautifully decorated rooms, and the bathroom, kitchen and living room are all complete with the finest equipment. There’s a new TV and console in the living room, but, sadly, I haven’t had time to make use of them.

I was lucky, that I was able to buy a laboratory with all of the basic equipment just for a fraction of its real value. The former owner made some bad decisions and was unable to pay taxes or something, and now it is all mine.

There have been many problems, and it was very hard work but now the building and equipment are all in good shape. After all this hard work, I treated myself to a really nice car and paid for my sister to go to uni….

"Ok, time to get up," I say, trying to motivate myself ready for the start of a new working week.

author answer

I'm not a native english speaker, even in my national language i'm average at best. This is my first try in wrinting something bigger that the essay. Dyslexia isn't helping.

I get some help from the translator, but some words or phrases don't convert 1:1. As you can see each of the pages are corrected many times.

i saw many of the stories that eighter have one smooth narration line, without multiple choices at the end of each page. That have the beginning and the end.

Or on the other side of the spectrum, are stoies with multiple starting points, multiple choises and huge ammount of the nonexisting pages.

This project have to be fun and each of the path will go thru the history or if you choose badly then meet one of the bad endings.

Each of the bar ending will provide information, why this dont' work this way.

If you have time and skill to correct the story that i create, feel free to edit. But give me some time to go ahead of the story to get some inside knowlege.

To not correct same text twice.

Tkwas (talk) 15:14, 19 October 2023 (UTC)