Talk:Dirty Talk/Three Brats/June 17th, 2021/Laura

This whole story is incredible! To the author: did you draw all the art yourself? It's pretty detailed with the expressions and clothing changes too. --Green (talk) 02:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

• Thank you! It's a mish-mash of old ideas I've had, most of which I lost motivation for. I'm glad it's turning out to be enjoyable! The drawings aren't mine, I couldn't draw a stick figure straight with a ruler. They're just suitable ones I've found from pixiv and exhentai. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 11:07, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

Fun idea: Laura calls Emilia to warn her but isn't direct, tries to tell her "those girls are going to get you into trouble" and Emilia doesn't listen. When Laura shows up with Daniel, Emilia is nearly scared straight, except she breaks the rules trying to protect her friends and gets punished for it. If you leave a branch to something like this available I'd be willing to write it myself. --Villenia (talk) 05:09, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

• That is indeed a fun idea, and I'm all in favor of more branching and more options, as well as you (or anyone else who's interested) contributing to some of them. I'll figure out some way an option like that is left open. There's now an option to "warn her" as you suggested. If you're still interested in writing feel free to rename the link to anything you feel is suitable. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 22:02, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

I did say this in the other page to villenia but i feel i should tell you directly i love what you been doing too (not only this page but all the other too) i just want you to know we love your work and i love the master/pet dynamic and bestiality so thank you for this awesome story. --Xephion (talk) 09:38, 19 September 2022 (CEST)

• Appreciate the feedback! I'm struggling a bit with motivation to write anything right now. (like, I get an itch to write sometimes but either can't keep focused or real life gets in the way. ) Petplay and bestiality are both things I want to explore too, although admittedly, I only have some vague plans for how to go about with it. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 14:04, 19 September 2022 (CEST)

Hey no problem and is fine everyone gets demotivated one piece of advice is to write any idea you have somewhere so when you feel motivated again you can use that idea you had,

About the other subject this universe has so many ways to make that happen it can be a more personal approach like the ones vallenia is doing mother being controlling or letting her fetishes go wild or it can be a but more serious like the daughter do something to angry the gods and she gets punish with a Club or she tries the club and someone In the family or circle of friends or even strangers or even a bully from school that could be male or female finds the club while bullying her (not force her it find it when she was already wearing it) or a rich girl from town/school tricks her into wearing one or to get punish to get one after all she doesn't know much about the game yet I'm sure people who have been living there longer know a few tricks into getting someone to wear one specially someone rich i imagine without getting punish themselves like blackmail because unless im wrong you can t draw a symbol on someone as a trick but no where in the rules it says they cant be blackmail or trick into drawing it themselves or to break a rule for them to egt punish so the rich girl could use this to take advantage of the situation/rules to get a pet. There is so many ways to go for this because how well you made this story and whatever you do I'm sure people will love it. (of course im assuming that blackmail works sine in the rules it doesn't say it wouldnt the only part that talks about it is dont draw on others but nothing about making them do it themselves or to make them get punish into it and that's another way to explore this too)

The reason i feel i had to come and say thank you to you and vallenia was because atf stories don't have many people who make accounts since is really hard to do so and even harder to post things like this but im certain there a lot of people who love this story a lot more than the poll choose to show (after all to use the polls you need to make an account) and i feel everyone deserve praise after their incredible work they do, so thank you again for the amazing story. --Xephion (talk) 06:09, 22 September 2022 (CEST)

Those are all interesting ideas, especially those involving adding more kids. So far, all the boys I've added are "good kids" (for the lack of a better word), so there is definitely room for some delinquent types. I may not be a fan of stereotypical schoolyard bullies, the likes of which get physical and are mean just for the sake of being mean, but a "bad boy" would definitely be a nice fit for the story. Having a few additional girls around is also something I've thought about, but they'd almost definitely have to be living in the city (like Östersund nearby) or be tourists.

I'm personally not sure how I would feel about tricking someone into wearing a star as you described it because while it is technically allowed according to the rules as they stand now, it almost feels like it should be some kind of violation for the client. Blackmail, more specifically, should be a clear no-no, in my opinion. Perhaps an addition to the "no drawing" rule should be warranted? Or change "do not force your target into doing something they're not comfortable with" into "Do not force OR TRICK your target into doing something they're not comfortable with".

I'd personally rather go the route of convincing them to be more daring. You know, corrupt them by making them feel good, influence them to become more perverted that way so they'd be willing to do all those things on their own.

And thank you again for your feedback and kind words. Suggestions are especially appreciated. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 18:46, 22 September 2022 (CEST)

yeah like i said this are just ideas and do what you are comfortable with you dont have to do something you don't like, I'm just throwing ideas to see if any of them stick and you like them or anyone else wanna use them since i have horrible grammar and i cant write for shiz BUT DO TELL which of these next ideas you like or dislike or if they break any rules that way if in the future someone want to use them they will know or i decide to try writing maybe one day we can know what can or cant be used.

ok no to malicious blackmail but it could be less malicious blackmail too like someone finds out what she is doing and promise not to tell her parents if she promise to use the symbols she/he wants and slowly makes her use new symbols (is slow corruption just from a stranger or someone from school), but for the other ideas i had the punishment for breaking the rules could still be a possibility after all is a way to explore the story and show what happens when you break a rule (we haven't seen that yet) and i mean there are other ways to...

i like the delinquent idea but don't discard the bully idea yet because it can be used in a less evil manner (like nagatoro or a bully who loves the mc) for example maybe someone (a boy or girl) who get interested in the main character but the mc is afraid of and the bully one day could discover her using symbols and start developing a bigger interest on her by bullying her a bit (not evil bullying but you know like a bad kid start developing a crush on someone but the only way they know how to show it is by being mean) like taunting her like who is a little slut and stuff like that and stuff like i bet you dont even know how to use those symbols correctly or you know taunts like that and the mc to prove wrong or to feel in control start showing her/him up (at first the mc could feel insulted and hate it but eventually the more corrupted she gets the more she accepts the crazy ideas the bully give them since she likes a person who is a bit more forceful but without ever actually forcing her to do anything)

or like the classic a character who is rich or just full of themselves treats the other like they are lower than them or in a manner that feels a bit degrading and convince them to do something they wouldn't normally do if they weren't angry at there comments, like lets do a bet ( the bets could be used in other scenarios too after all it could be a friendly bet too) and whoever loses have to do something (symbols related) but even there could be one of them who break the rules (by either trying to win the bet or sabotaging the opponent) and get punish by the gods (i dont know if this idea break the rules if both parties agree to the bet and they start putting symbols)

something like a sleep over and character doing dares and one of them break the rules by mistake and stuff happen im just saying this is part of the story that could be used too there is so many ways to add rule breaking without being malicious --Xephion (talk) 19:51, 22 September 2022 (CEST)