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I'm a little hesitant to make changes in that specific branch because I fear I might end up making unwelcome changes (solely based on my own tastes and what I want from Emilia) or mess something up, which would just end up being a waste of time for both of us, something I want to avoid. Hence why I try to stick to comments. But then again, I don't want to come across looking like I'm trying to selfishly push more work on you either. And honestly, I removed my last comment because I feel like I've been too negative recently, too much of a doomer, and I just flat-out didn't want to come across as bitchy, which is what I felt like in hindsight. I think I need to take a short break and be less involved in the story overall for a little while. -- [[User:Innocent Ruin|Innocent Ruin]] ([[User talk:Innocent Ruin|talk]]) 22:59, 28 November 2022 (CET) | I'm a little hesitant to make changes in that specific branch because I fear I might end up making unwelcome changes (solely based on my own tastes and what I want from Emilia) or mess something up, which would just end up being a waste of time for both of us, something I want to avoid. Hence why I try to stick to comments. But then again, I don't want to come across looking like I'm trying to selfishly push more work on you either. And honestly, I removed my last comment because I feel like I've been too negative recently, too much of a doomer, and I just flat-out didn't want to come across as bitchy, which is what I felt like in hindsight. I think I need to take a short break and be less involved in the story overall for a little while. -- [[User:Innocent Ruin|Innocent Ruin]] ([[User talk:Innocent Ruin|talk]]) 22:59, 28 November 2022 (CET) | ||
== Luke Jones == | |||
=== [[Offline|Offline === | |||
I just read "Offline" and loved it! I was wondering if you mind me adding to it? I left some more notes on the story's disscussion page. | |||
[[User:LukeJ|LukeJ]] ([[User talk:LukeJ|talk]]) 04:59, 19 December 2022 (CET) |
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Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy your stay. If you have any questions, or need any help please feel free to contact me on my Talk Page. Feel free to remove this welcome notice if it bothers you. --Elerneron (talk) 18:11, 4 October 2015 (CEST)
Congratulations, you're story Hot Summer Job is the first story here that isn't mine; and the first story that started right here. A couple of notes: We use Open here instead of Public. Since the field is called Editing Permissions it feels more correct. It's probably my fault for leaving Public in all the open slots. Sorry about that. Also, if your story is set as Rules, then it is Open so, there is no reason to combine it with Open, otherwise it is set as Ask Rules. Since you copied Generations rules, I guessing that was an accident, so I set it to Open. If I was in error, you can set it back to Rules by putting a link to the page you create with the editing rules you want with the alternate text Rules. Again, congratulations on the first native story! --Elerneron (talk) 01:30, 5 October 2015 (CEST)
Notsooldpervert
Is there a way to request story options for Hot Summer Job? ~~Notsooldpervert
I'm really enjoying Hot Summer Job. While I'm not creative enough to contribute well, I was wondering if there was a way to influence which story lines get added next? I'm glad I started the story over, because my last walk through the option for giving the sister a dare wasn't available (I'd like to see the dress come off, btw). I've been reloading the page where Kylie had joined you in the living room (and in looking for her name I just saw the next option is available now... Bonus!)
Anyway, keep up the great work. I look forward to see Riley become the neighborhood horn-dog squirting his cum into every pussy he can. ;-p ~~Notsooldpervert
I'm really liking the new additions to Hot Summer Job. Keep it up! --Notsooldpervert (talk) 03:39, 10 January 2016 (CET)
I really like where you're going with Incest Seductions' Kimberly story line. I'm kinda hoping to see her turn into a submissive little fuck toy for the whole family to use at their pleasure lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 21:48, 24 August 2016 (CEST)
Hmmm, all three of those options are appealing. If you quit, mom gets to claim her two forfeits, if you go back to cooking breakfast then things just get hotter before they boil over (I'm hoping mom's phone call was to get the brother to come over), or you can get a handful of batter and rub it on your tits (and maybe your pussy) and beg to be licked clean again. I like them all! lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 23:56, 27 August 2016 (CEST)
I'm not sure which story I like better, Hot Summer Job, or Incest Seductions. I think little Kim is in enough trouble and should stay right where she is lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 12:54, 31 October 2016 (CET)
Kimberly should finish cleaning up her lustful mess --Notsooldpervert (talk) 19:00, 6 November 2016 (CET)
Hmm... if the kids weren't quite so young going to "play" with them might be the more interesting option. I kinda like the more submissive/passive version of Kim just doing what she's told and just accepting and enjoying it whenever someone plays with her body whenever/however they please lol. Have her clean the counters in front of the adults until told to do something else. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 14:32, 11 November 2016 (CET)
Send the little ones off to watch tv, or something. She might be a submissive little fuck toy for anyone old enough to actually fuck her, but she's not completely hopeless --Notsooldpervert (talk) 06:09, 15 November 2016 (CET)
Mmmm, delicious. Wait and see what Dadd does Kimmy. You like being on display as your family takes their pleasure wtih your body. If Zack catches on, maybe he'll just want a turn. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 16:26, 24 November 2016 (CET)
Hmmm... I'm torn. If she lays there and basks, there's a chance big brother will come back and take a turn, but there's a bigger chance of making mom and/or dad upset. I guess set the table and take every chance to show off her swollen wet pussy so everyone will know she's so horny that anyone can play with or fuck her. Only mom and dad will know it was his cock practically raping her in "public" that got her that hot. Then again, mom did say if she needs relief she has to ask: if she tells daddy he was her first and beg him to finish, maybe he will. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 06:47, 29 November 2016 (CET)
I'm at a loss with so many good options. I really want to see her practically beg to be fucked and for everyone to shknow it, I'm just not sure which option would do that faster. Should she tell her brother about Daddy taking her virginity right in front of him and how it made her so hot she's desperate for more? Should she tell him how she caught mom and dad fucking in the kitchen and how mom stripped her and displayed her to your father's approving eyes and the resulting bet? Should she tell him how horny he makes her and ask him to touch her? Or should we go back to lying spread eagle on the counter and beg daddy to finish, even if Zack comes back in (or your sister for that matter). Mom did seem awfully disappointed when she didn't ask for relief after getting down. I gotta admit, I very much want to see daddy fill her full of cum in front of the whole family while she cries out in extasy for him not to stop. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 15:38, 16 December 2016 (CET)
Incest seductions request: everything mom has suggested so far has been very exciting (if a bit embarrassing) and some was quite pleasurable. Let her handle it. Besides, it's your brother, and he doesn't even know about the rule where you can't touch yourself. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 15:17, 8 January 2017 (CET)
Very nice! Glad to see a new Incest Seductions entry. I like both of the choices given for brother feeling her up. If i had to choose one though... I guess sound him out on how he feels. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 00:13, 20 February 2017 (CET)
Hmm... those are both good options. If you confess how horny he makes you, he might do something about it, or he might dismiss it as the aroused ramblings of a little girl. If you tell him how hot it made you that Daddy just took your virginity right there in the kitchen with Zack and your mother watching, he might be grossed out and turn your dad in, or he might just whip it out and take his turn. Yeah i like that one. Maybe tell him you can't figure out which turns you on more: 1 dad using your body without asking, 2 mom knowing exactly what is going on and smiling while she watches, or 3 your brother watching without a clue that Daddy is giving you your first fuck (and practically in public). Maybe that admission will tilt him over the edge to take his turn right now. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 01:59, 27 February 2017 (CET)
Always love it when you post a new chapter. I have to admit, Incest Seductions is probably my favorite of yours so far, with Hot Summer Job a close second. In reading the latest chapter, I thought of another plot-line branch, if you're interested. Instead of the Taylors coming for breakfast, Kimmie makes it through the rest of her adventures all the way to lunch, just an hour from winning the bet then Mom invites them over for lunch instead. Misadventures ensue, and a lust fogged Kimmie finds herself agreeing to spend the afternoon naked at the Taylors. She's won her bet, but can't get dressed as she's pretty much kicked out of the house naked and sent home with semi-drunk Taylors lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 21:18, 3 May 2019 (CEST)
TerryAce
I did a little work on one of the pages. I hope you don't mind.~~TerryAce
Very cool to see someone else adding something to my Story "Making the Team" and especially a page that is this sexy and well written, a joy to read. I would love to see more from you. By the way, I also love "Hot Summer Job", awesome piece of work. Keep up the good work.--Wassersaeufer (talk) 02:31, 12 December 2015 (CET)
You are doing some amazing work with Hot Summer Job. It is a work I would sort of like to contribute to, but I do not feel I have a good enough finger on the mood of it yet. I would really like to see you fill out the route where Riley goes to apologize to Carrie after turning her down, I think I will have a better feeling about how this thing is stitched together after I see however that goes. Jemini (talk) 03:45, 31 December 2015 (CET)
I appreciate it. I completely agree, I love it when other writers get in on the story. I am primarily writing for 2 Taboo 4 You witch was started by Elerneron right now. He has kind of handed the project over to me though, so I guess I can speak as the author and invite you over to contribute anywhere you would like as well. Your stuff is great. Anyway, my main thing is I am trying to figure out the general mood of the story and the characters before putting my stuff in, and I felt that line would yeald the last missing information I would need to start contributing. Jemini (talk) 14:48, 2 January 2016 (CET)
Well, Hot Summer Job just became rather interesting with the parents out for the weekend. I am rather interested to see what Bree was wanting to tell Riley now with the other one of the two options listed there. Jemini (talk) 08:28, 6 April 2016 (CEST)
Awesome direction you are taking it with the story now. I am caught between writing some of the sex scenes that you were leading up to or seeing the way you write them, I am thinking the latter on the subject of Kelly for sure. The way she has been played so far, I can't really tell if she is supposed to be a lesbian or if she has a huge crush on Rilly and is just getting nervous. If the latter, the sex scene with Risa could also be a bit interesting in terms of how Kelly would react to it. I would definitely like to see both of those, once I have seen you write them I am sure I will have a better idea of the characters moving forward in case I want to write something involving them. Jemini (talk) 17:27, 20 April 2016 (CEST)
Are you still around and contributing? I got a request a while back to fill out an option in Hot Summer Job, but I don't quite know the characters well enough to write it. https://stories.allthefallen.ninja/index.php?title=Hot_Summer_Job/Wait_for_Carrie_to_come_back (take Larissa upstairs) Larissa specifically is one character who I do not even have the slightest clue what she would do in this situation. Jemini (talk) 11:50, 9 June 2016 (CEST)
I was sort of starting to pick that up. More to the point though, some other things I have picked up about Risa is that she is, relatively speaking (and I REALLY do mean relatively speaking,) the most modest character in the story. That is part of the issue, because she doesn't strike me as someone who would self-initiate anything all that sexual without something like the scene where she witnessed Riley in her mother's room to give her ideas. She hasn't had anything like that to prompt her on this route, so my interpretation is that she would be a lot more modest in her room and Riley seems to be probably the second most modest character in the story. (again, relatively speaking. These two are only modest if you compare them to the likes of Kiley) So, I was thinking something more chaste, but I don't know much of what they would do in a chaste direction other than pokemon, and that stuff's down stairs. If I have this all correct, I think I might be able to come up with something. If not, then I would like for you to tell me your take and I might try to go from there. Or, maybe you could write that one if you were up for it. Jemini (talk) 05:22, 10 June 2016 (CEST)
Since you have expressed interest in the male August leg of the Life Hacks story, please don't hesitate to run away with it. I get a little bit irritated if poor quality writers start going off weird directions in a story I am contributing to, but you are most certainly not a poor writer by any stretch. I trust any direction you decide to take it to be every bit as good as something I would have done, so you writing something will probably just energize me if anything. (I rather like writing cooperatively. It is a great way to break the monotony and engage my brain. So... yeah, this isn't just permission, it's active encouragement. In other words, please write something more :p) Jemini (talk) 01:19, 23 January 2017 (CET)
Just wrote up the sexual history and recommended approaches for May, June, Lloyd, and July since they are likely to come up. Haven't written their reactions to exact acts, but since all their relationship scores are maxed out the general approach will probably be enough to get things right. Jemini (talk) 01:53, 24 January 2017 (CET)
TerryAce's suggestions
So, I want to work on the first day, when you check on Kylie upstairs, but I'm coming up blank. You got any plans for it
Elerneron
I really enjoyed your contribution to Yes. I was just wondering if you had plans for where you were going with it, or if you're just testing the water so to speak? Either way thanks for contributing. --Elerneron (talk) 11:57, 10 January 2017 (CET)
User Rights
You have been granted rights as a Trusted Contributor. This will allow you to do a bit more on the site, including moving pages without creating redirects and deleting pages among others. I hope this little powerup is helpful. --Elerneron (talk) 11:32, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
Privitude
PLEEEASE continue Hot Summer Job. One of the all-time best stories I've read! Three suggestions to for continuing points:
https://stories.allthefallen.ninja/index.php?title=Hot_Summer_Job/Offer_to_eat_out_your_sister
Imperial
Hello there, I've just made a suggestion that I hope would help with user retention and activity but due to its location I'm not sure enough users will see it to give a feedback.
It'd be great if you could give it at least a cursory glance. If the idea sounds stupid feel free to say so, I'm hoping we can brainstorm something better out of what I wrote. Thanks.
-- Imperial (talk) 06:31, 11 June 2019 (CEST)
NoGo45
I saw that you edited one of my previous chapters in Public Nudity, so I reread it and I quite enjoy how you rewrote it enough to make it flow more naturally without completely redoing it. I'll continue to try and upon improve my own writing style as I go chapter by chapter and if you ever feel like you could help improve upon something then you have my blessing. I wont become reliant on you, don't worry about that, but if you add your own flare onto a future chapter of mine then know you have my thanks. --NoGo45 (talk) 22:08, 29 December 2019 (UTC)
Hey there! I've been loving the chapters you've added onto A Loli's ENF Adventure, I really enjoy your writing style. I saw in one of the discussion tabs how you mentioned that you probably wont continue very far from there and that it was mainly to give me some ideas. I have to say, you certainly gave me some points to work off of so far, but if you still feel like continuing then by all means please do. I'm happy to sit back and read others contributions to my story, all I ask is that you send me a message letting me know when you've decided to call it quits (for the time being, I hope) so I know where to pick things up from. --NoGo45 (talk) 23:02, 9 September 2020 (CEST)
Wassersaeufer
Hey there. I just saw the page you added to "Making the Team" and just wanted to let you know that I appreciate it and I like your writing and storytelling. God, I already hate Jesse's mom, you managed to make her appear like such a dirty c*nt, congrats :) That being said, did you have any plans on how she and the other two women that have arrived look like or is it okay for you when I add that to the page? --Wassersaeufer (talk) 15:36, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Awesome additions to the page in "Making the Team", very sexy. Just wanted to let you know that I love it --Wassersaeufer (talk) 15:05, 21 December 2021 (CET)
ArthurKung
I want to chime in with what Wassersaeufer said; great job on the "Jesse's Mom brought the other moms"-page! I would also really love to know what they all look like! --ArthurKung (talk) 15:45, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Innocent Ruin
First of all, regarding all your points on Venla, I agree 99%. Like, she used to sleep around, yes, but stopped after she met Danny, and settled down for him. What you suggested is a perfect direction for her in my opinion as well. The only things I will add is this: It doesn't necessarily have to be just Danny's decision to protect her, as it can be just as much her decision to stay in the dark. They do, after all, have lives outside their "in character" slave/master dynamic, and they might very well just love and care for each other outside that dynamic as well.
As for your comments on Marianne and the new page… I mean, is there even any strong inconsistency between the pages? I don't think there is, honestly. You could totally explain Marianne's ignorance about Emilia's question by Marianne not being interested in the game (checks out with my page), which could make her project her own biases on Emilia, especially since Emilia is not being direct with her question. Marianne wouldn't imagine Emilia being into the game, and end up "accidentally" encouraging her. I don't think there's a mismatch between the personality between Marianne's personality either; a straight-talker and a bit of a bitch. (In a good way, of course.) As for the reason why I think Marianne should know is pretty much because, well… That kind of secret is near impossible to hide from someone in a village like Vitsippsdalen. It could make sense for her to not know if she was someone who just moved in a while ago I guess, which she totally could have.
TL;DR - I vote no changes necessary anywhere.
If you think a page should be changed anyway, I would vote for the page I wrote. I mostly just included her because I wanted something fun to do with her. It would be much easier for me to add another "Högstadiet" (grades 7 to 9) student to fill Marianne's role, less stuff to change. The only thing I would lament is the destruction of the "Marianne ice cream" pun, which is actually a real ice cream flavor here lol. I don't even have any big plans for Marianne, beyond maybe having the trio of girls trick her into a date with Sven? I also thought it'd be cool if she was close friends with Becky, as they both are nerds and into fashion, but nothing beyond that. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 22:08, 24 October 2022 (CEST)
I kinda am interested in all of them, just need to get my mojo back. Two days stuck at home, barely had any energy for anything creative since my brain has decided to go into slumping mode. Still, if you want to help with the "game", fill branches that do not exist, or even add new options, go ahead. I'm already working on this page, so maybe not that? That really only leaves this page and the ones following it open, so unless you're going to add new branches or expand on the pre-existing ones, not much else to choose from. (Yet.) I had plans to tie that to Milka getting collared as well, so that the "true ending" doesn't remain so hidden, if that makes sense. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 22:09, 8 November 2022 (CET)
I'm a little hesitant to make changes in that specific branch because I fear I might end up making unwelcome changes (solely based on my own tastes and what I want from Emilia) or mess something up, which would just end up being a waste of time for both of us, something I want to avoid. Hence why I try to stick to comments. But then again, I don't want to come across looking like I'm trying to selfishly push more work on you either. And honestly, I removed my last comment because I feel like I've been too negative recently, too much of a doomer, and I just flat-out didn't want to come across as bitchy, which is what I felt like in hindsight. I think I need to take a short break and be less involved in the story overall for a little while. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 22:59, 28 November 2022 (CET)
Luke Jones
[[Offline|Offline
I just read "Offline" and loved it! I was wondering if you mind me adding to it? I left some more notes on the story's disscussion page. LukeJ (talk) 04:59, 19 December 2022 (CET)