Talk:Disciplinary Action/Disciplinary Office/First Week/Suzy/End/Diapers

I want to ask for opinions about this part of the story, and my writing in general. Sometimes I think I write too much, that I jump around the plot, focusing on unimportant details, and thus the tale results dragged and boring. I've tried to limit this by reading what I write and removing any part I think it's superfluous, but I'm still afraid I left to much fluff and not enough meat.

I also know I have a bad tendency to abuse adjectives and adverbs, not to mention that my lack of English lexicon makes me repeat words without even noticing. I'm working on fixing those habits, but if you notice any of that, it would be very helpful for me if you pointed it out.

Thanks --Tod Naturlich (talk) 01:00, 22 September 2017 (CEST)