Talk:Daycare manager/Hannah Marshal/Home/Bathroom/1st/Masturbate/Pee/Uncomfortable

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Three comments on this one:

  • You have an overlapping of horniness states, the first group of options are marked horniness < 8, while the other group is for Horniness > 7. What happens at Horniness = 7.5, at that point both options apply. (Even is Horniness cannot take non-integer values, it looks weird, it should be Horniness <= 7 and Horniness > 7).
  • You have parameters to make options disappear (disappear at abusiveness 20+) and options that make options appear (Patience 5+). I would strongly suggest you unify either one or the other, to simplify development. Which one to use depends a lot on the implementation, but I think it's more useful to mark them with what they need to appear. So instead of disappear at abusiveness 20+, you can put abusiveness < 20.
  • The two different parts of the text that you separate by Horniness are actually extremely similar, so much so that they can easily be made into one, like so:

"Aren't you going to use the toilet?" You ask her. After around 10 more seconds of her staring at her knees, Hannah tightly shuts her eyes and begins squeezing out her pee into the toilet. The sound of her urine stream trickling into the bowl below sends a strange stimulation through your chest that goes down through your balls, speeding up the speed of your strokes. [Horniness > 7] Oh god, this has got you SO fucking close you're about to cum!

Abusiveness < 25, Horniness <= 7

Abusiveness < 20

Abusiveness > 0

Try to fuck her when she's done (Horniness <= 7)

In regards to all these issues, this is not meant to be the final product. It is only a place to store ideas until Hollow finishes the programming for the game. I can agree with issues like the mixing of cm and inches with the penis size issue from a while ago, but in regards to things like this I will just write it however makes most sense to me. In regards to that, it's fine so long as Hollow can understand what I wrote. In this case, there were too many things disappearing with the high horniness which is why I wrote the two full versions instead of the usual adding of the 1 line that I do, however I suppose I could just separate off the options lists. Jemini (talk) 07:44, 6 July 2018 (CEST)

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