Talk:Mother's Helping Hand/Sight/Virgin/kinder/Dannie/Ass/Office/Sex/You

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This passage doesn't quite logically follow from the previous page. The mother pretty much ended the last page talking about how they have to get Jack's cock out of his pants, it really doesn't make any sense at all for her to go from saying that to just having Dannie keep rubbing, or for Dannie to go along with that without asking questions. This whole thing feels to me like you got stuck on the second half and really didn't have much plans for how to differentiate all the paths. There might as well not be a split at all, this just feels really forced. Jemini (talk) 02:59, 13 March 2020 (CET)

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