Talk:Dirty Talk/Three Brats/June 19th, 2021/Trip to Trolleby/Stella faces no more distractions or obstacles

Love it! Made small grammatical changes and a couple of little extras. Stella explaining her openness to boys doesn't quite sit right with me though. I think it's fine overall, especially if she has a need/desire to use or manipulate someone, but I feel it needs some tweaking. I may take a stab at that later and you can revert if you like. --Villenia (talk) 19:28, 12 October 2022 (CEST)

While I never would want her to be one of the "Brats" who parades around the village with pink in the same way the three other young girls do, I always intended for her to be bi-sexual (maybe like 4 or 5 on Kinsey scare), and I actually toned down that dialogue a little because you got your backstory up before me. Still, that bit can be tweaked or even dropped. I don't mind either way, as it doesn't really affect the overall narrative in the end. I kinda like the idea of a full-blown lesbian in the midst, especially one that knows how to kick boys' asses. Maybe someone else (like Milka) can teach Emilia the "two stars" trick too.

My suggestion: tweak the dialogue from the "I kinda used to think there was something wrong with me" line onward only, because the stuff with her "purple accident" still NEEDS to happen and plays an important role in the person she's become. It could either be a catalyst that finally made her realize she shouldn't try to force change in herself and just admit she's exclusively homosexual, or just something that made her even more scared and shy about the subject, but still curious deep down inside. Bi-sexual kids can also feel guilt and societal pressure, so it's not like her inner conflicts would have to be an exclusively homosexual thing. (Speaking from my own experience as a kid.) But maybe leaving it as an open question and something she doesn't want to talk about is a good idea. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 20:15, 12 October 2022 (CEST)

I think Stella as a purely gay character makes her more compelling, but of course she could have had a bumpy road getting there. Forcing herself to wear purple could have been her still lying to herself, or emulating the first love of her life, or any number of other complicated motivations, so I never wanted to change that. The way I've tweaked it still allows for just about anything to happen, whether that's bedding someone's father for revenge or taunting her little brother for fun, but I think it will strengthen the desire and conflict between her and the other girls. "Turning" someone is certainly a kink worth exploring, and the idea that Stella might try to persuade one of the girls that pussy is better is a lot of fun! Hopefully my changes work for you! --Villenia (talk) 01:47, 13 October 2022 (CEST)

so much new stuff holy crap but lets make it simple love the changes, love how direct the father is and stella being a bit of a dom is cool too. i love the little bullying and the way things are going, now about the changes so much new stuff is sooo good great work to both of you honestly im kind of overwhelm with content so i dont know what to say i will write a bigger thing probably later but for now great work innocent great work --Xephion (talk) 05:50, 13 October 2022 (CEST)