Talk:Dirty Talk/Three Brats/June 24th, 2021/Mommy's Mark - An unexpected visitor/Sven

Holy shit this whole saga was hot, cant lie, when club lost i was bummed out and that's why you could see that my review was not only shorter but weak sauce too (i knew it would happen i know how i am) but i knew after a few days i would get over it and i did now enjoying this lat few pages a lot becuase it does hit some of the think i realllly like and i know storywise this was the best option and it was so much better (and technically i havent lost the chance entirely for the club it can still happen, even the bestiality can happen too so whatever and im loving where this story anyway). I love the entire interaction of Emilia and Laura, Lucas was nice too but what i really like is that Emilia doesn't even know about Lucas that was hot as hell. Sven was cool too he always trying to protect his sis but giving up to the sex was a nice touch. now the options... oh boi this is hard in one hand i want her to keep the spade to spite mom after all that's hot but... in the other hand it would be funny and interesting of what Laura is gonna do to help her remove the spade lets be honest in a bath a lot can happen and Emilia could end up not wanting the spade remove. i don't know what to choose. Great work as always and thanks for your hard work. --Xephion (talk) 06:38, 6 October 2022 (CEST)

I was thinking that if Emilia tried to remove it then Laura might try to talk her into keeping it, which could be a fun interaction to itself, so just because she's trying to get rid of it doesn't mean she'll succeed, whatever the reason. But I was mostly thinking that someone might happen upon the two of them while they struggled. Perhaps Sven, perhaps not...

I see the choice to keep it as more of a "let's get straight to it" kinda thing. I have to admit I'm partial to her wanting to show her spade to her friends though, whether to gloat or ask their opinion I'm not sure. But I'm curious as to how they'd react! --Villenia (talk) 07:01, 6 October 2022 (CEST)

yeah thats what i guessed that the bath option felt more like a way to make Laura talk to her more into it. honestly when is this hard to choose an option im okay with whatever wins that why i choose 2 different choices, but hey if you like the one of showing her friends just do it after all is better if you do that things that motivated you and i know the options are there to keep things interesting and fun but at the end of the day is your story so you can always choose to do whatever you want to do and im okay with whatever wins all options sound fun. --Xephion (talk) 08:41, 6 October 2022 (CEST)

Maybe I'm over analyzing things again, but for her to show it would mean no more being grounded, or perhaps her friends are allowed to visit? And if she does show her friends, in my strong opinion, they would try to speak her out of it without hesitation. If Danny and Sanni are the two extremes on the ends of the "control/freedom" spectrum, they lean heavily on Sanni's camp and would probably say something like "being a star-bearer is all about sharing and doing it around with multiple partners, not about being a slave to one master". Whether those two would succeed or not is another story entirely. Hell, those girls can be slowly corrupted too...

As for removing the marker, realistically speaking it shouldn't be too hard to remove, even for a child. I could remove a marking like that (after a little real life test) just by rubbing it firmly for a while, and hand sanitizer removed all the traces. A more specialized marker like [1] (a thousand apologies for external link) could be a different story still. In that sense, if you decide to go by "Emilia struggles to remove it" option, I think another way to handle it would be more of an "emotional struggle" and a test by Emilia to see how her mother would even react, maybe even solidifying further loss of control by saying "you put it on me, so you must also take it off yourself".

Anyway, just my two cents. It's been great fun so far, even though admitetly, Laura's character here did get a little uncomfortable to my liking at times. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 08:54, 6 October 2022 (CEST)

Glad you enjoyed it! I did toy with showing Laura being a bit disgusted with herself, getting too carried away. I didn't consciously leave it out, but this just ended up flowing well. It could still come up. As for removing the mark, that is part of why I used the word struggled! ;D But not all markers are created equal. Some are more permanent, more robust, more prone to staining than others. So there's no reason why it would have to be your run-of-the-mill sharpie rather than one of those smelly, hefty, wide-tipped, pallet-marking beasts. Laura sure feels like someone who would have one or two of the latter kicking around! --Villenia (talk) 09:16, 6 October 2022 (CEST)