Talk:Disciplinary Action/Disciplinary Office/First Quarter

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I still have lots to write for the first week before even thinking about continuing to this part of the story, but since Jemini is blazing through his own parts of the story, it would be unfair to slow him down just because I can't keep up. Therefore I'm posting this new node, in case some paths advance enough to merit go here.

As an aside, after this node I'm not sure if I should just add a final node with the remaining two quarters, or if there will be enough material so that each new quarter requires it's own node (I personally think a single node for the last two quarters is enough). The story will end during the summer vacations, a year after the program started. We'll have to wait to see the state of the school and town by them. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 09:58, 29 September 2017 (CEST)


I removed Ms. Varnor's children from "Three kinder garden girls and two third grade boys, were caught playing "Doctor"" as they are already involved in plot lines where Ms. Varnor offers relations with her daughter to the MC, that conflict with this choice. Why would she offer to help with getting her daughter an infraction that may require sex, if her daughter was already involved in that type of infraction. --Telgar (talk) 15:00, 10 May 2018 (PST)

Since we have so many different rules now I think it would be helpful for a rules page, showing all the different variations, and when those rules come into effect. --Telgar (talk) 15:00, 10 May 2018 (PST)

Can you PLEASE structure the page better? You have the "Franklin girls" (Deacon's punishment) and "cheer squad" (strange letter) in the same category in the middle of the page, Kittie Eckles punishment (Sex Ed, Deacon's punishment) is above the establishing scene (Kittie is also in "cheer squad"), and their establishing scenes at the very bottom of the page. Maybe have the categories be things like 1st week of Quarter 5th week of Quarter ECT. So that I know what happens when so that I don't suggest a punishment that has yet to be implemented --MrPib (talk) 05:58, 31 October 2019 (UTC) (not trying to be rude)

Sounds reasonable. I think I can come up with a different way to organize things here. Jemini (talk) 11:18, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

Ok, moved the "surprises" section to the top and put things on a time line where I thought they made the most sense for the content. This might change a few things in what's already been written though, so I might have to edit a few things, such as the whole cheer squad beatdown event, the part with Mary in particular.Jemini (talk) 11:49, 31 October 2019 (UTC)


Is there a page where we can discuss how we want future events to unfold?

If Luana Styles gets in trouble, I'd go easy on her because we have a special relationship with her family. I'd make her punishment something like "im taking her home, she needs several internal ejaculations." Take her back to the brothel, and make a "trade", Luana keeps her virginity, and you sleep with one of the prostitutes.

The Huba girls punishments need to be done carefully due to their situation.

Macy, Mary and Tihana need proper sex Ed (from the brothel, not the school.

Mary, Diya (and Tihana after her baby is born) need to be put on the pill until they're ready (assuming you married them) --MrPib (talk) 18:55, 10 November 2019 (UTC)


You can ask for it to go a certain way, but ultimately it has to be what makes the most sense for the characters and situation at the time, and the most reasonable course of events needs to be the primary route. That said, there will be vote options as usual and it's possible to keep exploring a given scenario until we have several routes filled before settling on which one seems like the most reasonable route to make the "cannon" route.

So far as all those suggestions go, the MC had to run after getting his previous girlfriend pregnant, he wants to put a baby in the nurse, he has a goal of getting every girl in town pregnant, and jumped through all sorts of hoops to get the nurse's treatment that makes it so younger girls can get pregnant was given to every child in the school. With all of that, it seems a little character breaking to put Mary and Diya on birth control. Jemini (talk) 19:40, 10 November 2019 (UTC)

You may be right, although, because the Styles girls are "out of towners", Mr Gardener felt pity for them. That may justify having Diya on the pill (until she's ready), and not doing anything to Luana unless she's willing.

While I'm here, a suggestion for the "strange letter" line so far. Mr Granville talked with the Mayor and got it implemented with the caveat that you can't screw the Mayor's daughters (if you find out that the youngest 2 aren't his, you're still in compliance, as you aren't screwing his daughter --MrPib (talk) 20:02, 10 November 2019 (UTC)


I just thought of a one off story branch. Willena LeFort and one of her sisters comes to you saying that Willena caught her brother (either Marlo or Freddy) forcing himself onto "little sister". There's a brief explanation of their home life, and you know exactly how to punish the boy. You call Dr. Hartnell in, explain things and that she'll have to lie to to the boy... You bring the boy in and tell him that his punishment will be that "You're going to have to listen and do everything Willena says. If at any time you disobey, she will come and tell me; I'll then have Doc Hartnell turn you into a girl and force your older brothers to put a baby into you. Of course, I'd still need permission from your parents, or legal guardian" "That would be me," chimes in Willena. Then we can take him to the brothel and have the ladies Dom him. (His brain is wired to think women are inferior). I never saw "his name" in my office again.

I'm aware that SRS surgery is only cosmetic, the boy does not. We aren't planning on actually doing it either, just to scare him (and his brother) in hopes that he'll treat women better. --MrPib (talk) 17:49, 14 November 2019 (UTC)


Hmm, I just noticed that it seems we're missing the last week of the quarter. (Week 9)

Second quarter should have 11 weeks (Christmas break, last week of december, first week of January)

Third quarter should have 10 weeks (spring break is a week)

Fourth Quarter is just 9 weeks

Summer is roughly 12 weeks (summer school varies between 4-9 weeks)

--MrPib (talk) 22:55, 17 November 2019 (UTC)


My idea for the ones I added:

  • Catrina's is self explanatory, Sonia did her work because Catrina wants to get pregnant. Since Catrina wants it so bad, she'd get both her, and Sonia's punishment.
  • We tell Mrs. Varano that we heard a rumour and want to know if it's true. We eventually talk with Mrs. Eckles and Walton. There'd be a split where we find out about Gemma, vs just thinking it's Daniela.
  • Sonia is still in the kindergarten class doing her placement testing. She is slowly getting Rosana Huba to open up and she's also told Edwin Loso to cut it out. At this point in time, you'd have a minor split
    • Sonia grabs Edwin and takes him to the office
    • Sonia pushes Edwin, grabs Rosana and runs to the office

The split would just be who is initially brought to the office and eventually merge to the same punishment page. You can punish all 3 students normally, or we can get to the real reason for all this setup.

We call in Bridgette Loso, ask her about her life's story. Eventually get her, Maria Daniela (maybe Gemma too) to agree to have their upper torso covered with only their lower body exposed. We call in Mr Loso and give him a choice "fuck your wife, or leave her and fuck and any girl laid out in front of you. Point at who you want. But keep in mind, I will be speaking with father Isidro to ensure that this'll be your last marriage"

  • Decides not to fuck any of them and chooses to stay with Bridgette.
  • Points to Bridgette. We say out loud "wow, really her?" He says things like "Bridgette is so old, I'm just like you, I like them a little young but not too young I can't breed them." We then ask "would you fuck Dawn?" "Yes. Why, is she up there?" Bridgette storms out and later files for divorce and leaves town by the end of the school year.
  • Final option, he points to anyone that isn't Bridgette. We have Dr. Hartnell come in and force him into a chastity belt. Force him to watch as we fuck Bridgette. She squirms spasms and squirts, claiming "best fuck ever, you're much better than my husband, you are even bigger than he is too! Can we do it again? P-LEASE!, I need it sooo bad."


Got a bit carried away in the details, but they were just my ideas. --MrPib (talk) 08:37, 7 July 2020 (CEST)