Talk:Hot Summer Job/Leave it there for now, you don't want to push your luck

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This entry is rather long and has at least 2 points where it could have been broken down to provide other options, although I DO get where you were going with rushing to the consequences of what you said on the previous day with nothing to get in the way and stop that result from happening. It would be great though to have at least a break after your parents leave to head over to the Callahan's earlier. Jemini (talk) 08:49, 20 July 2018 (CEST)

Is it too long or is the pace too quick? I think the character count is pretty average for me. I know Carrie is a lot of fun but I didn't feel the need to repeat the breakfast scene and I didn't want to get bogged down by dinner. That said, if you had an idea you wanted to explore feel free to split this page wherever you'd like and branch off. Nothing I write is untouchable and collaboration can be inspiring. If I think of something for a dinner scene I might split it myself, but I don't have anything at the moment. Villenia (talk) 18:00, 20 July 2018 (CEST)

Yeah, it's more that the pace was too quick. As for repeating the breakfast scene, doing so with Larisa having been influenced to be more bold with fewer clothes could go some even more interesting directions with a repeat of the breakfast scene also becoming an influence on her since her pussy winds up getting revealed to you in that one. And yes, usually I would just write it myself. The reason I'm not this time is because I'm trying to break myself of the habit of always taking on too many projects at once and directing the majority of my focus to "Daycare manager" with "The Lewd House" as a 2nd priority as those 2 are the 2 most in demand from my readers and DCM is the one that shows the promise of getting done sooner of the two. That being the case, I can't get too distracted by slipping back into my old habits. Jemini (talk) 22:38, 20 July 2018 (CEST)