Talk:Offline/Invite Beth as well
Great to see you adding pages to this story! Can't wait to see were you go with these two. I know you don't have much time to really write, but I'm curious how much you have written already that just needs clean up before posting?
Now for some nitpicking just because I'm combing through for details to use in my own contributions. As a reader I appreciate the ambiguity and like that we only know as much as Justice can piece together, but I want to make sure my writing won't contradict your unwritten/unrevealed cannon. So, some fact established on this page: Justice is "'basically' a teenager now", which I take to mean he's 12; Brayden is 9 or 10; Beth is 8.
I think it is rather significant if Brayden is 10 if Nicole is a year younger than Justice making her 11. That makes Brayden only a year younger than Nicole, which could introduce some interesting dynamics I might like to explore. That said, there is enough ambiguity so far that Nicole might actually be 12 like Justice and just off by enough months to be a grade lower and Brayden could in fact be 9, pushing their ages further apart.
In the opening, it is said Emma is "several years younger than [Justice]" and "[Brayden] looks as young as [Emma]". If Emma is 9, I wouldn't say 3 years is "several" years younger than 12, though maybe a 12 year old would. Then again, maybe Brayden isn't as young as Emma given that remark was based on a first impression from a distance and Brayden does seem to look younger than he is.
Sorry for drilling details out of this story when it intentionally has an unreliable narrator. If you can find time to add details to the Contributor's Guide I started, I would appreciate it.