User talk:Enzo

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If you have suggestions for the story Step daughters It is here, thanks.

Hello, I have some talent writing slow progress and sex scenes and was wondering if you might give permission for me to write a few things with your step daughters story or possibly edit already existing scenes to contain essentially the same thing but come across as more visceral by adding more descriptive details and minor mannerisms from the characters. Jemini (talk) 00:46, 1 July 2020 (CEST)

Hello Jemini (talk), I'm not sure where to respond so I'll do it here.


There are a few pages with ideas I'd like to see but did not find the words to describe it properly yet and I indicated it with keywords (In progress, To be written or TODO). If you have other ideas you'd like to write I'd just like to see a draft or may change it a little (for example if I believe the scene is to rough or that the girls involved are likely to tell I'll probably put one of the endings where the step dad either can't continue with the same family, needs to move out or even gets jailed) as the logical follow-up. Long story short ... I'm glad to read you're interested in the story and welcome any help writing it.--Enzo (talk) 02:44, 1 July 2020 (CEST)

I saw some of that. To be honest, if I were to write it out with all the potential ideas you presented there, it would probably involve 5 option-selection points minimum before getting to the link to move on with the scene you provided. My scenes tend to involve a lot of detail and so it doesn't take a whole lot happening before it starts to feel like the player should be given the option of having some input again. (For the scene with Sandy in her room, I might be able to frame it as repeated instances of "push it a little farther," or I might come up with other possible options.) Jemini (talk) 05:51, 1 July 2020 (CEST)

It is normally preferable to respond to someone posting on your talk page on their talk page. Doing so gives them an alert that they have a new message. Otherwise they could miss the fact that you have responded if they aren't paying close enough attention, or it gets drowned out in the noise of other edits on the site. --Elerneron (talk) 14:04, 1 July 2020 (CEST)

Ok, I decided to start by editing already written scenes. I was having a hard time with the current writing style since it was a little lacking for impact and skimmed over a lot of characterization. That last part was important, without the ability to feel out the characters, I have a hard time writing, so I had to go back to get the characters and their personalities a little more established. I just finished the opening scene for the Asexual path, let me know what you think. I tried to base the personalities off what was already provided as best I could. (The changes can be reversed with the "undo" function if there's something you don't like, or the revision changes function can show what was different side by side to see what's changed and allow for you to manually revert specific lines.) Jemini (talk) 15:09, 1 July 2020 (CEST)