Talk:LHLS/TalkPravatesLanaL

NOTE: I am really not satisfied with this one at all. I very well may be giving it a complete overhaul from scratch at some point. Jemini (talk) 02:28, 12 September 2017 (CEST)

Without knowing too much about the before and after of this scene, it's hard to give opinions, but what about something like this:

Lincoln: "Umm... well... Yeah! Yeah, I like looking at them, though. I don't really get to see what a girl looks like down there all that much since I'm a boy and all."

Lana: "Really? I have to look at Lola's whenever we take a bath."

Lincoln "You don't take baths."

Lana: "I DO too! Mud baths count!"

Lincoln: "And you see Lola naked how?"

Lana: "I have to make sure the water is good for her before I can go out and take my own bath."

Addressing the audience: Lola is like that, I have to taste <dish> for her before she agrees to eat it.

Lincoln: "Do you like looking at my privates?"

Lana: "I like how you can aim as you pee!"

--Tod Naturlich (talk) 04:17, 21 September 2017 (CEST)

Well, that is a pretty good improvement to what's there right now. Still needs a little something to make it fit the context a little better, but this is a FAR better starting point compared to what is there now. Thanks for the suggestion. Jemini (talk) 06:47, 21 September 2017 (CEST)