Talk:Offline

Continue Nicole's Path

I wish there was a continuation of Nicole's one, I don't want to add to the thing as I feel like I would basically ruin it. ParanoidAndriod (ParanoidAndriod) 23:09, 31 December 2018 (CST)

Did you have an idea for one of the untaken paths? Or did you want it to continue after they leave? I didn't really have any plans to continue on past the end of their vacation. They live far apart and have rarely ever seen each other before now so it might be years before they meet again. I also really liked the idea of a limited number of days to weave the story into. I struggle with finishing things :P so it was nice to have a defined end point while still being able to let the story grow and take its own shape without too many other restrictions (and not write myself into a corner).

But feel free to expand on any part of Nicole's story if you'd like to try! I don't mind at all. I only wanted to find the end before I opened it up. It's always interesting to see what other people come up with. Villenia (talk) 20:29, 1 January 2019 (CET)

My assumption is he wanted some afterward note saying something about whether or not she became pregnant or something along those lines, or at the very least maybe they exchanged social networking or phone number information. Jemini (talk) 21:00, 1 January 2019 (CET)

I might try to add somethings to it if you don't mind. And what I meant was, like a small detailing of what happened after 10 years, like maybe they got an apartment or moved somewhere else, cause so far, Nicole was the best one ParanoidAndriod (talk) 15:14, 1 January 2019 (CST)

Add "Kicked Out" Path

I loved this story! The setting is fantastic and it has this pervasive sense the whole family is more perverse than they let on. When I started Jet's path, I thought it might be interesting to see a path where Jet just thanks his cousin for the tip and takes the remote cabin for himself, leaving Justice to bunk in the kid's cabin. I want to explore what mischief he might be able to stir up if he can learn to command this army of little cousins and encourage their exhibitionist tendencies.

I have some questions though before I would feel comfortable contributing. Have you worked out the family tree? There are a couple story hooks that happen in the background I want to know if you had a plan for, mainly 'what makes Asha get sick that one night?' LukeJ (talk) 04:55, 19 December 2022 (CET)

Thanks! Glad you like it! It's one of my favorites. Jet taking the cabin from you was indeed a "failure" idea for one of the initial paths. There were a couple other points where you'd get evicted from the cabin as well without a complete end to things, and bunking with the other kids and with your parents were two of the options where you'd end up, but I never got around to it. I had intended on completing a single continuous branch for Nicole, Jet, and Emma (kid in the back was going to be Brayden, I started that branch but never published it) so that the reader at least had the option to find an ending for each, but then I got distracted and never finished them all. It would be nice to get back to it though.

I'd be open to you adding to this, for sure! If you do I might contribute some edits to help even things out, but I'd be interested to see where you'd like to take things. I don't have a family tree or a writer's guide or anything, it was just all in my head. But a basic guide might be a good idea - even for me - as I was trying to keep some core things the same between all branches, like you noted with Asha (and you shouldn't be able to impact the weather, for example) but I like minor details in the story to evolve and be revealed naturally by the reader, in part to offer a bit more freedom on different paths when writing, so I wouldn't want much more than a basic family tree. But I think the idea with Asha (it's been a while!) was that she was fussy at dinner one night and refused to eat with everyone. Either before or after dinner she had stumbled across some poisonous berries, so she either wandered away during dinner and ate the berries because she was hungry, or didn't eat at dinner because she was already feeling sick.

I can try to start on a basic writer's guide for you, which would essentially be a rough breakdown of the days they are there and a family tree, but I can't make any promises as my writing time has been zilch lately! --Villenia (talk) 19:33, 19 December 2022 (CET)

I went ahead and got it started. I plagiarized a bit for the introduction to the camp since Nicole and Emma also start the same. The new arc starts when you Tap Jet on the shoulder. I felt building rapport with Hannah was key to inviting them successfully, so if you try to engage him directly he'll steal the cabin from you. Later I may add a page where you try to argue for having the cabin to yourself and your parents take it away completely, just so there is a link on the front page dedicated to the arc.

As far as continuity goes, I can do my best to cross reference on my own and I could even take notes for a writer's guide. What would help me most would be who's parents are who. I'd also like to know how old everyone is since kids tend to build their hierarchies around age, but I understand if you like to leave that unstated.

I look forward to any feedback! --LukeJ (talk) 06:10, 20 December 2022 (CET)

Contributor's Guide

I've started a contributor's guide hidden under a spoiler tag at the bottom of the main page. I the interest of filling out the Continuity section, I'm going to rework the subcategories to include sub-subcategories for each day and make it easier to track what is happening when. --LukeJ (talk) 17:48, 20 December 2022 (CET)