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Okay, I had a boring meeting today so I took the time to write and made some progress I’m really happy with how it’s shaping up. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 09:10, 22 August 2022 (CEST)
Okay, I had a boring meeting today so I took the time to write and made some progress I’m really happy with how it’s shaping up. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 09:10, 22 August 2022 (CEST)
It seems like Ethan might be getting the better present on Lily’s birthday… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 10:03, 23 August 2022 (CEST)
Okay, I feel like I should ask before I post my chapter. Any specific plan you had for Jessie? I kind of figured that’s part of the fun is not knowing what’s actually going to happen, but I just wanted to ask. I’d say more but I feel like I don’t want to ruin the surprise. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 02:33, 25 August 2022 (CEST)
Actually, don’t even answer that… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 03:15, 25 August 2022 (CEST)
I hope you like Chapter 3! --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 06:51, 25 August 2022 (CEST)
Lol, yeah after I asked about Jessie I thought about it for a second and realized that’s the fun of writing a story like this is having no clue how things are going to turn out. I’m glad you liked it. I have to say it turned out a lot better than I expected, too. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 10:31, 25 August 2022 (CEST)
Dang, I’d say just go for it. Yeah, I think I remember what was going to happen, but I can’t even find it in out conversations now. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 00:37, 26 August 2022 (CEST)
I finally got the chance to sit down and read it. Love camping! I’ve got maybe one idea for the next part, but nothing concrete yet. I think I might jump forward to Summer time… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 02:57, 29 August 2022 (CEST)
Lol, don’t worry. After that break, I’ll probably be good for a while. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 23:02, 29 August 2022 (CEST)
Hey, I was just coming on to update you actually. I thought I was finished, but I started getting a few crazy ideas and I’m just deciding on which one to go with. I’ll leave it a surprise, but either way it should leave you with something good to work with… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 00:57, 5 September 2022 (CEST)
The next chapter is up! --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 00:15, 6 September 2022 (CEST)
Yeah, that’s fine with me. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 18:35, 6 September 2022 (CEST)
I kind of imagined they lived in New Jersey or something. I don’t know why, but it does kind of fit with the possibility that their mom works in New York City, adding to her commute. But it doesn’t really matter all that much.
For the long chapter, I’d recommend splitting it into at least two parts if more three so it doesn’t feel overwhelming. I sort of felt that in my chapter, too. Since we’re splitting back and forth it’s easy to keep writing since you might not get to an idea you have depending on how the next chapter goes. But creating chapters with say, part 1 and part 2 should make things easier to read when they get super long. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 21:24, 10 September 2022 (CEST)
Sounds good, I look forward to reading it! --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 22:50, 11 September 2022 (CEST)
Thanks, I do work hard at making my stories flow and have always enjoyed creative writing! I read the new chapter earlier today. It is fun taking someone else’s ideas and making them into my own thing somehow. I have a couple of potential ideas for what to write next, I think I’ll just get started and see what happens. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 07:23, 13 September 2022 (CEST)
Oh, also, I know I said I was thinking New Jersey, but I do have one idea that would put them either in California or Florida, close to either Disney Park. I’m not sure If I’m going to go with the idea, but I thought I’d put it out there. Was there any place specific you had in mind? --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 07:27, 13 September 2022 (CEST)
I had a really busy week so I didn’t get much time to work on it. I’m working on it today, though. We’ll see how far I get. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 21:10, 18 September 2022 (CEST)
I have to say, it’s pretty fun coming up with little things and leaving them in there to see if you use them in your chapter. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 23:36, 18 September 2022 (CEST)
Just checking in. I’m on the home stretch with this chapter, I think. I guarantee you’re not going to see this twist coming, though… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 06:35, 21 September 2022 (CEST)
Yeah, I thought I was going to have it done by now, too. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 09:05, 24 September 2022 (CEST)
I’m really over being so busy. But I got the next chapter written and just need to make edits before putting it up. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 01:22, 28 September 2022 (CEST)
I have to make this twist more intense… but I’m nearly done editing. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 06:55, 28 September 2022 (CEST)
I think I know round about how I want to take this. It was tough to decide, though. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 19:17, 2 October 2022 (CEST)
It’s going really good so far. I figured out how we’re going to do this. I don’t think this one will be a long one, but we’ll see. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 02:05, 7 October 2022 (CEST)
Yeah, I’ve had a lot going on lately. But regardless, I didn’t like a huge chunk of what I had… so I deleted a part of it. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 09:30, 13 October 2022 (CEST)
Has it really been that long already? Geez. Anyways, yeah I realized part of what I wrote didn’t fit with the ending of your chapter very well so I had to axe it. I think I might have to have something super crazy and out of nowhere happen… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 19:55, 14 October 2022 (CEST)
Ethan has had it too easy… I think that’s probably going to change… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 02:00, 18 October 2022 (CEST)
Alright, here’s my take on the matter. Mom just going for it right away seems too fast, but the story is called Incestuous Affairs, so… I think she could probably be conflicted—maybe get a little jealous because she’s not getting any or something. Basically, I’m not totally going there in my chapter, but if you don’t in the next I will in the one after. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 06:12, 18 October 2022 (CEST)
I’m going to power though and get it up in the next 12 hours or so. Just taking a few breaks today from my stuff to get it done. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 20:42, 20 October 2022 (CEST)
You know, I suck at estimating my time. This will be worth the wait. I got another idea as I kept going. Might need to split it into 2 parts. But we’ll see. I’ve knocked a bunch out today and I’m still going. I’d say that I’m going to finish, but that would probably jynx it at this point. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 01:24, 25 October 2022 (CEST)
Alright, it’s up. I did absolutely no editing, though. I’m going to go back through later and do some. I just wanted to get it posted.--[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 22:40, 25 October 2022 (CEST)
Okay, editing is done. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 01:39, 26 October 2022 (CEST)
Shoot, why was I thinking she came home early? Whichever you think is better overall is fine with me. Whether that's adjusting my chapter or yours. And yeah, I wasn't expecting that turn of events either. I will say that it was way too gay for me, so I made sure to include lots of Jessie in there. Anyways, I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it from here. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 10:43, 27 October 2022 (CEST)
Jessie and Brian’s mother is named Susan. Her married last name is Jensen. So their father is Mr. Jensen. As for the parents of the main characters, I don’t believe they have names. Probably not a bad idea to give them some. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 20:01, 29 October 2022 (CEST)
Yeah, that sounds good to me. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 00:30, 30 October 2022 (CEST)
Damn. Well I’m glad I’m not the only one to rewrite a chapter, I suppose. Yeah, that scbeduke was pretty much what I was thinking, too, --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 19:37, 3 November 2022 (CET)
Sweet, I’d say my chapter ended in September sometime. But yeah, probably close enough. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 16:57, 4 November 2022 (CET)
Nice development with Jessie’s dad!  --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 20:42, 5 November 2022 (CET)
My bad, I missed the question entirely. I'm fine with it, especially if it's humiliating. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 03:55, 6 November 2022 (CET)
It's coming. This one isn't going to be too crazy which is probably good since we've had a lot happen in the last few chapters. I don't think this one will be too long either. I'm just trying to decide when to get the mom more involved... --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 07:29, 11 November 2022 (CET)
I just figured out the whole mother situation. It’s going to be perfect! --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 17:34, 14 November 2022 (CET)
I was traveling for a few days, but I’m working on it right now. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 22:14, 17 November 2022 (CET)
The new chapter is up. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 22:11, 21 November 2022 (CET)
I think that could be interesting. Go for it if you’re feeling it. Also, are we talking about Lilly or their mother? Actually, don’t tell me. It sounds like a nice surprise. Also, I felt like it was time for a slower chapter, so I went pretty easy in this one. I really like the last scene, though. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 22:19, 21 November 2022 (CET)
Sounds good, have a nice trip. Your email is: ronaldmcdonaldatfstories@mail.com --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 18:34, 27 November 2022 (CET)
Well, I’ve been there a few times. It’s annoying, but at least it’s usually better the second time. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 09:47, 6 December 2022 (CET)
Well, if it fits the plot, she works on weekends. If not, then she doesn’t. I guess a better answer would be maybe she works some weekends when it’s necessary. Also, we could consider letter her find a job closer to home… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 07:31, 7 December 2022 (CET)
I mentioned something about it in the last chapter. Ethan is weirded out by the idea. That’s why I had Lilly suggest it, so maybe he could warm up to the idea? Not really sure beyond that. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 05:16, 8 December 2022 (CET)
Hey, I thought I’d drop in and see how the next chapter is coming. I saw the comment about the ages the other day and that makes sense to me. Anyways, I hope losing that chapter didn’t mess you up too bad. It does always suck having to rewrite stuff, though. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 23:06, 14 December 2022 (CET)
Sweet, I look forward to reading it. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 15:32, 15 December 2022 (CET)
I don’t know, I guess I was operating under the assumption that he didn’t really get turned on my hurting her, but that it was just an accident as a result whenever he did. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 01:15, 30 December 2022 (CET)
Okay, I seriously like the part where he cums in her pajamas and sends Lilly to school. I just have to figure out a way to flip the tables so they get back at Jessie. She’s been a bitch one too many times… --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 06:52, 31 December 2022 (CET)
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It took me a few days to think through this little corner, but an idea came to me last night that I think will work great. So I’m probably going to start writing it tomorrow. --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 17:42, 4 January 2023 (CET)
Alright, chapter is done! --[[User:Hgcollins|Hgcollins]] ([[User talk:Hgcollins|talk]]) 22:59, 28 January 2023 (CET)


==SumireIzumi==
==SumireIzumi==

Latest revision as of 16:16, 1 April 2024

User Rights

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You have been given Contributor Status. Please consult the Format Rules to learn how to format content for the story wiki. Thanks, and welcome to the site. --Elerneron (talk) 13:08, 23 March 2022 (CET)

You have been granted rights as a Trusted Contributor. This will allow you to do a bit more on the site, including moving pages without creating redirects and deleting pages among others. I hope this little powerup is helpful. --Elerneron (talk) 04:54, 11 May 2022 (CEST)

Elerneron

Elerneron
Your story Pre-Warpers doesn't appear to be on any index page. I was going to add the right category for you story's category; but if it isn't on any of the indexes, there is no category into which it falls. You might want to add the story to one of the index pages so that others can find it to read it more easily. It's optional, of course, but your story would get more traction in the long run if it's on one of the indexes. --Elerneron (talk) 20:39, 29 March 2022 (CEST)

Your Story Horny Virgin does not appear on the Straight Stories/H - K index. You seem to be one of the few users that doesn't make the index entry before creating the story, so I thought I'd let you know there wasn't an entry in case you forgot. --Elerneron (talk) 04:57, 11 May 2022 (CEST)

I'm afraid the watchlist isn't that useful. I thought it should work the same way the first time I used a story wiki. Unfortunately, that isn't how Wikimedia works. --Elerneron (talk) 22:05, 18 May 2022 (CEST)

Hgcollins

H.G. Collins
Sure, I’ve never done anything like that before, but I’d be open to doing a collaborative story. I don’t have a specific plot in mind but I do have a couple ideas I’ve been mulling over that might work. We’d probably want to decide on some fetishes we want to stay away from, too. I’m pretty open to whatever, but I don’t do anything too sadistic. I’m also not into scat but I love doing humiliation stuff. I’m not into beastiality or nepi stuff but I’m not opposed to including elements of either. But other than those, I’m generally pretty open to whatever. ATF definitely does have a good format for collaborative work. Do you envision doing something chapter by chapter or something where we work on the same Chapter together. We could also do an interactive story. Let me know what you were thinking. --Hgcollins (talk) 11:20, 1 May 2022 (CEST)


A few ideas:

I even have a name for this one, There Goes the Neighborhood.

A story about a brother and sister with a single mom who works a lot, so they often get in trouble being left to their own devices. The brother befriends an older boy who ends up manipulating him into having sex, fascinated, but being more interested in girls he ends up getting the girl he spends the most time with to have sex with him, his sister.


This one isn’t really an idea, but there is definitely a solid niche of people who would be interested. I’ve thought for a whole about doing a story about a girl who wets the bed and wears pull-ups. I’ve written stories where it’s an undertone but never where it’s a big part of the story/plot.

--Hgcollins (talk) 11:27, 1 May 2022 (CEST)


I might have spelled it wrong, it is nephi? Anyways, it’s just toddlers/ babies. Anyways. Yeah, another form of communication could be good. I do have a ProtonMail I use it’s just my username @protonmail.com if that works. --Hgcollins (talk) 11:32, 1 May 2022 (CEST)


Lol, yeah but I only check that email like once a day. --Hgcollins (talk) 21:59, 2 May 2022 (CEST)


Thanks, I’m just about finished with the next chapter! --Hgcollins (talk) 21:17, 4 May 2022 (CEST)


Wow, have I seriously not logged in in 5 days? Crazy, I did need a bit of a break, though. Sometimes I go way too hard. Anyways, I guess I was thinking I would make the title page, but I won’t have time for a few more days so if you have the chance to do it, go for it. I’m good with your character profiles. Once we get it up, I’ll start working on the beginning and then I guess we’ll start switching off from there. I’m looking forward to getting started. --Hgcollins (talk) 04:13, 19 May 2022 (CEST)


Whew, I finally got the chapter up. The last month or so had been insane. Anyway's I was sort of planning on leaving most of the formatting to you since you built the pages. --Hgcollins (talk) 09:31, 3 July 2022 (CEST)

Sounds good, now that we’re rolling, I should get the next one out fairly quickly. --Hgcollins (talk) 20:20, 15 July 2022 (CEST)

I just had an idea for the birthday chapter earlier. But it does take a bit of a darker turn of events... --Hgcollins (talk) 10:19, 26 July 2022 (CEST)

I was going to email you, but I think I’ll just write it and send it to you first. It’s not really that crazy and I can always tone it down a bit if we want to. --Hgcollins (talk) 19:19, 27 July 2022 (CEST)

Lol, that’s funny because I write really fast. I kind of burnt myself out a bit the week before, though. So I ended up taking about a week off. I’ll get on it here pretty soon. --Hgcollins (talk) 18:08, 5 August 2022 (CEST)

Okay, after rereading your chapter (which I really like btw), I want to hold off on the idea I had until Lilly is a little more advanced. I think it would kind of ruin things right now. You can totally write this if you want to, or if you don't like the idea we can just axe it. But I was thinking of having Jessie break into their mother's liquor cabinet after the party and get a little too rough or something. But I don't want Lilly to absolutely hate it either, so I think it would be better if we do that, to do it later and have Lilly be more curious than afraid. --Hgcollins (talk) 08:17, 8 August 2022 (CEST)

Oops, yeah I definitely meant Ethan. I have no idea where Jessie came from. That’s the main character in Making the Team on here, though… great interactive story. I should have the next installment up a few hours from now. --Hgcollins (talk) 23:48, 9 August 2022 (CEST)

Yeah, sorry. I’m good. I have barely written anything this month for any story I have which is crazy. I guess I wore myself down a bit and I’ve had a bunch of other stuff going on. That said, this story is at the top of my list and it’s shaping up pretty nicely. It’s a bit rough at the moment, but once I sit down at get writing for a good half hour or so, I’ll have it finished. --Hgcollins (talk) 11:46, 21 August 2022 (CEST)

Okay, I had a boring meeting today so I took the time to write and made some progress I’m really happy with how it’s shaping up. --Hgcollins (talk) 09:10, 22 August 2022 (CEST)

It seems like Ethan might be getting the better present on Lily’s birthday… --Hgcollins (talk) 10:03, 23 August 2022 (CEST)

Okay, I feel like I should ask before I post my chapter. Any specific plan you had for Jessie? I kind of figured that’s part of the fun is not knowing what’s actually going to happen, but I just wanted to ask. I’d say more but I feel like I don’t want to ruin the surprise. --Hgcollins (talk) 02:33, 25 August 2022 (CEST)

Actually, don’t even answer that… --Hgcollins (talk) 03:15, 25 August 2022 (CEST)

I hope you like Chapter 3! --Hgcollins (talk) 06:51, 25 August 2022 (CEST)

Lol, yeah after I asked about Jessie I thought about it for a second and realized that’s the fun of writing a story like this is having no clue how things are going to turn out. I’m glad you liked it. I have to say it turned out a lot better than I expected, too. --Hgcollins (talk) 10:31, 25 August 2022 (CEST)

Dang, I’d say just go for it. Yeah, I think I remember what was going to happen, but I can’t even find it in out conversations now. --Hgcollins (talk) 00:37, 26 August 2022 (CEST)

I finally got the chance to sit down and read it. Love camping! I’ve got maybe one idea for the next part, but nothing concrete yet. I think I might jump forward to Summer time… --Hgcollins (talk) 02:57, 29 August 2022 (CEST)

Lol, don’t worry. After that break, I’ll probably be good for a while. --Hgcollins (talk) 23:02, 29 August 2022 (CEST)

Hey, I was just coming on to update you actually. I thought I was finished, but I started getting a few crazy ideas and I’m just deciding on which one to go with. I’ll leave it a surprise, but either way it should leave you with something good to work with… --Hgcollins (talk) 00:57, 5 September 2022 (CEST)

The next chapter is up! --Hgcollins (talk) 00:15, 6 September 2022 (CEST)

Yeah, that’s fine with me. --Hgcollins (talk) 18:35, 6 September 2022 (CEST)

I kind of imagined they lived in New Jersey or something. I don’t know why, but it does kind of fit with the possibility that their mom works in New York City, adding to her commute. But it doesn’t really matter all that much.

For the long chapter, I’d recommend splitting it into at least two parts if more three so it doesn’t feel overwhelming. I sort of felt that in my chapter, too. Since we’re splitting back and forth it’s easy to keep writing since you might not get to an idea you have depending on how the next chapter goes. But creating chapters with say, part 1 and part 2 should make things easier to read when they get super long. --Hgcollins (talk) 21:24, 10 September 2022 (CEST)

Sounds good, I look forward to reading it! --Hgcollins (talk) 22:50, 11 September 2022 (CEST)

Thanks, I do work hard at making my stories flow and have always enjoyed creative writing! I read the new chapter earlier today. It is fun taking someone else’s ideas and making them into my own thing somehow. I have a couple of potential ideas for what to write next, I think I’ll just get started and see what happens. --Hgcollins (talk) 07:23, 13 September 2022 (CEST)

Oh, also, I know I said I was thinking New Jersey, but I do have one idea that would put them either in California or Florida, close to either Disney Park. I’m not sure If I’m going to go with the idea, but I thought I’d put it out there. Was there any place specific you had in mind? --Hgcollins (talk) 07:27, 13 September 2022 (CEST)

I had a really busy week so I didn’t get much time to work on it. I’m working on it today, though. We’ll see how far I get. --Hgcollins (talk) 21:10, 18 September 2022 (CEST)

I have to say, it’s pretty fun coming up with little things and leaving them in there to see if you use them in your chapter. --Hgcollins (talk) 23:36, 18 September 2022 (CEST)

Just checking in. I’m on the home stretch with this chapter, I think. I guarantee you’re not going to see this twist coming, though… --Hgcollins (talk) 06:35, 21 September 2022 (CEST)

Yeah, I thought I was going to have it done by now, too. --Hgcollins (talk) 09:05, 24 September 2022 (CEST)

I’m really over being so busy. But I got the next chapter written and just need to make edits before putting it up. --Hgcollins (talk) 01:22, 28 September 2022 (CEST)

I have to make this twist more intense… but I’m nearly done editing. --Hgcollins (talk) 06:55, 28 September 2022 (CEST)

I think I know round about how I want to take this. It was tough to decide, though. --Hgcollins (talk) 19:17, 2 October 2022 (CEST)

It’s going really good so far. I figured out how we’re going to do this. I don’t think this one will be a long one, but we’ll see. --Hgcollins (talk) 02:05, 7 October 2022 (CEST)

Yeah, I’ve had a lot going on lately. But regardless, I didn’t like a huge chunk of what I had… so I deleted a part of it. --Hgcollins (talk) 09:30, 13 October 2022 (CEST)

Has it really been that long already? Geez. Anyways, yeah I realized part of what I wrote didn’t fit with the ending of your chapter very well so I had to axe it. I think I might have to have something super crazy and out of nowhere happen… --Hgcollins (talk) 19:55, 14 October 2022 (CEST)



Ethan has had it too easy… I think that’s probably going to change… --Hgcollins (talk) 02:00, 18 October 2022 (CEST)

Alright, here’s my take on the matter. Mom just going for it right away seems too fast, but the story is called Incestuous Affairs, so… I think she could probably be conflicted—maybe get a little jealous because she’s not getting any or something. Basically, I’m not totally going there in my chapter, but if you don’t in the next I will in the one after. --Hgcollins (talk) 06:12, 18 October 2022 (CEST)

I’m going to power though and get it up in the next 12 hours or so. Just taking a few breaks today from my stuff to get it done. --Hgcollins (talk) 20:42, 20 October 2022 (CEST)

You know, I suck at estimating my time. This will be worth the wait. I got another idea as I kept going. Might need to split it into 2 parts. But we’ll see. I’ve knocked a bunch out today and I’m still going. I’d say that I’m going to finish, but that would probably jynx it at this point. --Hgcollins (talk) 01:24, 25 October 2022 (CEST)

Alright, it’s up. I did absolutely no editing, though. I’m going to go back through later and do some. I just wanted to get it posted.--Hgcollins (talk) 22:40, 25 October 2022 (CEST)

Okay, editing is done. --Hgcollins (talk) 01:39, 26 October 2022 (CEST)


Shoot, why was I thinking she came home early? Whichever you think is better overall is fine with me. Whether that's adjusting my chapter or yours. And yeah, I wasn't expecting that turn of events either. I will say that it was way too gay for me, so I made sure to include lots of Jessie in there. Anyways, I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it from here. --Hgcollins (talk) 10:43, 27 October 2022 (CEST)

Jessie and Brian’s mother is named Susan. Her married last name is Jensen. So their father is Mr. Jensen. As for the parents of the main characters, I don’t believe they have names. Probably not a bad idea to give them some. --Hgcollins (talk) 20:01, 29 October 2022 (CEST)

Yeah, that sounds good to me. --Hgcollins (talk) 00:30, 30 October 2022 (CEST)

Damn. Well I’m glad I’m not the only one to rewrite a chapter, I suppose. Yeah, that scbeduke was pretty much what I was thinking, too, --Hgcollins (talk) 19:37, 3 November 2022 (CET)

Sweet, I’d say my chapter ended in September sometime. But yeah, probably close enough. --Hgcollins (talk) 16:57, 4 November 2022 (CET)

Nice development with Jessie’s dad! --Hgcollins (talk) 20:42, 5 November 2022 (CET)

My bad, I missed the question entirely. I'm fine with it, especially if it's humiliating. --Hgcollins (talk) 03:55, 6 November 2022 (CET)

It's coming. This one isn't going to be too crazy which is probably good since we've had a lot happen in the last few chapters. I don't think this one will be too long either. I'm just trying to decide when to get the mom more involved... --Hgcollins (talk) 07:29, 11 November 2022 (CET)

I just figured out the whole mother situation. It’s going to be perfect! --Hgcollins (talk) 17:34, 14 November 2022 (CET)

I was traveling for a few days, but I’m working on it right now. --Hgcollins (talk) 22:14, 17 November 2022 (CET)

The new chapter is up. --Hgcollins (talk) 22:11, 21 November 2022 (CET)


I think that could be interesting. Go for it if you’re feeling it. Also, are we talking about Lilly or their mother? Actually, don’t tell me. It sounds like a nice surprise. Also, I felt like it was time for a slower chapter, so I went pretty easy in this one. I really like the last scene, though. --Hgcollins (talk) 22:19, 21 November 2022 (CET)


Sounds good, have a nice trip. Your email is: ronaldmcdonaldatfstories@mail.com --Hgcollins (talk) 18:34, 27 November 2022 (CET)


Well, I’ve been there a few times. It’s annoying, but at least it’s usually better the second time. --Hgcollins (talk) 09:47, 6 December 2022 (CET)

Well, if it fits the plot, she works on weekends. If not, then she doesn’t. I guess a better answer would be maybe she works some weekends when it’s necessary. Also, we could consider letter her find a job closer to home… --Hgcollins (talk) 07:31, 7 December 2022 (CET)

I mentioned something about it in the last chapter. Ethan is weirded out by the idea. That’s why I had Lilly suggest it, so maybe he could warm up to the idea? Not really sure beyond that. --Hgcollins (talk) 05:16, 8 December 2022 (CET)

Hey, I thought I’d drop in and see how the next chapter is coming. I saw the comment about the ages the other day and that makes sense to me. Anyways, I hope losing that chapter didn’t mess you up too bad. It does always suck having to rewrite stuff, though. --Hgcollins (talk) 23:06, 14 December 2022 (CET)

Sweet, I look forward to reading it. --Hgcollins (talk) 15:32, 15 December 2022 (CET)

I don’t know, I guess I was operating under the assumption that he didn’t really get turned on my hurting her, but that it was just an accident as a result whenever he did. --Hgcollins (talk) 01:15, 30 December 2022 (CET)

Okay, I seriously like the part where he cums in her pajamas and sends Lilly to school. I just have to figure out a way to flip the tables so they get back at Jessie. She’s been a bitch one too many times… --Hgcollins (talk) 06:52, 31 December 2022 (CET)

It took me a few days to think through this little corner, but an idea came to me last night that I think will work great. So I’m probably going to start writing it tomorrow. --Hgcollins (talk) 17:42, 4 January 2023 (CET)

Alright, chapter is done! --Hgcollins (talk) 22:59, 28 January 2023 (CET)

SumireIzumi

SumireIzumi
Hey thanks for the support glad you like my story with Lil Eve.

Feel free to give suggestions and requests so i know which story line/lines you like to see --SumireIzumi (talk) 13:27, 8 August 2022 (CEST)