Talk:Yes/Tom & Tash/D-1(B) Br2/Keep Pushing

I choose . . . take the ring off THEN ask Tash. If they're really close, they shouldn't be willing to compel each other so easily on something as big as incest. Asking her without the ring though . . . that works for me. --Elerneron (talk) 16:18, 6 February 2017 (CET)

That's fair! I'll have a think about how that conversation will go. It might be that the conversation will have to be had two or three times throughout the day, or will have multiple option points during the conversation. I don't want it to just be that Tom really wants incest and Tash doesn't, rather they would have to talk each other into it, particularly as, although they've seen each other naked hundreds of times, and have occasionally explored each other, they have never gotten close to the foreplay stage before! Also, that way if Tash gets hold of the ring, her mind can't just be suddenly changed by her becoming the protagonist of the idea. --Jackmaster (talk) 16:40, 6 February 2017 (CET)

Well, I have to say that this is a considerable improvement from the previous rendition. And while I am not particularly sold on writing for this branch yet, if I were going that direction then Elerneron's request is exactly the thing that I would ask for, so I think I will second that. Jemini (talk) 18:08, 6 February 2017 (CET)

EDIT: Actually, on second thought, while the writing has improved a great deal there is still a little issue with this post. It was noted that the class age apparently ranged from 10 to 14, and it was also mentioned that ages could go higher under some conditions. What level of school are they in exactly? About the only schools that would have that age range are middle schools in 4 year age-block systems (with the elementary school adding Kindergarten,) so that would make it 5th through 8th grade, and Tom and Tash would have to have rather early birthdays. In this case though, there would be no older kids as Tom and Tash would be among the older 8th graders. Little plot holes like this aren't quite as big as the writing conventions, witch as I mentioned improved a great deal, but it does break immersion a little when things fail to add up. It is one of those "small but big" things. (and from my perspective, them being older 8th graders in middle school or normal 9th graders in a 3 or 4 year Junior high school (witch would knock the 10 year olds off the list) would make the most sense considering the ages of their friends.) Jemini (talk) 18:18, 6 February 2017 (CET)