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You gotta be careful writing for your favorite character, that's often a recipe for shallow 1-dimensional writing. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 11:36, 5 March 2020 (CET) | You gotta be careful writing for your favorite character, that's often a recipe for shallow 1-dimensional writing. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 11:36, 5 March 2020 (CET) | ||
I should probably make a more pointed statement than that. Your character bio on Dannie doesn't sound like a person. It sounds like the stuff people say about mentally handicapped children in order to emphasize the good points they have in order to counter-balance all the challenging points that everyone else sees because the more challenging points are the things that are obvious on the face. No real person is all the things you described Dannie as without a counter-balance. You might want to put a bit more thought into her character. She feels extremely incomplete at the moment. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 12:58, 5 March 2020 (CET) | |||
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I actually cried a little while writing up this child's Bio. She has become my favorite character and I will never write a corruption path for her, all her interactions with Jack will be filled with rainbows and unicorns. Telgar (talk) 02:09, 5 March 2020 (PST)
You gotta be careful writing for your favorite character, that's often a recipe for shallow 1-dimensional writing. Jemini (talk) 11:36, 5 March 2020 (CET)
I should probably make a more pointed statement than that. Your character bio on Dannie doesn't sound like a person. It sounds like the stuff people say about mentally handicapped children in order to emphasize the good points they have in order to counter-balance all the challenging points that everyone else sees because the more challenging points are the things that are obvious on the face. No real person is all the things you described Dannie as without a counter-balance. You might want to put a bit more thought into her character. She feels extremely incomplete at the moment. Jemini (talk) 12:58, 5 March 2020 (CET)