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I have moved your story entry for [[The Cursed Charm]] from the T section to the C section. When alphabetizing titles always ignore articles (a, an, and the). This is standard grammatical practice. Good luck with your story. --[[User:Elerneron|Elerneron]] ([[User talk:Elerneron|talk]]) 10:13, 27 June 2016 (CEST) | I have moved your story entry for [[The Cursed Charm]] from the T section to the C section. When alphabetizing titles always ignore articles (a, an, and the). This is standard grammatical practice. Good luck with your story. --[[User:Elerneron|Elerneron]] ([[User talk:Elerneron|talk]]) 10:13, 27 June 2016 (CEST) | ||
I noticed the rather interesting title of your story. I have to say, your naming sense is pretty good, but your story does not have a hook. A hook is something you write in the first entry of your story that focuses the reader's mind on the nature of the story and gets their interest. With a title like that, everyone is going to be wanting to know what kind of curse the story title is referring to, and they will be frustrated at the lack of an explanation. Some authors might intentionally create this frustration on purpose for effect, but I get the impression this was not the case with you. So, unless I am missreading the situation and you actually do have something planned, I would recommend giving some brief explanation on the opening page (the same one where you select male or female) on what the story is going to be about. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 10:21, 27 June 2016 (CEST) | |||
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Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy your stay. If you have any questions, or need any help please feel free to contact me on my Talk Page. Feel free to remove this welcome notice if it bothers you. --Elerneron (talk) 01:09, 10 January 2016 (CET)
I have moved your story entry for The Cursed Charm from the T section to the C section. When alphabetizing titles always ignore articles (a, an, and the). This is standard grammatical practice. Good luck with your story. --Elerneron (talk) 10:13, 27 June 2016 (CEST)
I noticed the rather interesting title of your story. I have to say, your naming sense is pretty good, but your story does not have a hook. A hook is something you write in the first entry of your story that focuses the reader's mind on the nature of the story and gets their interest. With a title like that, everyone is going to be wanting to know what kind of curse the story title is referring to, and they will be frustrated at the lack of an explanation. Some authors might intentionally create this frustration on purpose for effect, but I get the impression this was not the case with you. So, unless I am missreading the situation and you actually do have something planned, I would recommend giving some brief explanation on the opening page (the same one where you select male or female) on what the story is going to be about. Jemini (talk) 10:21, 27 June 2016 (CEST)