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I feel like there are some problems with the writing that could be pointed out, but the largest is the options at the end. Her suddenly offering money would be insensitive, and offering sexual favors would make her a slut. The more normal things in such a situation are offering an exchange of phone numbers or an invitation to her house. (Although, leaving the offer of money or sexual favors on the options list as well as the more normal things is an option to push things in a fairly different direction and indicate she's got a bit of a different side to her under the surface. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 22:43, 12 May 2019 (CEST) | I feel like there are some problems with the writing that could be pointed out, but the largest is the options at the end. Her suddenly offering money would be insensitive, and offering sexual favors would make her a slut. The more normal things in such a situation are offering an exchange of phone numbers or an invitation to her house. (Although, leaving the offer of money or sexual favors on the options list as well as the more normal things is an option to push things in a fairly different direction and indicate she's got a bit of a different side to her under the surface. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 22:43, 12 May 2019 (CEST) | ||
That's a good point, I'll change the story and think about the direction. No need to rush. [[User:Grinsekats|Grinsekats]] | |||
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I feel like there are some problems with the writing that could be pointed out, but the largest is the options at the end. Her suddenly offering money would be insensitive, and offering sexual favors would make her a slut. The more normal things in such a situation are offering an exchange of phone numbers or an invitation to her house. (Although, leaving the offer of money or sexual favors on the options list as well as the more normal things is an option to push things in a fairly different direction and indicate she's got a bit of a different side to her under the surface. Jemini (talk) 22:43, 12 May 2019 (CEST)
That's a good point, I'll change the story and think about the direction. No need to rush. Grinsekats