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This passage doesn't quite logically follow from the previous page. The mother pretty much ended the last page talking about how they have to get Jack's cock out of his pants, it really doesn't make any sense at all for her to go from saying that to just having Dannie keep rubbing, or for Dannie to go along with that without asking questions. This whole thing feels to me like you got stuck on the second half and really didn't have much plans for how to differentiate all the paths. There might as well not be a split at all, this just feels really forced. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 02:59, 13 March 2020 (CET) | This passage doesn't quite logically follow from the previous page. The mother pretty much ended the last page talking about how they have to get Jack's cock out of his pants, it really doesn't make any sense at all for her to go from saying that to just having Dannie keep rubbing, or for Dannie to go along with that without asking questions. This whole thing feels to me like you got stuck on the second half and really didn't have much plans for how to differentiate all the paths. There might as well not be a split at all, this just feels really forced. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 02:59, 13 March 2020 (CET) | ||
Personally, what I would recommend is backing things up a little and including a larger chunk of the previous page's content in the next page content, use the divided versions as the middle of the post, and then create an opportunity for another split farther down. Now that I've seen your ideas on all three paths, I think I'll go over and do it my way on the pussy path. This will mean some pretty major changes so I can't just edit it a little. You can decide how you like it after seeing it. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 03:01, 13 March 2020 (CET) | |||
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This passage doesn't quite logically follow from the previous page. The mother pretty much ended the last page talking about how they have to get Jack's cock out of his pants, it really doesn't make any sense at all for her to go from saying that to just having Dannie keep rubbing, or for Dannie to go along with that without asking questions. This whole thing feels to me like you got stuck on the second half and really didn't have much plans for how to differentiate all the paths. There might as well not be a split at all, this just feels really forced. Jemini (talk) 02:59, 13 March 2020 (CET)
Personally, what I would recommend is backing things up a little and including a larger chunk of the previous page's content in the next page content, use the divided versions as the middle of the post, and then create an opportunity for another split farther down. Now that I've seen your ideas on all three paths, I think I'll go over and do it my way on the pussy path. This will mean some pretty major changes so I can't just edit it a little. You can decide how you like it after seeing it. Jemini (talk) 03:01, 13 March 2020 (CET)