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[[User:Telgar|Telgar]] ([[User talk:Telgar|talk]]) 19:15, 12 March 2020 (PST) | [[User:Telgar|Telgar]] ([[User talk:Telgar|talk]]) 19:15, 12 March 2020 (PST) | ||
Well, so long as you keep the edit to only 1 change all at once, it's actually possible to compare the two as well as to instantly undo it if I decide I don't like it, so as long as you ask ahead of time on the specific post I don't mind if you want to do that. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 04:18, 13 March 2020 (CET) | Well, so long as you keep the edit to only 1 change all at once, it's actually possible to compare the two as well as to instantly undo it if I decide I don't like it, so as long as you ask ahead of time on the specific post I don't mind if you want to do that. (Maybe prep it all in a word document and then past it in?) [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 04:18, 13 March 2020 (CET) | ||
Latest revision as of 03:19, 13 March 2020
This passage doesn't quite logically follow from the previous page. The mother pretty much ended the last page talking about how they have to get Jack's cock out of his pants, it really doesn't make any sense at all for her to go from saying that to just having Dannie keep rubbing, or for Dannie to go along with that without asking questions. This whole thing feels to me like you got stuck on the second half and really didn't have much plans for how to differentiate all the paths. There might as well not be a split at all, this just feels really forced. Jemini (talk) 02:59, 13 March 2020 (CET)
Personally, what I would recommend is backing things up a little and including a larger chunk of the previous page's content in the next page content, use the divided versions as the middle of the post, and then create an opportunity for another split farther down. Now that I've seen your ideas on all three paths, I think I'll go over and do it my way on the pussy path. This will mean some pretty major changes so I can't just edit it a little. You can decide how you like it after seeing it. Jemini (talk) 03:01, 13 March 2020 (CET)
(I would like to add, this is one of those venues where the person who makes the 2nd move is always going to have a huge advantage. So, not to be hard on you with all this one-upping stuff, I am sure if I wrote first then you would also be able to come up with something better for a similar looking revision that presents it slightly differently.) Jemini (talk) 03:04, 13 March 2020 (CET)
Not a problem, not seeing it as one upmanship honestly considering deleting the entire you path and letting someone else give it a try, I agree as it is that one seems forced. To be honest I have thought of things that I felt could improve how your paths flowed, but I HATE, messing with other people's stuff. If there was a way to do it that left you with the ability to look at and either accept or reject the changes I'd eddit or offer advice more. But as it is I would feel like I was walking all over your work so I don't. Telgar (talk) 19:15, 12 March 2020 (PST)
Well, so long as you keep the edit to only 1 change all at once, it's actually possible to compare the two as well as to instantly undo it if I decide I don't like it, so as long as you ask ahead of time on the specific post I don't mind if you want to do that. (Maybe prep it all in a word document and then past it in?) Jemini (talk) 04:18, 13 March 2020 (CET)