Talk:A Sweet Escape/Chapter 6

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If he's got enough money, stash or sell the Audi and rent or by one of those campers (maybe even a luxury model). Look like a dad/daughter on an extended road trip. Tell people that ask that she's home schooled, and you're using the settlement from your wife's wrongful death lawsuit to just travel and be together to heal for a while. Hide in plain sight, always have a bed ready for fun lol--Notsooldpervert (talk) 15:11, 12 December 2021 (CET)

Yeah, I was thinking something along those lines. They’ll end up settling down somewhere soon right after the cartel eventually catches up with them. I’ve got something pretty great planned when that happens, but I’ll leave it a surprise for now. Although, I’m sure you’ve probably already guessed and are pretty close if not right on the money. --Hgcollins (talk) 16:21, 12 December 2021 (CET)

If the cartel catches them, why would they let them go? --Notsooldpervert (talk) 18:40, 12 December 2021 (CET)

Fair question. Let’s just say some cartel lackies can be persuaded with the right incentive. I don’t think they’ll be keeping that bag of cash for much longer. But maybe some of them will need a little extra incentive to let them go.--Hgcollins (talk) 18:51, 12 December 2021 (CET)

Well, the bag of cash isn't as necessary if they get those account numbers lol Filter them around so they're in his name instead of his brother's and the cartel can't touch it, or probably even find it. I do hope her uncle at least gets her cherry. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 19:12, 12 December 2021 (CET)


I do think that plays well with the nicer nature of the story. It will make the admission to his brother that much more heart wrenching. I haven’t decided what’s going to happen with the brother yet, and I think I might go back and write out the parents somewhere. It would be better if they were out of the picture before this even started. That makes the brother’s story more believable and makes it easier for Zoe and her uncle to run off if her father winds up getting arrested or offed by the cartel.--Hgcollins (talk) 21:13, 12 December 2021 (CET)

The parents didn't believe the warning? Cartel killed them already so they know it's serious? Maybe the story of how these guys raped his little girl pisses him off and he makes them kill him (after giving his brother all of the account info). As her only living relative, and it being a stipulation in her father's will, her uncle is now her legal guardian and they stay on the run just in case the cartel is still looking for them. They're not, since the ones involved with the dad got killed/arrested or enough damage was done they cut their losses and move on. They got some money back, or maybe find the shipment.. lmao they find it and it turns out it was their mixup, but the don't find it until after the dad is dead. Maybe the two on the run never learn that they're in the clear and are running for no reason. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 21:20, 12 December 2021 (CET)