Talk:Daycare manager/Hannah Marshal/Office molestation/1st/Lap/Try to build trust

This feels like a very generic scene that could be reused for any girl. Just replacing her name and maybe with a bit of description particular to each girl to make it not seem so repetitive. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 20:06, 27 June 2018 (CEST)

Interesting that was the 1st thing you saw. In my case, I have been trying to write things such that there is no reference as to whether there are other children or they are the only child. This scene would seem incredibly off if it was used while they are still the only child there. One way or another, this scene needs a lot of work. Jemini (talk) 22:05, 27 June 2018 (CEST)