User talk:TerryAce

Hi, I'll be suggesting story chapters, making minor edits and reading. I am NOT a Time Ninja. I repeat NOT a Time Ninja

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About your last vote. With this one,

https://stories.allthefallen.ninja/index.php?title=2T4U/Bandit_in_the_park/Sneak_up_behind_them_and_pin_the_both_of_them_sandwiched_together (act like you're here to discipline them for being out so early)

That option is actually on that list twice under two different headings. I am going to need you to specify witch heading you want this one under.

Jemini (talk) 20:54, 17 October 2015 (CEST)

Sorry, my story-sense kind of demanded for me to do an overhaul on your entry to Hot Summer Job where the MC sticks his finger into his sister's pussy. Yours was kind of rushed an not very compelling. It also didn't fit into the characters previously displayed trates very well. Jemini (talk) 03:56, 5 January 2016 (CET)

It's cool. I re-read it and yours flows much better

Feel free to contribute however you'd like. Have fun with it. Villenia (talk) 04:11, 4 November 2015 (CET)

I didn't have anything really specific. I tend to let inspiration strike. But I would think that Kylie has no idea you're there. She's lounging around in the nude as per normal when you show up out of no where. She may be an exhibitionist, but she's as easily embarrassed as anyone especially when surprised with something. From there you can go anywhere. Maybe she quickly composes herself and lets you watch her get dressed. Or she might run over and kick you out getting crazy dramatic and offended only to tease you about it relentlessly over the course of the day. Even another option, you pull rank as the babysitter when she gets lippy and 'discipline' her. Or some combo of those.

The only suggestion I have would be to keep the options you present at the end as decisions for Riley to make. You're role playing as Riley, so "Kylie frigs herself" or "Carol jerks you off" aren't decisions that Riley is making. That way the reader is really playing as the character. Besides, things don't always turn out how you want them to. That ensure it's less obvious and more open ended as to where the story could go. --Villenia (talk) 23:32, 10 January 2016 (CET)