Talk:Fun with Naomi/Part 7

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I thought Jim had a wife. Wasn't she the one in the pretty yellow skirt? Nice setup for the other guy bringing in a daughter younger than Naomi for Jim to fuck lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 16:27, 16 December 2021 (CET)

Jim does indeed have a wife. Said wife is going to get pretty jealous at some point, too. Maybe I should mention her casually, though. Jim is going to kind of act like a mentor to Naomi and teach her how to close big deals as she helps him with his deals, she’s going to get wise to her part in the whole thing and start demanding a lot more than just nice clothes, too. All of that is probably going to take a bit because I’ve got that portion to write with the other girl, too. And I’d like to see Naomi and probably the other guys daughter at some charity events, likely paraded around naked at some point.

For this next part, I’ve had this image for a little while now of Naomi wearing a short skirt and a tanktop on a golf course, so that’s the next chapter. Naomi is going to be a the golfing partner of a guy and used as leverage so Jim can save a bunch of money when he buys his company. Naomis is really going to like this guy. I figure I can give her a good time before she ends up getting thrown in and fucked with so hard by that other guy with the big nose from the dinner.


I see an easy ending for April’s story and definitely Zoe’s. Naomi’s? Hers is too interesting to even make me want to think about it. It’s hard to pick favorites because I honestly feel in my head like Zoe is a little cuter, but Naomi’s story is so much more complex and interesting. Having gone through so much, Naomi is going to pull through and be a lot stronger in the end. Whereas I think most of the characters I’ve even written (Zoe and April especially) would break under the kind of pressure Naomi is going to have. She has her brothers to thank for that. Naomi is going to use it like a weapon and just get stronger. Maybe that’s a little too deep for a story like this, but hell, why can’t a taboo erotica story have an underlying meaning and life lesson? --Hgcollins (talk) 17:19, 16 December 2021 (CET)

No reason at all that it can't. lol I agree that her first few trips should be mostly fun so she can see how good it can be. If she protests too much, it gets bad (guy with big nose), but if she's an eager little slut, everyone has a good time lol. Is Jim's wife the one with the yellow skirt? If she gets jealous, maybe she can force a weekend for herself? That could be one of the bad weekends like tied up or fuck machine or with a dog.

I still like the OhMyBod vibrator type charity. Maybe they're walking around the party and everyone has some sort of remote where they can set how much they "donate" and press send to give the amounts of pleasure to the girls. Be funny to see them walking along or standing there talking to someone, then suddenly orgasm so hard they fall to the floor and flop around like they're having a seizure lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 18:08, 16 December 2021 (CET)

Yeah, I need to do the vibrator thing. I was going to use that idea for April’s story at one point, but the whole charity thing is better. It will be good for Naomi to see how fucked up some of these rich socialites can be. --Hgcollins (talk) 18:20, 16 December 2021 (CET)

Nothing says you can't do both. Naomi (and her new friend?) get the kind controlled by money donations. April and Tiffany get the wearable kind that just stay on a low setting all day. Maybe the teacher has the remote? Don't forget the extra day being naked added every time they interrupt the class with an orgasm. One's a continuous punishment, the other is rich socialites making little girls orgasm unconscious (then orgasm awake, then back unconscious lol) --Notsooldpervert (talk) 18:29, 16 December 2021 (CET)

Haha April and Tiffany… “I have something for you girls to wear” and they’re thinking they get to wear clothes for once before the teacher pulls them out.--Hgcollins (talk) 18:47, 16 December 2021 (CET)

Hmmm... they report to the Principle to lose their clothes (or prove they're not wearing any if they start removing their rights to clothes at home, too since they keep getting in more trouble). Would he be the one to put them on (and make them hand the teacher the remote) or would the teacher put them on them? --Notsooldpervert (talk) 18:54, 16 December 2021 (CET)


Could go either way. I like the idea of them coming home and finding their closets cleaned out.

And damn, I’m so stoked to write about Naomi at the golf club taking it in a back room from this businessman and then having him pull her panties back on as she’s leaking his cum. Of course he’s very excited to spend time with her again at his beach house with his two teenage sons a few weeks later.

--Hgcollins (talk) 19:28, 16 December 2021 (CET)