Talk:Yes/Tom & Tash/D-1(B) Br3, H-T/Let it happen (Private)

This is pretty much all I got at the moment.I genuinely have no idea which way to play this out now, so any reader input, particularly over the next few pages, would be amazing. --Jackmaster (talk) 16:10, 13 February 2017 (CET)

I'm a little confused, she asked to start "the homework" here during class, but then everyone's going out the door. (also, since it has mostly been just talking, this level of talking can get done in about 10 minutes. There can still be a fair amount of time left in the class depending on how you want to play it.) Jemini (talk) 16:36, 13 February 2017 (CET)

This was all during Registration, which is only half and hour at the start of each day, but includes a 'Personal Devlopment' sessions run by their House Teacher. They were already late at the start of the story, so if we allowed 5 minutes for Tom's antics in class, and only 5 minutes for their discussion outside, it can't leave that long left before the end anyway. My thought was there are only a couple of minutes left in Registration. Next period each day is 1.5 hours of 'In House Interaction', which can essentially be whatever the heck we want it to be, set by the teacher/s, for 90 minutes every day! So that would mean they have 90 minutes to 'do their homework'. --Jackmaster (talk) 17:15, 13 February 2017 (CET)

Tash's question was about her and Tom "going to start the homework", planning to take him to the locker rooms where they would be less likely to be disturbed (possibly...). That may not have been too clear? I can rewrite the ending of this page if need be. --Jackmaster (talk) 17:15, 13 February 2017 (CET)

Actually, considering some of the questions were asking if she (the teacher) wanted to "see" it happen, it would probably make sense for her to have them do it right there in class if they were insisting on starting. Most of the time you tend to need special permission to go out somewhere else. Jemini (talk) 17:31, 13 February 2017 (CET)

Hmm...I guess I could put something in to make that a possibility. I've just had an idea that might make it a little interesting. --Jackmaster (talk) 17:39, 13 February 2017 (CET)

It would also make sense that way that she would have them demonstrating for the rest of the class what they are supposed to be doing. Jemini (talk) 17:43, 13 February 2017 (CET)

A small change that makes quite a big difference! I'm a lot happier with that ending now as well. How do you feel it works? --Jackmaster (talk) 17:48, 13 February 2017 (CET)

Yeah, that's pretty good. I like it. Jemini (talk) 18:50, 13 February 2017 (CET)

"Me and Tom..." As much as the incorrect grammar is annoying, Tash is fourteen, and very teenagers ever use grammatical phrases such as "Someone and I" (at least that's the case in UK) --Jackmaster (talk) 09:08, 14 February 2017 (CET)

Having someone speak grammatically incorrect is fine, I just found the original "myself and Tom" to be cumbersome and unbelievable. I've never heard anyone use myself in such a manner which is why I changed it. Many people incorrectly use me and I though (as annoying as it is to me personally . . . almost as bad as mixing up then and than). Sorry if the correction was unwarranted. --Elerneron (talk) 10:39, 14 February 2017 (CET)

I vote to let Tash have some fun. It's only fair. --Elerneron (talk) 10:46, 14 February 2017 (CET)

Nah it's cool. Just to mention why I changed it again really. Fair enough. It does sound weird now you mentioned it! Your in luck with that vote; already had some ideas for it, so it should be up soon --Jackmaster (talk) 12:13, 14 February 2017 (CET)