Talk:Dirty Talk/Three Brats/June 24th, 2021/Emilia lets her mom mark her with permanent ink

Omg i love this so much there is so much raw energy here. and the way she strap her up and use a wand hits a lot of kinks for me im loving this a lot,

btw if you ever feel just continuing a story and not giving votes at the end you can after all there could be some pages that are just set in stone and then eventually new paths appear (but of course if you just want to open more options that's okay too)

I do have a question can we get more clues on what the options can lead too or at least a hint of who is that someone else showing up is i really don't know what to vote for if you want to keep it as a mystery that fine too i just don't lose anything by asking. but story wise is probably sven the one that makes more sense unless that extra person looking for emilia is someone else in the garden already.

But this was hot thank you so much for the pages im loving this story. (I couldn't believe it but i saw there is people besides me voting for club, so i change my vote last night to that one too but i was certain story wise this one is the one that made more sense and it certainly didn't disappoint Thank you) --Xephion (talk) 19:54, 30 September 2022 (CEST)

I do tend to write whatever I find interesting, but it's fun to be steered by popular opinion. But to be honest I mostly add the polls because that's the original format IR chose, I'm just sticking to it!

I know that I'm not always clear about where each path is going to lead, but I think that's part of the surprise! It's also easier to write more ambiguous paths as I don't always know where it's going either and that way I don't get locked into anything. I figured the club would see some votes, and I may still venture in that direction, but I'll leave that specific path open for someone else to explore! --Villenia (talk) 20:47, 30 September 2022 (CEST)

ok makes sense im probably im still voting for the mysterious person since sven one is gonna happen anyway most likely and the danny one dont know if it makes sense i could be wrong since she drew the spade voluntarily i think it would not count as a punishment so danny would not get notified of it i could be wrong and uhhh thats sad to hear about the club BUT well that makes sense for the path of club at least is still open to appear on the story (i knew it wa gonna still be a possibility since you said spade or more) but makes sense to leave that path open and im voting for the mysterious extra becuase she is in an open shed in the garden so it could be gunnar this is me just assuming to be honest there is so many options of who it could be.

im waiting to see if thats all the revisions so im gonna re-read this page again later to see it in its finish state but from my first impression great job i love it it was hot as hell --Xephion (talk) 20:58, 30 September 2022 (CEST)

To Villenia, this is exactly the Laura I know and love. Calm and collected throughout the whole thing but ruthless in execution. I would still maybe add to the previous page a little fleeting thought to Emilia's last two paragraphs about her realizing she has a right to refuse (I would still prefer not to leave that to ambiguity), but with the transition to this page, it becomes more and more clear that she obviously knows deep down she needs, likes, and even wants to be punished. (And toyed with in general.) Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing.

Speaking of changes elsewhere, this is obviously off-topic to this page, but I've been eyeing the June 20th page with Danny and the forest trail for a while now, and I actually want to change/expand that discussion with Emilia and Heidi with a little. The idea: that little girl Heidi left hanging dry wasn't too appreciative about being left alone, and since she hasn't been around due to not being a local, she feels like she has some unsettled business with Heidi, but Heidi doesn't know this yet because she really has no idea how jealous that little girl can be. So heads up, I'm gonna change the dialogue there if you allow it.

Anyway, ambiguity is overall great, yeah, especially when planning for future possibilities or when you're just going by the flow as far as progressing the story goes. To Xephion's point about it being most sense to be Sven to find him, I agree, since he must have figured out something's going on, even if he doesn't know what. However, that would also be too expected, and the poll option says unexpected. Could be anyone, like Ludwig coming home from work and heading straight to the shed for whatever reason, Emilia's friends because the public beach is not too far away from the Björnquist's backyard, and you know they love to spend time around there, and sneaking around.

Also, you're right about the punishment, but stuff just could've been lost in translation on my part. How I imagine god-imposed vs. self-imposed punishments is: The former means the target has been marked by Kostikki as "disciplinary action necessary, needs to be set straight". In contrast, the latter just means the person is a hopeless fucking pervert who cannot be satisfied by normal means anymore. The latter wouldn't be marked by Kostikki, as he only guides Jokers to those against who "disciplinary action" is required. Since Emilia (or Laura, for that matter) has not broken any rules here, Kostikki would see no reason to guide a Joker towards them. It's kinda ambiguous at this point across the whole story altogether, and that page you mentioned is a very recent change too, so…

Still, Daniel could be drawn to Emilia for other reasons. They're neighbors, and Daniel and Laura are on friendly terms, so I imagine them being in semi-daily contact, and he could've heard something was going on in the yard. I'm not gonna vote on that, though. I'd prefer either Sven or a surprise. Probably a surprise because there's already so much content with Sven, but holding my vote hostage for now. -- Innocent Ruin (talk) 01:13, 1 October 2022 (CEST)

you know i been thinking how the club could have fit on the story (not for this path for this path it has to come in another way i mean the old path) So Emilia doesn't know much about the spade and club since both are practically the same it could be that she means to draw a spade but draws a club by mistake to appease Laura and lets be honest in the heat of the moment she wouldn't remember the difference between a spade or a club and ends up drawing the club (the only reason i had this idea is that i keep confusing the 2 at the beginning because both are very similar) So if anyone wanna use that for inspiration be free to do so. in the future i may try to write something like this to be honest i need a bit more confidence and knowledge to write it. i would need to figure out how to deal with the dad either by getting him out of the house for a while or finding another house maybe danny but im not sure when is his family is coming back, another option is just hiding it for a while (because eventually the dad will be made know of this and hopefully join in but until then). So im gonna wait to see how this path or other paths developed before trying my hand at writing (and if someone uses this path i can always find another path to do it so dont worry about it you can even take my ideas too if you want i don't mind seeing someone else ideas is inspiring) honestly my other problem is my grammar but im sure i can deal with it easily i may really try my hand at writing one day. --Xephion (talk) 09:23, 1 October 2022 (CEST)

Innocent Ruin, feel free to expand on Heidi's date however you want. It was just a fun bit of banter to fit in while they watched Milka, so if you can build it into its own arc be my guest! Strictly speaking I don't even think you need to change any of the existing dialog to make that work. That girl just shows up again out of nowhere and has a misguided vendetta that Heidi is blissfully unaware of. That's tons of fun!

As far as punishments and the gods go, I'm taking more of a "Scooby Doo" approach. Lots of things happen that can be attributed to all that, but there's also "a perfectly reasonable explanation" for everything as well. So Danny finding a need to stop by his house during the day and happening to hear Emilia's faint cries of pleasure from next door could still be Kostikki at work. A joker happening across her while she's marked with black plays into the myth and lore of the legend beautifully and would reinforce how seriously she takes the game. Whether she is "actually" being punished isn't so consequential.

I do have an idea for the visitor though. I'll see where that goes! --Villenia (talk) 22:19, 1 October 2022 (CEST)