Talk:Offline/Get some alone time

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Thanks for the revisions again! The conversation at the beginning flows much better now. As for where I go from here, I plan to write the path where he tries to cut this off, but then I want to come back to write the path where he lets her take the lead to see how far this can go. This other path would be a bad end where either May tells Yulee what happens later or someone walks in on them in the act.

--LukeJ (talk) 14:35, 26 March 2023 (UTC)


I like tweaking and I enjoy dialogue, so happy to revise ongoing! I actually had an idea for the tent that involved Jay and Nicole, so happy to slide that in if you don't have specific plans. Otherwise I can squeeze that in on another branch someplace. --Villenia (talk) 20:58, 26 March 2023 (UTC)