Talk:Sexy Fun Times/Time for sex-ed

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Just injecting some personal opinion here... I like the changes you've made to the last few paragraphs, but I feel disappointed with the complete removal of the first few. They really do a better job of setting the scene for this passage than just immediately jumping from the previous passage into the discussion of her friend's sex life does. Claws61821 (talk) 17:35, 29 October 2019 (UTC)