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Since the set-up was more or less for you to babysit them for the afternoon, which I interpreted as being after school (likely until their mom gets home from work or something,) this might be a good time to call it by their mother coming home after you've had time to clean up a bit. There can be an option to stay here or go home, and then we can have the consiquence scene where the girls say whatever they're going to say whether you're there or not. (And then if you stay, you can be asked by the mother to shower the girls again tomorrow, this time getting in earlier so it's longer. Maybe she even admits it's the sex-related aspects that make her actively uncomfortable with showering her daughters, or at least that it's something she actively dislikes with some hinting that's the reason. (I can handle that part, I'm good at saying things indirectly while it's very obvious what's being said.) And then possibly finishing off with some kind of comment about being fine with you sleeping over anytime just so you can shower the girls in the morning.)
Since the set-up was more or less for you to babysit them for the afternoon, which I interpreted as being after school (likely until their mom gets home from work or something,) this might be a good time to call it by their mother coming home after you've had time to clean up a bit. There can be an option to stay here or go home, and then we can have the consiquence scene where the girls say whatever they're going to say whether you're there or not. (And then if you stay, you can be asked by the mother to shower the girls again tomorrow, this time getting in earlier so it's longer. Maybe she even admits it's the sex-related aspects that make her actively uncomfortable with showering her daughters, or at least that it's something she actively dislikes with some hinting that's the reason. (I can handle that part, I'm good at saying things indirectly while it's very obvious what's being said.) And then possibly finishing off with some kind of comment about being fine with you sleeping over anytime just so you can shower the girls in the morning.)


Of course, this is your story ultimately, I don't want to take too much control away and would rather follow your template for scenes (with some interpretation of course) in order to keep you involved. I've accidentally taken over too many projects, and it frankly gets boring after the original writer steps off the project, so I want to keep encouraging you here. I'm confining myself to the role of just helping you achieve your vision, so view this as just a suggestion. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 20:56, 6 July 2020 (CEST)
Of course, this is your story ultimately, I don't want to take too much control away and would rather follow your template for scenes (with some interpretation of course) in order to keep you involved. I've accidentally taken over too many projects, and it frankly gets boring after the original writer steps off the project, so I want to keep encouraging you here. I'm confining myself to the role of just helping you achieve your vision, so view this as just a suggestion, mostly based on things I'd pulled from what was already said and established in the story. This is just what I think would logically happen next. (another option is to change the earlier dialogue to say afternoon and evening when you are asked to babysit instead of just afternoon, or there can also be a comment about the mother being late.) [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 20:56, 6 July 2020 (CEST)
 
"''Since the set-up was more or less for you to babysit them for the afternoon, which I interpreted as being after school''" That's my fault, I was so caught up in the sex aspect before that I fail to set the scene right.
The idea here is that Wednesday usually there is no school for kids (would be the case in the story) so Maria ends up spending the whole day with her kids. Now for many mothers that would not be so bad and others would manage with clubs and the like. For Maria however Wednesdays (and week end in general)are a bit of a chore and she is always looking for new solutions to have some time for herself, far from her girls. Week ends are a bit easier on her since there are all those cartoons her girls love the whole morning and then they have a few activities the Saturday. Sundays are also a chore for Maria.
Here is where you come in. In the introductory scene for 1st_wednesday I forgot to mention Maria happily leaving for the whole afternoon.
 
In my mind it was something like 3PM which gives roughly 1 hour until the snack (4PM) and the mother could come back as you said right after the snack at 5PM or excuse herself until almost dinner. She would come back likely after some activity which she'd see as good for her self esteem and for the relationship like a new haircut, new clothes or skin care. In her mind she is delighted you took care of her daughters and is willing to maybe reward all your hard work with possibly a kiss later that day. Nothing to fancy but she might even go as far as letting both your tongue touch. It is very gross but should you play your cards just right it may happen. Story wise it means if the reader tries very hard he may end up the day not only after showing child porn to Masha, not only exposing himself to Masha and have her stroke him a little and possibly even suck a bit, not only having Masha then play with Sandra and have Sandra lick her for a while, not only having Masha helping you trick her 4 years old adorable sister full of energy and happiness give you an awesome BJ until you explode in her mouth and all over her face, not only immortalize the moment and ... but also and what most certainly is what the reader always truly hoped for you could end the day with a light 2s kiss with the mother. That's I am certain the real kicker for every one and something that should be hard to achieve if the reader really wants to.
 
"''There can be an option to stay here or go home, and then we can have the consiquence scene where the girls say whatever they're going to say whether you're there or not.''" Anyhow sorry I got lost there. Yes the mom should be coming back soon although you are her romantic interest, her best for a long time so I figured she'd invite you to stay at least for dinner and sleep on the couch. Later on you may unlock some other arrangements than sleeping on the couch when you spend the night (like sleeping in the girls' room with a matress on the floor).
 
I'd more than welcome a consequence scene, your first scene was very good. In my mind it Masha now would start toying with her sister, in her bed at night and the mom could find them in the same bed but would not see much more yet (Masha would be discrete at the beginning and less and less discrete as scenes happen).
"''And then if you stay, you can be asked by the mother to shower the girls again tomorrow, this time getting in earlier so it's longer.''" I assumed you would stay at first but if you did take the first day as far as you could then going on directly on a naughty shower should have consequences (it goes to fast for the girls to adapt, the secret will be out somehow). On the other hand the girls would not understand why you would leave. The better path would be to stay and play nice (you still get to shower the girls naked) and play (non sexual) games with them bonding further. If you went in the "anal" path or push either girls to far the first day that'd also be your chance to do some damage control.
--[[User:Enzo|Enzo]] ([[User talk:Enzo|talk]]) 22:15, 6 July 2020 (CEST)

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Since the set-up was more or less for you to babysit them for the afternoon, which I interpreted as being after school (likely until their mom gets home from work or something,) this might be a good time to call it by their mother coming home after you've had time to clean up a bit. There can be an option to stay here or go home, and then we can have the consiquence scene where the girls say whatever they're going to say whether you're there or not. (And then if you stay, you can be asked by the mother to shower the girls again tomorrow, this time getting in earlier so it's longer. Maybe she even admits it's the sex-related aspects that make her actively uncomfortable with showering her daughters, or at least that it's something she actively dislikes with some hinting that's the reason. (I can handle that part, I'm good at saying things indirectly while it's very obvious what's being said.) And then possibly finishing off with some kind of comment about being fine with you sleeping over anytime just so you can shower the girls in the morning.)

Of course, this is your story ultimately, I don't want to take too much control away and would rather follow your template for scenes (with some interpretation of course) in order to keep you involved. I've accidentally taken over too many projects, and it frankly gets boring after the original writer steps off the project, so I want to keep encouraging you here. I'm confining myself to the role of just helping you achieve your vision, so view this as just a suggestion, mostly based on things I'd pulled from what was already said and established in the story. This is just what I think would logically happen next. (another option is to change the earlier dialogue to say afternoon and evening when you are asked to babysit instead of just afternoon, or there can also be a comment about the mother being late.) Jemini (talk) 20:56, 6 July 2020 (CEST)

"Since the set-up was more or less for you to babysit them for the afternoon, which I interpreted as being after school" That's my fault, I was so caught up in the sex aspect before that I fail to set the scene right. The idea here is that Wednesday usually there is no school for kids (would be the case in the story) so Maria ends up spending the whole day with her kids. Now for many mothers that would not be so bad and others would manage with clubs and the like. For Maria however Wednesdays (and week end in general)are a bit of a chore and she is always looking for new solutions to have some time for herself, far from her girls. Week ends are a bit easier on her since there are all those cartoons her girls love the whole morning and then they have a few activities the Saturday. Sundays are also a chore for Maria. Here is where you come in. In the introductory scene for 1st_wednesday I forgot to mention Maria happily leaving for the whole afternoon.

In my mind it was something like 3PM which gives roughly 1 hour until the snack (4PM) and the mother could come back as you said right after the snack at 5PM or excuse herself until almost dinner. She would come back likely after some activity which she'd see as good for her self esteem and for the relationship like a new haircut, new clothes or skin care. In her mind she is delighted you took care of her daughters and is willing to maybe reward all your hard work with possibly a kiss later that day. Nothing to fancy but she might even go as far as letting both your tongue touch. It is very gross but should you play your cards just right it may happen. Story wise it means if the reader tries very hard he may end up the day not only after showing child porn to Masha, not only exposing himself to Masha and have her stroke him a little and possibly even suck a bit, not only having Masha then play with Sandra and have Sandra lick her for a while, not only having Masha helping you trick her 4 years old adorable sister full of energy and happiness give you an awesome BJ until you explode in her mouth and all over her face, not only immortalize the moment and ... but also and what most certainly is what the reader always truly hoped for you could end the day with a light 2s kiss with the mother. That's I am certain the real kicker for every one and something that should be hard to achieve if the reader really wants to.

"There can be an option to stay here or go home, and then we can have the consiquence scene where the girls say whatever they're going to say whether you're there or not." Anyhow sorry I got lost there. Yes the mom should be coming back soon although you are her romantic interest, her best for a long time so I figured she'd invite you to stay at least for dinner and sleep on the couch. Later on you may unlock some other arrangements than sleeping on the couch when you spend the night (like sleeping in the girls' room with a matress on the floor).

I'd more than welcome a consequence scene, your first scene was very good. In my mind it Masha now would start toying with her sister, in her bed at night and the mom could find them in the same bed but would not see much more yet (Masha would be discrete at the beginning and less and less discrete as scenes happen). "And then if you stay, you can be asked by the mother to shower the girls again tomorrow, this time getting in earlier so it's longer." I assumed you would stay at first but if you did take the first day as far as you could then going on directly on a naughty shower should have consequences (it goes to fast for the girls to adapt, the secret will be out somehow). On the other hand the girls would not understand why you would leave. The better path would be to stay and play nice (you still get to shower the girls naked) and play (non sexual) games with them bonding further. If you went in the "anal" path or push either girls to far the first day that'd also be your chance to do some damage control. --Enzo (talk) 22:15, 6 July 2020 (CEST)