User talk:Telgar

Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy your stay. If you have any questions, or need any help please feel free to contact me on my Talk Page. Feel free to remove this welcome notice if it bothers you. --Elerneron (talk) 04:52, 13 May 2016 (CEST)

Thanks for contributing to my story Life Hacks with your entry Life Hacks/Hallomod(tod-pre)/Let July come, she's close enough in age. You did not add the category to the page, however. Please refer to the Format Rules to make sure that you keep within them. Thank you again for your entry. --Elerneron (talk) 12:12, 9 October 2017 (CEST)

Jemini

Dude! What happened? I thought you were a much better writer than the content you just pushed out in a rush here. These last couple stories certainly look like they have potential, they must have been very well formed in your head, but when it comes to the actual writing you put out it came out as very rushed, there was very little depth of character in the protagonist or demonstration of their personal internal struggles, and the sex scenes were so rushed that in most scenes you might as well say the sex took place off-screen. Granted, I've seen much worse out there, but I've seen you personally produce MUCH better so I found it a bit startling that you would write something like this. Jemini (talk) 12:17, 13 December 2017 (CET)

Ah, that makes sense. Yeah, in that case, I can certainly see why you chose these stories. They certainly do have potential. They're gonna be great once they have recieved a little touch-up from someone who actually has some real serious writing skill. I'm looking forward to what you do with this. BTW: You responded to me on my info page. I don't get an alert when you use the info page, you need to use the talk page in order to get that alert at the top of the screen. The only reason I saw it was because I am in the habit of checking the "recent changes" page. Also, you can tag one of your edits with your signature if you just put in 4 tilde "~" symbols in a row. Jemini (talk) 17:26, 13 December 2017 (CET)

Yeah, this is the second time this punishment has shown up in the story. I can easily see this punishment becoming notorious as the "indefinite diaper sex punishment" that breaks all the usual boundaries. It seems, on the face of it, less extreme and can even be used on a severe infraction, but in fact, it is the one punishment that can even extend beyond them getting pregnant and giving birth. They would still be under the diaper punishment and still have to get raped every time they want to pee, having however many rape-babies they may be impregnated with in the mean-time until they turn 18. The thing is, it's always designed to end in less than a week, it is just that there are very easily achieved provisions to extend it included. Jemini (talk) 23:15, 29 December 2017 (CET)

Ok, so, I know English is not Tod's first language, but I see you making some ESL style mistakes as well, such as using a possessive "s" for virginity (virginity's) instead of the proper pluralization of anything that ends in a y, turning the "y" into an "ies" (so, the pluralization of "virginity" would be "virginities.") Jemini (talk) 07:24, 31 December 2017 (CET)

Yeah, I saw that. So far as the lore goes, one thing I have as a question mark is why so many girls going into the early teens have "zero sexual knowledge." It's something that's entirely justifiable, but some mention has to be made of it. The easiest explanation would be that the school uses 90s era sex-ed standards, which were essentially abstainance only and that's only taught in freshman year of highschool and is entirely optional. There are several ways that could be justified too, including that the school's nationality is such that they were not required to update to the modern day IRL standards of sexual education, and also that since it's an all girls school with such strict rules against gender mixing the students shouldn't need sex-ed and would just be a waste of time when they could be getting taught other things on their curriculum. It would, therefore, not be taught to the younger students since it's more difficult to teach to the younger ones and requires some creative teaching methods. There are several ways to justify it, but since it's something that raises questions it does actually need a mention somewhere. (I could write it up, but I have noticed your ability at lore crafting non-story write-ups is actually better than mine, so I thought I would leave the opportunity to you before I took a swing at it. I feel it might be less awkwardly phrased if you did it.)Jemini (talk) 14:46, 5 March 2020 (CET)

Could you please take a look at and respond to the comment I made on the rules page for Mother's Helping Hand? I legit cannot write for this story with all the mixed messages sent between the rules page and the mother's dialogue, and a hard definite and clear line will help out a lot in that direction. Jemini (talk) 06:11, 7 March 2020 (CET)

Ok, thanks, that cleared up a lot. Also, because the "soft rape" and "soft BDSM" were removed from the "discouraged" list, I decided to add a note under the "hard disallowed" section explaining the difference between hard rape/BDSM and the soft counterparts, noting that the soft versions are allowed. (Basically, I summed up everything you said in the discussion section.) Anyway, by the sounds of it, this perfectly fits my normal writing style. I just have to not push into experimentation with the limits on those areas that I often wind up treading the line on. Jemini (talk) 07:07, 7 March 2020 (CET)

I would place that under "discouraged but permitted" if that's the case. (And also, you messaged me right as I was about to comment on that huge loop-hole, then you go ahead and tell me straight up that it allows exactly what I saw as a possible outcome.) One issue with this though is that it's incredibly likely that any and all rape committed by the MC would be modified by the moon family in this way just because they don't like sexual suffering. That's something to consider. Or is that exactly the intention? (They would probably be a little pissed about it though, so could lead to a bit of a bad outcome for the MC, at the very least some corrective actions if not a straight-up bad end.) Jemini (talk) 07:19, 7 March 2020 (CET)

Only the butt cheeks spread? If so, why not spread the pussy? I'm sure they could find a medical justification for it. Also, if there is no pussy spread, that could tempt the MC into wanting to see the pussy spread since it's absent from the pictures. If not, well, he has an equal chance of wanting either that way as well. Just pushing for keeping options open, you can write the route that appeals to you. I'm just saying all options should be available at the division point. Jemini (talk) 12:20, 7 March 2020 (CET)

As for justifying the whole thing, the whole "health exam" could take place when the students get home after break, giving the dual justification of examining them to make sure they are not carrying in any illnesses to infect the other students (schools are generally a great place for diseases to spread once they get in) as well as checking for any signs of abuse that may or may not have happened at home. Or rather, that's what they say. It would actually be the photograph of the breasts that would give away that this is not the true purpose. If it was checking for signs of bruising from abuse, it would be a full body photograph. Jemini (talk) 12:25, 7 March 2020 (CET)

Alright, but having this in the story might somewhat violate what you wrote up as areas absolutely forbidden in the rules. Then again, it would only be things in the religion and not necessarily what Jack is doing to the twins. But, still, it is something that will increase the likelihood it could come up on this or some other leg that involves the Deverux twins. (I'm talking SCAT, WS, vomit, heavy bondage and torture sorta stuff. I don't like that extent personally, but I have gotten my toes wet into the area and it wouldn't be doing the subject justice if it's not included in the write-up for the religion.) Jemini (talk) 00:05, 11 March 2020 (CET)

Tod Natürlich

I'm glad your enjoying the story, and even more pleased that you're helping with it. I hadn't thought about extending the program to the rest of town, but I have no objections to do it. I really want this story to be open to all, so feel free to add any new ideas. This is actually similar to another idea someone gave about the Deacon wanting to implement the program in church's Sunday school, but I see your idea is more general.

When you say this letter would appear under the "Special" section, I'm assuming you mean the "School Special Events" section of the first quarter hub page, right? Perhaps it would fit more under the "Surprises" section of that same page, since it's not a school event.

Your addition does forces us to more clearly define the town, something that Jemini, Notsooldpervert and myself have slowly been doing, but it's far from done. For instance, so far it was implied that since Mahogany Hills is such a small town, the only school was St. Andre Truitt Academe, and so far the only children not attending would be Beatriz Moore's daughters, those that drop out for whatever reason (usually teens already 15 or older), or very small children not yet matriculated (a minority of 4 and 5 year olds). Under those conditions it makes more sense that the letter focuses on applying the program outside school, more than applying it to children not attending school.

So go ahead and create the page, may I recommend you do it here.

(I'm gonna go ahead and delete the letter from my talk page, since it's actually messing with the formatting.) --Tod Naturlich (talk) 06:31, 15 December 2017 (CET)

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Just a question to satisfy my curiosity, is your pen name Telgar, Tekgar, Telger, or all of them, since I see you've write it in all three fashions in different parts of the site. At first I thought it was a typo, but it seems too deliberate for that, so I'm guessing there's a hidden meaning behind it. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 23:32, 16 December 2017 (CET)

talk

Ah, I did not know about academe being an actual word I'll try to keep that in mind. DrAlithe (talk) 14:51, 16 December 2017 (CET)

Elerneron

Xander is of Scandinavian / Anglo-Saxon ETHNICITY. His nationality is USA. It just means that the two highest contributing ethnicities that make up Xander's Lineage are Scandinavian followed by Anglo-Saxon (British). --Elerneron (talk) 22:17, 24 April 2019 (CEST)

You're killing me with all this activity. You know I have to patrol every edit right? But seriously it's nice to see another big project even if it is creating a lot of work for me during the week (and not on the weekend when I actually have time) lol jk keep up the good work. --Elerneron (talk) 17:11, 5 March 2020 (CET)

Additionally, your images need to have a category just like a story page would. Please add one to the images. --Elerneron (talk) 17:26, 5 March 2020 (CET)

Is there a reason that you changed Frosty's middle name from Lokison to Lorkison in the Story Yes when you changed him to her; or was it an oversite? I don't mind, but it seems out of place as though you may have looked at the name wrong . . . otherwise I could think that you would change the whole name, and not just one of them. --Elerneron (talk) 14:40, 6 March 2020 (CET)

If the story includes furry content, it needs to be in Furry Stories or Meta Stories. If there is only the possibility of future furry content it is fine where it is until that content is added. --Elerneron (talk) 14:07, 9 March 2020 (CET)

The best place to put feedback on my lore for Generations is the Lore page for which you are making suggestions. The best way to handle it would be to make a new section by surrounding the section name with double equal signs. This will let you keep it all together without other people's comments interfering with your feedback.

Please note that the Lore for Generations is NOT being used for D&D, only the basic setting and maps. All races and abilities are being changed to D&D 5th edition standards for the game D&D. Generations seemed to be too much work for writers, so I lost my motivation. My best work is usually when I have someone else collaborating with me. By the time I get them, I'm usually already burned out, or nearly burned out on the project. --Elerneron (talk) 16:13, 13 March 2020 (CET)