User talk:Tod Naturlich
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Elerneron
You didn't do anything wrong, there just isn't a subcategory page for the Winterkin yet, as there was no page referencing it. I'll create the category page. For future reference one can make a category page by clicking on the red link by Category: at the bottom of the page, adding a short description like An index of the pages in the story [[Invasion]]. Then adding the type of story as the category or (as in this case) a parent category page. --Elerneron (talk) 16:28, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
Since gravity is directly proportional to mass (as opposed to radius), and they have already found a terrestrial planet that is 5x more massive than the earth in another solar system (Gliese 436 c.) I disagree with the gravity for the Markovik being a problem. A quick search reveals that (at least one expert) says that a terrestrial planet can be 5-10 times the mass of Earth before it has too much atmosphere and would be considered a gass giant. On that note, we could get even larger by having a gas giant that had its atmosphere ripped away in a cosmic catastrophe.
You are correct about the fact that a more massive planet should have a thicker atmosphere. There are all kinds of things that can happen to a planet's atmosphere, it's a dangerous, unpredictable universe out there.
(I do agree that Chromammalian planet defies the laws of physics as it currently stands BTW. I was thinking about saying something, but you beat me to it.) --Elerneron (talk) 14:45, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
I had to delete your pajama image. Due to the nature of the site as a pedophile friendly zone, we cannot permit photographs of real children regardless of how innocent the image is. As per the Site Rules 2.2 - Non-pornographic content involving real children is not allowed and may result in anything from a warning to a ban depending on the severity of the violation. I have taken the liberty of finding an alternate image. If it is not acceptable, please find a drawn or 3D rendered image to replace it with, not a photograph. --Elerneron (talk) 15:44, 5 September 2017 (CEST)
For future reference, you can change the title of a page by using the Move action under the More tab in the edit UI. If you are correcting the Title of a page, that may be a preferred way for you to do it. I'll delete pages for you if you want me to, but moving the page may be simpler for you. --Elerneron (talk) 01:29, 28 September 2017 (CEST)
Foalpoots
9267 helixes
9267 → hepta- (7) + hexaconta- (60) + dicta- (200) + nonalia- (9000) = heptahexacontadictanonalia-
--Foalpoots (talk) 02:28, 29 June 2017 (UTC)
Twinklestar
Oh thank you. I am going to try it.
Okay...?
"Twinklestar (talk) 23:04, 14 July 2017 (UTC)"
Notsooldpervert
The signature button only seems to appear on the talk/discussion pages. The story pages don't have it (that I've seen)
When I read the title, I thought it would be primarily about spanking. Then I saw the post about a diaper and was like "what the hell?". I think I'll go make a suggestion, (other than diaper wearing, though that did let him see her naked) --Notsooldpervert (talk) 07:14, 4 September 2017 (CEST)
LOL I was just looking for an excuse for some middle to severe infractions so he could strip one or two, and creampie some others. My main kinks for stories are loli, incest, and impregnation. Throw in a little mind control occasionally and it's all golden lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 23:46, 5 September 2017 (CEST)
I agree, anal does nothing for me, and yaoi is a turn off. Rather than cumming inside a girl when she doesn't want to get pregnant, I find it much more arousing to cum in the girl who doesn't quite realize that it leads to pregnancy. o_O --Notsooldpervert (talk) 03:42, 7 September 2017 (CEST)
I added some suggestions for male punishments in the punishment guidelines page. Tried to make it on par with what the girls have to do, but emasculating the boys instead of impregnating them. Gonna need a some helpers for punishing the boys, since the MC likes girls. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 04:35, 7 September 2017 (CEST)
I agree with telling her that's what you're trying to do if she already knows, but imagine the girl asking mommy why her new panties and jeans are too tight. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 18:33, 7 September 2017 (CEST)
The best way I see to combine them is she does something bad enough to get inseminated on a daily basis until you're sure it takes effect. When she starts asking, tell her as you do it again. It's a little unrealistic though, because by the time they're old enough for it to happen, they've got a pretty good idea what causes it. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 03:29, 8 September 2017 (CEST)
Ok, i thought of a way for suzy and ginny marlow's mom to beg him to fuck the girls. Ginny gets in a little trouble (diaper or PJs) and Suzy pushes a kid for making fun of her. Suzy is then sent to the office for "fighting" which is her first serious offence, but not her first ever, and as we know, the recipient of the "protection" is supposed to get the same punishment. Mom gets called about her "troublemaker kids" and she's mortified that this happened on the tail of Matt's major trouble. She confesses that her husband is devasted at the loss of face, and he was already all too eager to "help punish" the girls. She begs you to choose a punishment that he can't get to the girls, even if it means calling them to your office to fill them with your seed whenever you want to. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 02:33, 10 October 2017 (CEST)
RESPONSE TO ABOVE (Jemini speaking.) Actually, from the looks of it, I think that may have already been in the plans, looking back at the 1st quarter punishments under the "Students who just couldn't stay out of trouble" section, so that could be a good suggestion for how the fight was motivated. Jemini (talk) 08:11, 10 October 2017 (CEST)
No worries. It's just with everything so far, he's only busted a nut in 2 girls (3 counting his sister, snd one was twice... ok i'm greedy lol)--Notsooldpervert (talk) 03:44, 10 October 2017 (CEST)
Jemini
Yeah, the talk pages attached to each section are probably the best. I check the "recent changes" box frequently, so I WILL see any comments you leave in that form.
FYI: I have just made a lot of minor posts in your story. Mostly, this is because I have been sick. I have been using this as an outlet since I can't do much else, but the quality of my writing may be down since I am not all there in the head right now. (Most of the first post I made finishing off the sex scene with Tihana was written before I got sick and saved in a word document, I just finished that one up so most of it should be fine.) Jemini (talk) 17:52, 25 September 2017 (CEST)
Sounds good. I just amended the displaced punishment guidelines in order to accommodate and justify the Suzy and Ginny storyline you told me about. At any rate, yeah, this sort of dynamic writing tends to flow from the spontaneous writing style that I use. The only criteria that I base my segments on is the likely reactions of certain characters to certain situations. I am actually a little bad at the base building blocks of character creation, which is why I mostly work with other people's stories, but once I have at least a name, a picture, or their relative relation to some other characters I can fill in the gaps and then from there I can start figuring on how they may react to certain situations. That's how I make my stories.
This is why it was that I was able to portray Luana as well as you had commented on. My writing style completely hinges on my understanding of the characters, so the level of writing I put out on that passage is pretty much what is to be expected from my approach to writing. As for my thoughts on the level of bullying Diya was facing, which as we established demonstrated a lack of insight on Luana's character as I had become too attached to August's character in figuring on what he might do and failed to consider the interaction deeply enough, I am quite glad we talked that part over because you were quite right on that one. What I was thinking would make no sense at all for Luana to have not completely flattened the kid.
Although there is also the possible angle for her to have been holding back a bit in order to test how John would side on the issue, and then also considering that she has to deal with Freddy Lefort as well and would need to know exactly where she stands before moving a plan forward. It all depends on exactly how intelligent and conniving we want to make her. That is one thing to look out for though. When you push one extreme, like making Diya's abuse by the bullies more extreme, it pushes other extremes by necessity in order to justify it, such as making Luana deviously intelligent and long-thinking and the town officials especially callous. It makes for a lot of intrigue, but at the sacrifice of some believability (however believable the premise of the story is already.) Jemini (talk) 00:23, 4 October 2017 (CEST)
I'm not sure if you've ever read a light novel called Overlord, but I'm about to pull some stuff with Diya inspired directly by the later volumes in that series. One of the running gags in the series is that things the MC does on a whim wind up having incredible results, and he gets credited for it by everyone around him as though he did that on purpose knowing it was going to turn out that way. It's fairly down from the sorts of things that happen in Overlord (Like accidentally taking over a country simply by deciding to go to a battle arena on a certain day. The name of the series IS Overlord for a reason.) and John is a little more aware of what he's doing than the MC of Overlord, but he's going to get the same kind of credit for it from both sides on this. (Yeahhh... I told you, one of my weaknesses is that I habitually write my characters smart. Just like the last time though, every last part of what's about to happen is perfectly believable.) Jemini (talk) 14:15, 4 October 2017 (CEST)
I just realized, I was about to write the running in the halls punishment when I realized I had Ginny Marlow included as one of the girls he swept up. That would make this Ginny's first punishment. I knew you had wanted to write that storyline involving her, would you like to write that one or would it not really matter on the first punishment? So far as how I was planning on treating it, it would be fairly similar to Suzy's punishment except that this time he can actually justify just about everything he did there except the part where he leaves the large helping of semen on her pussy beings their disrespectfulness qualifies this as a mid-level infraction. (actually, I may just modify that, I can see them clearing that for a pre-pubescent girl.) It also occured to me while looking over the 3 girls that they actually have 3 of the far less likely parents to raise a fuss if John oversteps his bounds and.. kinda leaves it off of paper. Although, probably not any form of penetration. Touching their pussies with his dick maybe. Jemini (talk) 17:39, 4 October 2017 (CEST)
I can think about it with changing the 3rd grader. It actually does kinda work, that would make all three of the parents incredibly permissive to the point John could completely disregard the rules without getting a complaint (the only issue leading to a bad ending being that it would show a pattern of behavior that could get him in trouble if continued.)
Anyway, I put some thought into what kinda industry they have in the town, and I actually managed to narrow it down to one that makes any real sense. It can't be anything like cars or shoes. The only kind of manufacturing that gets put out in the middle of nowhere is something that IS in demand, but doesn't see a lot of repeat business from the same localized area. Textiles (clothing) and electronics do sometimes get put out some distance from a big city, but those are often done in India, China, and a few 3rd world countries, this seems to be set in a western country (likely in Europe or Canada, it's certainly not in the US beings prostitution is legal in this town.) So, given those criteria, we are down to only a few options. Steel and other construction grade stuff almost makes the cut, but not quite. Large cities do have more demand of it since they are constantly doing construction. About the only thing that really makes sense is large solar arrays for solar farms (not the newer and smaller solar shingles for individual home use.) That's really about the only thing I can think of that the town could make that fits all the criteria to be in a small hick town in a western country.
Also, perfectly on a side note continuing the thing about Overlord, the Anime actually covers the 1st 3 books, every 4 or so episodes being one book (the 3rd book was such a big event that it took 5 episodes and still left a lot of details out, that's the one that involves Shaltear.) Light novels are short by nature, so you can pull stuff like that. Also, the author's writing style lends itself especially well to condensing down his work since his writing style is very similar to JRR Tolken in that he puts a ridiculous amount of effort into describing every detail about how an object looks or how a person delivers just one line. Unlike Tolken though, the author of Overlord does not put details like that in for no reason, I do not think there has been a single one of those ridiculously specific details he has put in that didn't turn out coming back up again later in some way. At any rate, it's easy to condense that down in the anime since all it boils down to is that the artists drawing it have a better guide to work with and less creative liberty to take when drawing exactly what he described, and the people delivering the lines only have to deliver it exactly as the book describes with all the hesitations in the appropriate places, and then suddenly what took practically a page and a half to describe in writing is condensed down into about 5 seconds or less in the anime. Jemini (talk) 16:24, 6 October 2017 (CEST)
Actually, another thing that made me think of Solar was the note about the government subsidies. Solar is an industry that really is heavily subsidized by the government. That may even be the key factor that puts Solar ahead of any other candidate, I can't really see a justification for many other industries, apart from agriculture which was not heavily noted as something big in this town, to just get by because of the fact that the government subsidizes it.
And, once again continuing with our dual-talk about Overlord, I believe the 1st 3 novels have been officially translated and released in English. There are also fan translations beyond that, but those are a little harder to find since most of the major easy-access ones voluntarily removed all of their Overlord material the very moment it got officially licensed. I'm up to date on it, but most of that's because I read it right as it's being translated. The fresh newly translated stuff is actually easier to find than stuff that's been out for a while. So, I do wish you luck in finding stuff online beyond volume 3, it is certainly enjoyable, but I just found the need to explain it might be a little difficult. Jemini (talk) 06:21, 7 October 2017 (CEST)
BlackDragon
Thank you for your kind words. I like how the epilogue feature is fitting into the story. I can't guarantee that all of the will be perfect but most will involve some sort of happy angle. Though there maybe a few that end up on the darker side.--Blackdragon25 (talk) 08:23, 2 September 2017 (CEST)
DrAlithe
Your story is nice. I do not have much to say since there is a lack of content. However, what I have seen is very good and only has a few minor errors. Currently, I can not wait to see more in the story especially anything with the daughters or sleeping, well actually almost anything really. The only possible complaint is that the male punishment scales up faster than the females what with sex happening a whole tier before. Alas, that is all I have to say except that most of your writing is good and I didn't realise you were not a native speaker. --DrAlithe (talk) 23:17, 10 September 2017 (CEST)
I do apologize for the signalling problem. It appears I changed the American spelling to the British. I attempt to avoid that mistake, however, some slip through the cracks. DrAlithe (talk)
Also, it is no problem to correct these I find it far more irritating to be unable to correct them. Most of what you do is very good and it tends to be better than some of my classmates. DrAlithe (talk)
There is no difference between the two. It is just a difference in spelling. I can not say I have ever heard of a word for a group of signals and my search turned up no clues, however, for a group of signals I am pretty sure you still just use signals. Hope this clarifies it. DrAlithe (talk)
Amusingly with the italics, I'm pretty sure you had them correct further down on that page and just had the wrong ones in one spot. DrAlithe (talk)
A note for the reddish-brown edit I made. Typically with hair colour, you name the lesser colour first and then the dominant one. DrAlithe (talk)
Butting into this section (Jemini speaking) with a comment on the previous item. Normally wouldn't, but since I know English isn't Tod's first language I felt the need to elaborate on this. What DrAlithe says is correct but there is an exception that requires you to be a lot more wordy where the order could be reversed. You would say she had "brown hair with just a hint of red to it." "Reddish-brown" of course is the much shorter, simpler, and easier way to write it, primarily used in a bio page or a quick run-down about a person. The exception I just mentioned would be used in the context of an actual story if you are in the middle of introducing a character for the first time to the audience and describing them thoroughly as using the more wordy version can, in certain contexts, be better for setting the atmosphere whereas the shorter version can feel more impersonal and distant. Jemini (talk) 23:22, 1 October 2017 (CEST)