Talk:Mother's Helping Hand/Start
Looks like it's going to be an interesting story. Might I suggest links to the characters' bios on this page, so you can know who you're choosing? --Notsooldpervert (talk) 00:06, 4 March 2020 (CET)
Give the premise, I think it needs some more generalized options. Like, maybe a kink and the picture only of a person who fits the kink. Jemini (talk) 00:41, 4 March 2020 (CET)
My suggestions for categories. Age based
- Older/experienced
- Girlfriend material (Highschool girls)
- Barely pubescent (middle school)
- Extremely young (Elementary school)
Kink based
- Mind control
- Naive/innocent girl
- Spunky/resistant girl
- Problemed girl
Also, it could be interesting and appropriate to set this entire story up into chapters based not on time but on the MC's progress on getting from beta to alpha. Make him really pathetic near the start and in need of a lot of encouragement to do anything with the girl and then have him get more confident and domineering later down the road. Jemini (talk) 01:33, 4 March 2020 (CET)
Yeah I agree with the need for development, Girls like Sarah Harper are going to be hard for a Beta like Jack is now. Having to first help her deal with her issues, then after that, get into the seduction. Or women of strong conviction like Tammy Garfield.
He should probably start with a younger girl maybe Middle School age, someone he can relate to, but not be intimidated by.
But please don't wait for me to start anything if you see a girl and kink that Sparks your interest go for it.Telgar (talk) 16:40 3 March 2020 (PST)
Okay I tried out your suggestion with Emily and Sarah, to show two extremes on the spectrum. Let me know what you think. Telgar (talk) 17:53, 3 March 2020 (PST)
Hmm... not exactly what I had meant by kinks. Do you mind if I throw a bit of an overhaul to the start page? What I have in mind will be a little redundant, having some categories with the same girl repeated in a few different categories, but it should have a little less "leudo-narrative dissonance" to it. (leudo-narrative dissonance is when a mechanic in how something is presented disagrees with the narrative of the story that's trying to be told.) The current arrangement is definitely the most efficient, but it just doesn't seem to have the right flow for the theme we're supposed to be working with in my opinion. Suddenly choosing off a list broken down by age and grade just doesn't flow very well after the way the previous page ended. Jemini (talk) 04:35, 4 March 2020 (CET)
Sure give it a shot I'm always open to suggestions ,as long as there is some way to go back I'd I don't like it 🙂 Telgar (talk 19:41, 3 March 2029 (PST)