Talk:Disciplinary Action/Disciplinary Office/First Week/Diya/Light/End

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Ok, so, most of it worked out for the utility first, romance second approach I had in mind originally, I just had to modify the part with the hug a little, ending it sooner as she then hesitated and ultimately didn't put voice to her little plan. This change, in turn, also completely changes the meaning behind her last line before leaving about how she will "talk to him later," causing it to refer to what's going on right now in the 2nd week where she invites him to her home. Jemini (talk) 21:32, 28 December 2017 (CET)

We could also change her last line to: "talk to you later… Sir", since most students are taught to address the teachers that way, and calling him by name implies a greater degree of closeness. What do you think? --Tod Naturlich (talk) 01:23, 29 December 2017 (CET)

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