Talk:Disciplinary Action/Disciplinary Office/First Week/Threatening/Recognize

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I was just reading through the character bios, and this storyline just SCREAMED that it had to be made. I took a lot of liberty giving Luana a lot of knowledge about Jhon and Beatriz, hope that's alright. Jemini (talk) 11:06, 2 October 2017 (CEST)

At least I know I'm good at planting clues. The story screamed since I was planning to write it. I still think you wrote it better (and much sooner) than me. You did give Luana more knowledge about John than I initially thought, but it works very well. The only part I was worried about, was when Luana all but agreed to have sex with John. While she probably wouldn't mind some heavy petting, she's decided not to have sex unless she's emotionally involved with her partner, and in that respect, she's more likely to have sex with Beatriz than John. Another thing is that she's in school mainly waiting for her eighteenth birthday and her legal freedom, she would have no qualm at being expelled after refusing to comply with a punishment. Perhaps the only real leverage to keep her in school would be the safety of her sister. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 00:31, 3 October 2017 (CEST)

Oh, I actually wasn't planning on having her actually have sex with him. Her bio says that she tends to be in control, so she was taking control of the situation by trying to take the pace of things and hopefully get him off before wanting to take her virginity. (Possibly giving head being the farthest she would willingly go.) I didn't quite consider the possibility of her taking an expulsion over a punishment, that's something that might come up if it goes the other route where John takes control of the situation. Jemini (talk) 00:55, 3 October 2017 (CEST)

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