Talk:Disciplinary Action/Characters/Brennon/Terrell

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Oh dear, husband's in a suit and wife most certainly looks like someone who comes from money as well. There's only one job in town that would grant any form of serious affluence. This guy, if he's not the general manager of the factory, then he is at least high up in it. Also, with them having only one child, they are probably not part of the religious majority of the town either. Most likely outsiders. That's gonna certainly spice things up and make things difficult for the program. Jemini (talk) 02:09, 10 May 2018 (CEST)


Conflict is excellent for the story. The program needs to be challenged somehow. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 02:43, 10 May 2018 (CEST)


Aaaaand, now that I was just about to do the write-ups, I realized there is actually an alternate explanation that could have the exact opposite results. He could very well just as easily be one of Leopold's "connections" that are allowing him to keep this thing running. Oi... that's a tough one. I might have to put off writing this one until some more of the town is fleshed out a bit. I CAN, however, write up the daughter since either of the two profiles I have in mind for the parents will have her wind up the same either way. Jemini (talk) 08:34, 10 May 2018 (CEST)

EDIT: Just saw you added a son for the family. THAT actually does throw off what I was thinking of for the daughter. It can still go either way, but if you happen to add one or two more children to the family it increases the likelihood he's actually from the town instead. Still gonna make him someone with pull in the factory.

Also, I just thought of having him be the mayor or someone in city hall, but he seems a little too young for that one. A position in the factory seems more likely. However, that does bring to mind that we need a profile for the mayor and his family. Jemini (talk) 08:38, 10 May 2018 (CEST)


The son was as much a surprise to me as it was for you. I'm guessing when I created the family I forgot about him, since he's in the profiles of all the family, but not in the general roster, and in the individual descriptions it's just his name and age, not a link to a page. Usually I would think someone else edited the son in, but the history of the pages shows I was the only one to do it. I guess I was too tired when I did it.

I just put a text with the mother, saying the son is no longer in town, but it can be easily changed to say the son stayed in school where they came from, so it doesn't really affect things that much.

As for the mayor, I'm thinking of nominating Mr. Coleman Kraham. He's 50, has a 32 year old wife and two daughters with her (who know how many he has with previous women). --Tod Naturlich (talk) 09:00, 10 May 2018 (CEST)


No, just the existence of the son period drastically alters everything I was thinking about for the daughter. Even if he's not in the story, the profile I was going to write for her hinges on her being an only child. It's not that it's specifically mentioned she's an only child, I had a personality for her that is the sort of personality that tends to be most prevalent among only children... although, now that I have actually tried to describe the problem rather than leaving it alone and dropping it, I do have a few ideas now about how the previous plans can be easily salvaged and applied with the son just out of the picture. Jemini (talk) 13:11, 10 May 2018 (CEST)


We can also just remove the mention of the son from the three pages. I honestly don't remember why it's even there, so it's no problem to simply remove him. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 21:18, 10 May 2018 (CEST)