Talk:Disciplinary Action/Characters/Brothel/Aisha

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I may have cheated a bit, the picture is Istar from Danmachi, her height is also pulled from Danmachi. Her middle name Inanna is the Sumarian name for Ishtar --MrPib (talk) 02:41, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Going to copy this from Jem's talk page

It's alright, I was aiming towards something like "she ran away from home... She hates child abuse... She doesn't want Shantae (orally and anally) raped" as hints towards her upbringing by abusive parents. I actually wrote that part thinking of the Franklin girls and their whole situation. The last part about killing someone, was meant to display even further her hatred towards Child abuse, while also indicating that she is hardly ever seen in a state other than happiness. --MrPib (talk) 03:59, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Not sure if we're going to keep the last bit, but if we want to have sex with Shantae, we're going to have to satisfy her mother "if you can make a whore writhe in pleasure, then you can make love to my daughter" --MrPib (talk) 04:47, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Yeah, probably not a good line to have. First because these are supposed to be starting bios, and second because the attitude is not completely consistent with everything else. If she sees him satisfying Diya, why would she be concerned about him proving himself further? I don't think it's entirely bad to have stuff that is into the meat of the story in the bio instead of just the past stuff, but it being placed off seperately like that makes it feel rather off. It probably could have been salvaged with some work, but I removed it because simply removing it is the easier way to go. (Might do some kind of update to the profiles later after the MC has encountered everyone to show where they are as of X time period, probably after the 2nd quarter starts.) Jemini (talk) 05:35, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Sounds good --MrPib (talk) 15:44, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Sorry, removed the bit about the middle name. Rule of thumb, just because you know it does not mean the whole world knows it. There are very very few historically minded people interested in the subject who would know what that name means. Wider society just wouldn't know, and while Mohogony Hills has a higher chance of knowing that stuff due to them having a hang-up about sex, it is still highly unlikely they would learn Sumerian and the only reason they would know it is if one person in town knew it and spread it around, in which case the people in town would use it to deride and make negative comments about her. (although the exact sting of those negative comments would likely not be great considering she's already a prostitute.) Jemini (talk) 23:03, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Understandable, but the fourth wall stuff was meant for the reader, so that they understood the irony of her name, and why she got picked on when she was younger

Edit: oh I see what you removed. You removed the part where the kids called her a whore, not the explanation. --MrPib (talk) 00:11, 17 November 2019 (UTC)