Talk:Disciplinary Action/Disciplinary Office/First Week/Visit1/Love/Answer

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I'm loving this part of the story. I really want to see the relationship of John and his daughters to grow, both in a sexual way and in a more traditional way. I just filled in a path that he might have taken on his last sleepover there, where he slept with the girls. I doubt it changes anything about what you might have planned for this section.

I do want to share with you two ideas that came to me when I wrote the first scene with John and his sister. There I mentioned that John was unhappy with her sister's pubic hair, and Beatriz being a perceptive woman probably noticed. So I figured she shaved herself down there to try and increase her appeal for her brother. (You can decide it the twins have already seen their mother smooth before or if it's a surprise for them as well). The other thing that I was never able to put into that first discussion they had about the girl's sexuality, is that while Beatriz does want them to feel loved just like her, she doesn't want them to end up pregnant like her. So this is another layer in the conflict she has about offering her daughters to her brother (along with the fear that he will trade her for them, or abandon them all together). --Tod Naturlich (talk) 06:29, 11 October 2017 (CEST)