Talk:Fun with Naomi/Part 4

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Nice! About the only thing I'd change would be to add more of the wives playing with her. Maybe rubbing her body (especially her clit) trying to make her cum with their husband's cock fucking her? Maybe add the waiter back in sooner to show he's still there, like refilling the water glass she knocked over while inches away from where she's getting her pussy filled with cum while the guys wife strums her clit. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 15:38, 10 December 2021 (CET)

Cool, I pretty much forgot about the waiter and most of the wives until I was nearly finished and I had to go back and add them in. So that makes sense. I’m pretty excited to write about her upcoming weekend. I’m thinking she’ll end up liking her one-on-one time with the CEO but then he has some kink he likes to satisfy with her that she’s not into. And of course she’s passed off to the other businessmen for more fun. This story can go in so many crazy directions now and I think I’ll probably end up adding a lot of strange scenarios I’ve never written about before. I added a few story codes yesterday in anticipation. I don’t want things to get too dark, but this story is shaping up for her to have some fun and then suddenly find herself hauled off with a group of foreign businessmen who take her back to their hotel suite to fulfill their weird fantasies. --Hgcollins (talk) 18:47, 10 December 2021 (CET)

Maybe he's got a kink that freaks her out when she first hears about it or learns it's going to happen to her, then she winds up loving it? Can't really help you there, since my kinks are incest, age difference and impregnation/risk, all of which are already included lol. Maybe once a month she's sent to a different executive's house for a night/weekend. While there, he (or his wife) uses her to fulfill a kink the other half of the married couple doesn't like or want to participate in? Like a wife who wants to tie someone down, spank them red, then fuck them unconscious with a strap on. The executive doesn't want to do it, so he uses his weekend with Naomi to give his wife an outlet. Another executive likes... say... fuck machine porn. The wife refuses to even consider it, so they use Naomi for it, strapping her down and fucking her non-stop for hours. Some she likes, some she hates. Either way, she's sent home with a video of her time with them, which they watch as a family fucking her even more as the videos turn them on lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 19:01, 10 December 2021 (CET)


I just looked up a ridiculously long list of varied things. There’s the usual culprits, I just want to stay away from scat. I found one that is particularly amusing involving reading poetry. I also like the idea of her being blindfolded and feeling things happen to her. --Hgcollins (talk) 19:40, 10 December 2021 (CET)

Hmmm... exhibitionism and living art.... one of them has a party where she's the center piece being fucked in various positions and ways (possibly more than one guy or a string of guys so when one is done there's another hard cock waiting for her "performance" to continue). Meanwhile, there's a cocktail party going on and her only purpose is to give people having conversations something to look at/watch. Maybe a charity event where instead of a silent auction she's on display with one of those OhMyBod type vibrators and people can make donations to stimulate her over and over with how much she's stimulated depending on how much they donate to the charity? --Notsooldpervert (talk) 19:57, 10 December 2021 (CET)


Well, no crazy changes but I did fix up part 4. With adding the waiter in more often, it also gave me a change to have some more fun with a few of the food "accidents" around the table. I think it added a few nice touches and made the whole scene a bit more dramatic. It's easily one of the most fun scenes I've written. It's a shame it wasn't very fun for Naomi. I'm so glad I'm writing this story again.--Hgcollins (talk) 09:30, 12 December 2021 (CET)