User talk:Telgar

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Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy your stay. If you have any questions, or need any help please feel free to contact me on my Talk Page. Feel free to remove this welcome notice if it bothers you. --Elerneron (talk) 04:52, 13 May 2016 (CEST)

Thanks for contributing to my story Life Hacks with your entry Life Hacks/Hallomod(tod-pre)/Let July come, she's close enough in age. You did not add the category to the page, however. Please refer to the Format Rules to make sure that you keep within them. Thank you again for your entry. --Elerneron (talk) 12:12, 9 October 2017 (CEST)

Dude! What happened? I thought you were a much better writer than the content you just pushed out in a rush here. These last couple stories certainly look like they have potential, they must have been very well formed in your head, but when it comes to the actual writing you put out it came out as very rushed, there was very little depth of character in the protagonist or demonstration of their personal internal struggles, and the sex scenes were so rushed that in most scenes you might as well say the sex took place off-screen. Granted, I've seen much worse out there, but I've seen you personally produce MUCH better so I found it a bit startling that you would write something like this. Jemini (talk) 12:17, 13 December 2017 (CET)