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Nice! One note though, as I pointed out in one of the other paths, the Goldilox Cock doesn't change size, it makes the hole it's going in comfortably accommodate, and larger ones just feel plenty of pleasure from a smaller size. In fact, when combined with Perfect Fit, it sounds like it won't get smaller than the current 5 inches, as smaller holes still stretch comfortably to fit, and the cock grows to fit snugly in larger ones. I'm choosing to "get on with the sex", and if I may make a suggestion, start with Siobhan. Trish and the other three girls can kneel there and get a real close view of you filling up the older girl. Hopefully all five of them will have bellies full while lunch is served, then start all over lol --[[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]] ([[User talk:Notsooldpervert|talk]]) 05:29, 25 October 2018 (CEST) | Nice! One note though, as I pointed out in one of the other paths, the Goldilox Cock doesn't change size, it makes the hole it's going in comfortably accommodate, and larger ones just feel plenty of pleasure from a smaller size. In fact, when combined with Perfect Fit, it sounds like it won't get smaller than the current 5 inches, as smaller holes still stretch comfortably to fit, and the cock grows to fit snugly in larger ones. I'm choosing to "get on with the sex", and if I may make a suggestion, start with Siobhan. Trish and the other three girls can kneel there and get a real close view of you filling up the older girl. Hopefully all five of them will have bellies full while lunch is served, then start all over lol --[[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]] ([[User talk:Notsooldpervert|talk]]) 05:29, 25 October 2018 (CEST) | ||
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Hey, thanks for writing and contributing! It has been WAY too long since anyone other than me wrote anything on this story. That said, a few writing style issues that leave an obvious inconsistency between the two of us aside, one thing I would like to chime in on is the way Ellie has been reacting to things on this one. First off is the previous page where Trish mentions pregnancy. Ellie, upon hearing about this being somehow related to pregnancy, would be incredibly curious about that subject and would not let her mother just drop it or be content with going along with things until she heard more juicy details about that one. | |||
Also, being 5, I don't think she would have a reaction like "that was fun, I want to do it again" to performing 3 bobs up and down on your cock. Most likely, she wouldn't know what to think and wouldn't simply report "that was fun" even if she did like it. Furthermore, if she did like it a lot, she would not just do 3 bobs and then get off, she would stay latched onto your cock and not relinquish it. The mere fact that she gets off after only 3 bobs if she is being written as a typical 5 year old implies that she actually thought it was weird and doesn't know what to make of it at best, or hated it at worst. | |||
With Ellie's character liking and trusting her mom so much, the most likely reaction is that she doesn't really see the appeal of sucking your cock but may decide that if her mommy says it's good then it must be good and maybe she will like it if she keeps doing it. Even with that opinion, it would not receive the response it did. She may use the same words, but with more hesitation and an "um" or two mixed in (although I would think entirely different dialogue would be more appropriate. | |||
Sorry to nit-pick at it when we have the fantastic situation of a new writer contributing, characters and characterization are just important to me so I need to stick up for one of the characters I have envisioned if I see them being portrayed wrong. (I can see where it would be easy to get Ellie wrong though, I haven't done as much with her yet.) [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 05:43, 25 October 2018 (CEST) | |||
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Nice! One note though, as I pointed out in one of the other paths, the Goldilox Cock doesn't change size, it makes the hole it's going in comfortably accommodate, and larger ones just feel plenty of pleasure from a smaller size. In fact, when combined with Perfect Fit, it sounds like it won't get smaller than the current 5 inches, as smaller holes still stretch comfortably to fit, and the cock grows to fit snugly in larger ones. I'm choosing to "get on with the sex", and if I may make a suggestion, start with Siobhan. Trish and the other three girls can kneel there and get a real close view of you filling up the older girl. Hopefully all five of them will have bellies full while lunch is served, then start all over lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 05:29, 25 October 2018 (CEST)
Hey, thanks for writing and contributing! It has been WAY too long since anyone other than me wrote anything on this story. That said, a few writing style issues that leave an obvious inconsistency between the two of us aside, one thing I would like to chime in on is the way Ellie has been reacting to things on this one. First off is the previous page where Trish mentions pregnancy. Ellie, upon hearing about this being somehow related to pregnancy, would be incredibly curious about that subject and would not let her mother just drop it or be content with going along with things until she heard more juicy details about that one.
Also, being 5, I don't think she would have a reaction like "that was fun, I want to do it again" to performing 3 bobs up and down on your cock. Most likely, she wouldn't know what to think and wouldn't simply report "that was fun" even if she did like it. Furthermore, if she did like it a lot, she would not just do 3 bobs and then get off, she would stay latched onto your cock and not relinquish it. The mere fact that she gets off after only 3 bobs if she is being written as a typical 5 year old implies that she actually thought it was weird and doesn't know what to make of it at best, or hated it at worst.
With Ellie's character liking and trusting her mom so much, the most likely reaction is that she doesn't really see the appeal of sucking your cock but may decide that if her mommy says it's good then it must be good and maybe she will like it if she keeps doing it. Even with that opinion, it would not receive the response it did. She may use the same words, but with more hesitation and an "um" or two mixed in (although I would think entirely different dialogue would be more appropriate.
Sorry to nit-pick at it when we have the fantastic situation of a new writer contributing, characters and characterization are just important to me so I need to stick up for one of the characters I have envisioned if I see them being portrayed wrong. (I can see where it would be easy to get Ellie wrong though, I haven't done as much with her yet.) Jemini (talk) 05:43, 25 October 2018 (CEST)