Talk:Life Hacks/Hallomod(gp-pre/pres-inf-im-cr'pay)/Have him drop his towel

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I'm not quite satisfied with my work on this page. I think I am starting to feel the effects of creative fatigue a little. Probably done writing for the day. Jemini (talk) 00:49, 22 January 2017 (CET)

I don't think it's as bad as you think it is; a little fast paced, but not bad! Either way no worries. I'll give you a break and post a request for the next one tomorrow :P --Jackmaster (talk) 00:57, 22 January 2017 (CET)

Well, I realize I have a rather high bar set for myself in terms of story quality, and people tend to feel it's good even when it's not up to my standards. That's not a reason to drop my standards though. At any rate, I am glad I waited to edit it, and also that you didn't cast a vote beings the part I altered was entirely at the end, including the vote options. The start was the part that I was dissatisfied with yesterday, but upon re-reading it with some separation I discovered the start was fine but it was the ending that had some plot holes and inconsistent elements that needed addressing, and then addressing them required bringing it in an entirely different direction. Jemini (talk) 23:49, 22 January 2017 (CET)

I thought I'd join in and expand on this branch a little. Despite it feeling a bit rushed before I did like where you were heading, so I just tried to add a bit of fun with some exposition. Hope you don't mind! Villenia (talk) 00:50, 23 January 2017 (CET)

Oh, I appreciate it. That was the exact sort of thing that was missing that was bothering me yesterday. I had given up on editing that part, but you gave it a pretty good touch-up. I like it. Jemini (talk) 01:05, 23 January 2017 (CET)

Well hey, as much as I will give positive feedback where it is due, I also know to trust the writer and the writer's instinct! I stand by it wasn't bad before, but after the edit it's pretty great. I'm in two minds about whether to edit anything unless I'm directly asked; I know it can be helpful to get some fresh input to cover things such as exposition, but I always worry that I'm writing something that doesn't work for the story or characters, or goes in the opposite direction the writer had in mind. --Jackmaster (talk) 09:18, 23 January 2017 (CET)

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