Talk:Yes/Characters

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Hmm... I'm thinking of chipping in, but you've done so much development on Chad and family that I hate to mess it up. I assume the two doctors at the bottom of the page are co-workers of Jill? Do you already have plans for them? I was thinking of adding a 13 yo son for one of them and starting a separate branch. Gary is too stupid, and it's pretty easy for girls to get most things they want already. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 18:45, 10 January 2017 (CET)

Yes, they are listed as her co-workers on her character sheet in fact. Take a look at the category page, I already have pictures for the characters. Kelly Redmond is Jill's Boss, Dani Preston is a sexual target of Gary's mom Leah. If you want, you can come up with your own family and I will help you get them set up. That way you don't have to worry about relationships I already have in planning. We can then work them into the current character relationships as we need to. --Elerneron (talk) 20:03, 10 January 2017 (CET)

Ah! I didn't see that. Had no idea that Gary's slutty mom worked with Jill. What is it they do at work? I'm envisioning something like women's fertility drugs or something that exposure to might affect male hormone levels. You have plans for those 3, so i may come up with a new family altogether. That means a bit more work though lol I've never contibuted more than comments on here, so i'll probably be hitting you and Jemini up for some help at some point --Notsooldpervert (talk) 20:15, 10 January 2017 (CET)

I'm always willing to lend a hand. --Elerneron (talk) 20:45, 10 January 2017 (CET)

Well you read quite a bit of our stuff. It has been my experience that that reading happens to improve your work a lot more than you would think. I think you are going to do a lot better than even you are realizing right now. (My advice, read some works you think are bad and try to avoid writing like that. Try and write more like the work you think is good.) Jemini (talk) 04:50, 11 January 2017 (CET)

There's a big difference between reading a lot, and writing. I can spot mistakes fairly easily, but coming up with story material is altogether different. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 10:02, 11 January 2017 (CET)

I'm serious, and I speak from experience. If you haven't done much writing, you may think they are different, but what you read really does have a huge influence on your own capability to write. But yeah, initial inspiration is the high hurdle you need to cross before unlocking your talent. My suggestion would be to open up a word document and start writing some of your own stuff on a completely unrelated topic, something you have 100% control over, before you go and start playing off the work of others. Basically, develop your own writing style. (and if you want some help, I wouldn't mind giving you further direction.) Jemini (talk) 10:10, 11 January 2017 (CET)

How are things going by the way? If you're having trouble with characters, I can help you there. If you wanted, we could make Marco Gomez older, or give him an older brother . . . unless you don't want to deal with a Hispanic family that is. I don't know how culturally diverse your experiences are. I was intending for them to be VERY upper-middle-class American, but still have some of their Mexican heritage represented, but I haven't written up anything on them, so they're still quite malleable. Making characters that are well thought out and logically interconnected comes naturally to me, so I'm willing to make a new family if you're struggling with it. Having the characters all written up can often spark story ideas just from their nature and how they interact with one another. --Elerneron (talk) 10:19, 11 January 2017 (CET)

Actually, I was thinking about it at work tonight. I'm leaning toward a skinny, geeky boy who has a secret crush on Emily but is too shy to do anything about it. Very smart, but rather akward and uncoordinated. Lives with his mother and grandmother who are both quite young (i have some family history worked up to explain early pregnancies for both of them). You haven't indicated what time of year it is (fall or spring). I've tried a bit of writing a few months ago and posted it on literotica.com under the same name i use here. One of the reasons for my writer's block with it is i keep leaning toward a loli story in my planning, but that site doesn't allow that. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 11:48, 11 January 2017 (CET)

I didn't plan specifically for what time of year it was, but I always have something going on sub-consciously. In this case I believe I was leaning toward the later part of the school year in the spring making: Chad, Gary, Maria, and Dana Sophomores in highschool, Gwen a freshman in highschool, Emily in her first year of middle school (6th grade), and Bree in kindergarten. We can put it in the fall, but that would mean moving everyone up a grade. If we did that I would want Chad to be in pre-calculus rather than trigonometry though, but I'd be fine making that change. --Elerneron (talk) 12:11, 11 January 2017 (CET)

I was thinking Spring too. I assume kids where you live start kindergarten at 6yo instead of 5 like most people i know (i live in the south, and having started at 5, i must agree that 6 would be better lol) I was thinking Cailen's (it means virile lol) step grandfather (and secretly his father) passed away the previous summer. That gives enough time for the family to have made good steps toward recovering from the loss. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 19:12, 11 January 2017 (CET)

They are generally 5 when they start kindergarten, and turn 6 during the school year or the following summer. --Elerneron (talk) 21:48, 11 January 2017 (CET)