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Hmm... well... trying to figure out how it would be modified if at all to conform with that stance. I can very well see where you're coming from on that one, but knowing her that information may mean that if it's changed at all it might be for her to like having his dick stuck up in her thinking it's really the thing she wasn't allowed to use because her mother didn't like it. I'll give it some thought. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 12:31, 1 October 2017 (CEST)
Hmm... well... trying to figure out how it would be modified if at all to conform with that stance. I can very well see where you're coming from on that one, but knowing her that information may mean that if it's changed at all it might be for her to like having his dick stuck up in her thinking it's really the thing she wasn't allowed to use because her mother didn't like it. I'll give it some thought.
 
(Also, I've sorta been pushing the references to other scenes to assume the most extreme route that doesn't result in a bad ending. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 12:31, 1 October 2017 (CEST)

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I actually had this section half-finished ever since I first wrote the earlier lead-in. I had started on it on my own before the other path got voted on, then I decided to just jump over and work on that and then this wound up staying here half finished as I worked on the rest of the story. Great to finally have it done and now off my staging word doccument where I kept having to cut-and-paste around it with every new post I wrote. Jemini (talk) 09:55, 1 October 2017 (CEST)


I love the scene, but I have a little conflict with her knowing what a tampon is and even having use one. It's a common myth that using a tampon destroy a girl's virginity, so I'm doubtful the town's authorities and church would condone it's use, at least in unmarried girls. Since we've already established that they have enough power to control the entrance of simple contraceptive medicine, it's logical they would also ban tampons, and force girls to endure their periods using only sanitary towels. I understand you're using her memory of the tampon to mitigate the impact of something entering her, but I think it's worth considering the point. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 10:09, 1 October 2017 (CEST)


Hmm... well... trying to figure out how it would be modified if at all to conform with that stance. I can very well see where you're coming from on that one, but knowing her that information may mean that if it's changed at all it might be for her to like having his dick stuck up in her thinking it's really the thing she wasn't allowed to use because her mother didn't like it. I'll give it some thought.

(Also, I've sorta been pushing the references to other scenes to assume the most extreme route that doesn't result in a bad ending. Jemini (talk) 12:31, 1 October 2017 (CEST)