Talk:Disciplinary Action/Disciplinary Office/First Week/Smoking/Burst In/Thiana
Let's make it all official. Fill out the paperwork "sentencing" her to a month of twice daily inseminations, including the weekends. On the weekends it can be the parent's choice of whether the father administers the punishment, or if they ask John to "work" on the weekends. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 22:56, 14 September 2017 (CEST)
I was in the middle of a boring family meeting, discretely reading my phone, when the most amazing thing happened. Someone had written a chapter for my story! I had prepared myself mentally not to expect participation until the story was much more advanced, so the simple fact that someone had taken the time to do so was thrilling.
I wanted to read the entry right then and there, but I couldn't afford to stay too long focused on my phone. A few minutes later I managed to see who had made the chapter, and then I had to focus on not jumping up and down in happiness. Jemini! THE Jemini had written for my story!
How I wished I was back home, so I could write this on an actual keyboard and really convey my enthusiasm. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 06:51, 16 September 2017 (CEST)
Never really sure what to do with lines like that giving me all this praise. On the one hand, I don't really feel like I deserve that kinda praise. On the other hand, I know I do try to be the best writer I can be and have contributed a lot to a point I can understand where it's coming from. At any rate, I don't really consider myself to be that much higher skill wise than a lot of the other great writers we have on this site, I just contribute more of my skills specifically to writing for this site in particular.
Anyway, this is a pretty good story. I have seen this general concept before, and I have seen it get horridly rushed and turn out rather lacking as a result. This story is quite different from my previous exposures to the concept, it actually practices a lot of restraint and I really like what you did with your spin on it of this both being a new program and the protagonist being new to the job. It's really an excellent touch. (I also really like your formatting. I learned something new looking over the code you used. It creates a very visually appealing and easy to follow layout.)
Anyway, I am split between projects, so while normally this would be the kinda cool concept that might draw me to become hyper engrosed for a while, in this case I need to hold myself back and keep up my dedication to The Lewd House. So, this is probably going to be a once in a while kinda thing. (Writing all the alternate texts for The Lewd House is getting a bit tedious, I may use this story as something of a reward to myself if I reach my daily goals in that project. In other words, The Lewd House has become work, and this story may become pleasure.) Jemini (talk) 13:56, 16 September 2017 (CEST)
You deserve all the praise and more for all the work you put into your stories and the enjoyment you gives us as result. Since right now I can't properly reward you economically, the least I can do is thank you. I'm glad you found my formatting useful, I was trying to follow the principle of "a good typography should result transparent to the reader" (I'm still not happy with the color of visited links, I do want it to be easily distinguishable from non-visited links, but right now I feel it's too close to the color of non-existing links).
I do want to point out that while the girl might have said Perl's name (perhaps just because she had a chat with her or with the internet to get her in trouble), Perl wasn't the girl on the matt. Perl is an honor student through and through, it will be this "new program" that corrupts her, otherwise she would have graduated top of her class, married and went on to became a bored mother and housewife. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 21:32, 16 September 2017 (CEST)
Oh there's a twist. The girl wasn't just on a mat, she was on Matt Marlow lol --Notsooldpervert (talk) 21:46, 16 September 2017 (CEST)
Ok, thanks. I was sorta operating under the false assumption that you had created profiles for all the characters referenced in the story so far and Pearl was the only one that made sense due to just the age of the girl on the matt. As you said though, it's still completely justifiable that "the girl" (who I have presumed to be Tihana Morandi due to the age and attitude fitting perfectly) would say those exact lines regardless of whether or not it was the truth. I added those lines under the false impression it really was her, but it's easy to adjust without having to scrub that line. (And it certainly makes things more interesting.) Jemini (talk) 06:09, 17 September 2017 (CEST)
I only created the characters I had already some idea of their participation in the story. Patrolling the school and finding the delinquents was Notsooldpervert's idea, so I had no previous plan for that path. Indeed Tihana was supposed to be the druggy, and I have no objections to Matt being the one on the mat (I blame my phone for the extra "m" in my previous post). --Tod Naturlich (talk) 04:13, 17 September 2017 (CEST)
I do like the idea of using Tiahna's comment as an excuse to get to meet Perl. Maybe get her naked for some fondling under some pretext. It shouldn't be hard since she's desirous of more intimate contact, and sees being "punished" as a good excuse to violate that societal taboo. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 04:38, 17 September 2017 (CEST)