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yea, it seems very out of character to me, John would definitely want this cherry on his dick. I vote that Tod Natürlich as the owner of the story rewrite this chapter to bring it back in character --[[User:Foalpoots|Foalpoots]] ([[User talk:Foalpoots|talk]]) 02:05, 4 January 2018 (CET)
yea, it seems very out of character to me, John would definitely want this cherry on his dick. I vote that Tod Natürlich as the owner of the story rewrite this chapter to bring it back in character --[[User:Foalpoots|Foalpoots]] ([[User talk:Foalpoots|talk]]) 02:05, 4 January 2018 (CET)
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Actually I don't think it is out of character for John. From most of his actions he has shown that he is caring and compassionate with most of the girls, the only ones he has gotten rough with have been the ones who were bitches to start with. He was only rough as long as he needed to be, once they stopped being bitches he was more gentile. Since Melisa is a sweet little four year old, he would have more reason to want to ensure her first time was pleasant, so she will be more willing and participate more in future sessions. Its not the Hymen that makes the breaking in of a virgin, its the first time they have sex. Quite a few virgins don't have hymens, some are broken riding bikes or horses, also most gymnast, dancers and cheerleaders don't have hymens due to the extreme stretches they have to do, which tear their hymens, without them even noticing (Something to keep in mind for the Cheerleader scenes). --[[User:Telgar|Telgar]] ([[User talk:Telgar|talk]]) 2154, 3 December 2017 (PST)
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I agree with Telgar on this one. He loves kids, he's not all about the rape or getting blood on his dick. There's plenty of older girls who require that kind of treatment (Tiahna and Lilianna for starters), the Franklin girls don't fall into that category. --[[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]] ([[User talk:Notsooldpervert|talk]]) 15:09, 4 January 2018 (CET)
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An interesting curiosity about my spontaneous writing style is that most of it is really subconscious. I don't have a particularly firm idea of the character's personality, motivation, or preferences on a conscious level at least, it is more like the character just speaks to me as I am writing. That said, when I read this section it seems exactly in line with John's character and I cannot see myself writing it any different if I were the one to write this section. At the very least, he wouldn't hurt her by taking her cherry with his dick. (I might have had him use his fingers more, but I do believe this works too.) [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 17:10, 4 January 2018 (CET)
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Jemini, I wright the same way too, I tend to sit down and write something, the characters personality comes out as I write. Though in the case of interactives, like this one, I do take past actions into account. It is only when I try and edit that I look at things, and go "Would this character do this." The only time I build stuff in advance is when I have long term goals, and then only what that goal is going to be and a general Idea on how to get there. Like the part I picked up with the McGregors. If the long term goal ends up not fitting with the character personalities that develop, the goal has to change. I think that might have been why I found it so hard to keep the voting story-line in the forum, the votes did not match what was being written, so I kept having to force it. --[[User:Telgar|Telgar]] ([[User talk:Telgar|talk]]) 10:18, 4 January 2018 (PST)
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I agree this is perfectly in line with John's character, and I have no desire to change it. I do want to mention that in several cultures, and most certainly in this town, a girl's value is heavily influenced by her virginity; and just like in most of those cultures, the town's definition of "virginity" emphasizes a lot the presence of the hymen. Now, in reality, hymens as proof of virginity are a myth, but that didn't stop men from claiming them (most likely because most men could not distinguish a hymen if it hit them), so while most cheerleaders will indeed have ruptured their hymens, it's very likely that John will still refer to them when he takes them, since he's been raised in that culture and doesn't have any medical training. --[[User:Tod Naturlich|Tod Naturlich]] ([[User talk:Tod Naturlich|talk]]) 04:50, 5 January 2018 (CET)
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One thing that would be an interesting twist, would be the one person who has had the training and is probably quite aware of the fact that they don't have intact Hymens. If and when John mentings the taking of their Hymens to her, she says something snide or educates him. After the fact of course.  --[[User:Telgar|Telgar]] ([[User talk:Telgar|talk]]) 20:20, 4 January 2018 (PST)
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Mrs. Varanno's actions don't really match her earlier attitude. I say on Meredith's turn, encourage her to stand closer for a better view. Then when she's really into it, and cheering you on, tell her to imagine it's her daughter, Gabrielle. Tell her find a reason for the girl to visit you, and she can watch her own daughter "like this", and possibly increase her shame by having her mother commit incest, and "force" her to eat the Gabby's cummy pussy. Then after Meredith leaves, offer to help her with your hand, during which you could remind her that with the new law in effect, the punishment doesn't even have to take place at school. She can do it in the privacy of your home (or hers, on Gabby's own bed), and the note in her file would just be to cover her "shame" if she winds up pregnant. --[[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]] ([[User talk:Notsooldpervert|talk]]) 03:12, 27 December 2019 (UTC)

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While I know it's unrealistic (as unrealistic as having sex with a 4-year-old), I'm kind of disappointed he used a dildo to break her hymen. Well, it's the first 4-year-old he has, so I guess he was extra careful, I just wish next time he actually decided to go the full-natural route. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 06:11, 2 January 2018 (CET)


He can still do that with her 6yo sister. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 06:34, 2 January 2018 (CET)


I wanted to show his compassionate side, since so many of the other sexual encounters, especially the first work, were more aggressive. I got the idea for the dildo from other stories I read where the author had the girl become distracted by the pleasure of her orgasm and so did not feel the pain of the loss of her virginity. That is almost impossible with the natural method. The other part was due to her young age, having regular sex with her without preparation would damage her more that should be acceptable. Lots of prep work would be needed and that is not possible with her hymen intact. He needed to gradually stretch her enough to enable her to accept his cock with minimal pain. He is starting to realize that his sex with these two young sisters is probably going to be a long term thing, as their mother shows no desire to stop it. Which is in fact actually true, she intends to keep it a semi-permanent thing going on as long as she can, mainly to hurt her husband. She is even currently planing on reporting more infractions, even if she has to make them up, to get them both and maybe their other sisters into sexual servitude, so she doesn't have to deal with them anymore. Her plan will only come to an end when it's pointed out to her that she will have to raise the children that result as her own, thus giving her more work to do. --Telgar (talk) 1044, 2 December 2017 (PST)


Which, with the fertility treatment, could soon mean all four of them pregnant, possibly with twins. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 20:14, 2 January 2018 (CET)


yea, it seems very out of character to me, John would definitely want this cherry on his dick. I vote that Tod Natürlich as the owner of the story rewrite this chapter to bring it back in character --Foalpoots (talk) 02:05, 4 January 2018 (CET)


Actually I don't think it is out of character for John. From most of his actions he has shown that he is caring and compassionate with most of the girls, the only ones he has gotten rough with have been the ones who were bitches to start with. He was only rough as long as he needed to be, once they stopped being bitches he was more gentile. Since Melisa is a sweet little four year old, he would have more reason to want to ensure her first time was pleasant, so she will be more willing and participate more in future sessions. Its not the Hymen that makes the breaking in of a virgin, its the first time they have sex. Quite a few virgins don't have hymens, some are broken riding bikes or horses, also most gymnast, dancers and cheerleaders don't have hymens due to the extreme stretches they have to do, which tear their hymens, without them even noticing (Something to keep in mind for the Cheerleader scenes). --Telgar (talk) 2154, 3 December 2017 (PST)


I agree with Telgar on this one. He loves kids, he's not all about the rape or getting blood on his dick. There's plenty of older girls who require that kind of treatment (Tiahna and Lilianna for starters), the Franklin girls don't fall into that category. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 15:09, 4 January 2018 (CET)


An interesting curiosity about my spontaneous writing style is that most of it is really subconscious. I don't have a particularly firm idea of the character's personality, motivation, or preferences on a conscious level at least, it is more like the character just speaks to me as I am writing. That said, when I read this section it seems exactly in line with John's character and I cannot see myself writing it any different if I were the one to write this section. At the very least, he wouldn't hurt her by taking her cherry with his dick. (I might have had him use his fingers more, but I do believe this works too.) Jemini (talk) 17:10, 4 January 2018 (CET)


Jemini, I wright the same way too, I tend to sit down and write something, the characters personality comes out as I write. Though in the case of interactives, like this one, I do take past actions into account. It is only when I try and edit that I look at things, and go "Would this character do this." The only time I build stuff in advance is when I have long term goals, and then only what that goal is going to be and a general Idea on how to get there. Like the part I picked up with the McGregors. If the long term goal ends up not fitting with the character personalities that develop, the goal has to change. I think that might have been why I found it so hard to keep the voting story-line in the forum, the votes did not match what was being written, so I kept having to force it. --Telgar (talk) 10:18, 4 January 2018 (PST)


I agree this is perfectly in line with John's character, and I have no desire to change it. I do want to mention that in several cultures, and most certainly in this town, a girl's value is heavily influenced by her virginity; and just like in most of those cultures, the town's definition of "virginity" emphasizes a lot the presence of the hymen. Now, in reality, hymens as proof of virginity are a myth, but that didn't stop men from claiming them (most likely because most men could not distinguish a hymen if it hit them), so while most cheerleaders will indeed have ruptured their hymens, it's very likely that John will still refer to them when he takes them, since he's been raised in that culture and doesn't have any medical training. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 04:50, 5 January 2018 (CET)


One thing that would be an interesting twist, would be the one person who has had the training and is probably quite aware of the fact that they don't have intact Hymens. If and when John mentings the taking of their Hymens to her, she says something snide or educates him. After the fact of course. --Telgar (talk) 20:20, 4 January 2018 (PST)


Mrs. Varanno's actions don't really match her earlier attitude. I say on Meredith's turn, encourage her to stand closer for a better view. Then when she's really into it, and cheering you on, tell her to imagine it's her daughter, Gabrielle. Tell her find a reason for the girl to visit you, and she can watch her own daughter "like this", and possibly increase her shame by having her mother commit incest, and "force" her to eat the Gabby's cummy pussy. Then after Meredith leaves, offer to help her with your hand, during which you could remind her that with the new law in effect, the punishment doesn't even have to take place at school. She can do it in the privacy of your home (or hers, on Gabby's own bed), and the note in her file would just be to cover her "shame" if she winds up pregnant. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 03:12, 27 December 2019 (UTC)