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Well then, would you mind if I gave it an edit? I would not change the content much unless you throw out that you approve of the idea Notsooldpervert is asking for. Unless you give the go-ahead for content changes as well, I would restrain the edit to grammatical errors. In fact, it kinda seems to be a standard that editing grammatical errors is fine, so I might just go ahead and do that. It is more that I may give it a second edit for content if you clear it. Pearl is a character I hadn't quite completely figured out, but after this post, I have a much more clear idea of it in my head now, so I'm pretty sure I can keep the characterization the same as you did here. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 03:14, 17 October 2017 (CEST) | Well then, would you mind if I gave it an edit? I would not change the content much unless you throw out that you approve of the idea Notsooldpervert is asking for. Unless you give the go-ahead for content changes as well, I would restrain the edit to grammatical errors. In fact, it kinda seems to be a standard that editing grammatical errors is fine, so I might just go ahead and do that. It is more that I may give it a second edit for content if you clear it. Pearl is a character I hadn't quite completely figured out, but after this post, I have a much more clear idea of it in my head now, so I'm pretty sure I can keep the characterization the same as you did here. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 03:14, 17 October 2017 (CEST) | ||
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Go right ahead, I really don't like how I wrote this, so feel free to change it. I was planning to incorporate [[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]]'s request as an extra scene, dividing this part and giving the reader the option to demand she removed she bra, panties or both. I also thought to include options to add to her punishment a pacifier or a baby bottle, since I'm trying to get more options out there. --[[User:Tod Naturlich|Tod Naturlich]] ([[User talk:Tod Naturlich|talk]]) 03:57, 17 October 2017 (CEST) | |||
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I'd probaly take her bra too. Ask her if she wears it to bed, and when she says "no" inform her "then they're not part of the pajamas" --Notsooldpervert (talk) 10:18, 15 October 2017 (CEST)
You have some peculiarities of the English language working against you here. It's ok, I'm sure you didn't know. Anyway, the problem is your use of the term "pajama." Pajama, the singular of pajamas, is a term that is almost never used in the English language. Mostly, the term "pajamas" is treated the same way as the term "pants," the only difference being that pajamas are described as a "set" or a "set of pajamas," whereas pants are described as a "pair." (a pair of pants.)
You would absolutely never use the term "a pajama." There is about one place I have ever heard of the singular form of pajamas being used, and that is in describing someone who is wearing pajamas as being "pajama-wearing." (Or some variations such as a body part of the "pajama-wearing" person being described as "pajama-covered" such as pearl's pajama-covered breasts that Notsooldpervert is interested in seeing.) Jemini (talk) 11:26, 15 October 2017 (CEST)
I have to make a lot of changes to this part, you are right that it has several issues both in editing and content. Unfortunately right now I'm playing babysitter for some people in the lab, so I won't have much free time this week. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 17:13, 16 October 2017 (CEST)
Well then, would you mind if I gave it an edit? I would not change the content much unless you throw out that you approve of the idea Notsooldpervert is asking for. Unless you give the go-ahead for content changes as well, I would restrain the edit to grammatical errors. In fact, it kinda seems to be a standard that editing grammatical errors is fine, so I might just go ahead and do that. It is more that I may give it a second edit for content if you clear it. Pearl is a character I hadn't quite completely figured out, but after this post, I have a much more clear idea of it in my head now, so I'm pretty sure I can keep the characterization the same as you did here. Jemini (talk) 03:14, 17 October 2017 (CEST)
Go right ahead, I really don't like how I wrote this, so feel free to change it. I was planning to incorporate Notsooldpervert's request as an extra scene, dividing this part and giving the reader the option to demand she removed she bra, panties or both. I also thought to include options to add to her punishment a pacifier or a baby bottle, since I'm trying to get more options out there. --Tod Naturlich (talk) 03:57, 17 October 2017 (CEST)